:)

hot damn

2nd chapter in and they already love each other . Normally I'd rant about this, but since Twilight is my best pone , I'll let it slide.
(EDIT) Ok I just finished the chapter. As I said in my comment last chapter, you need someone to clean this up. Lots of grammar mistakes and sentence structure problems. Now, the clop scene... meh. It was 50/50 for me, mainly because of how it was written. As I said before, it needs a clean up. Anyway, let's move on to Ch. 3.

Also,

"Wow it looks different to a ponies', they have a flat tip and your's is round, hairy, and big.", she petted the hardened member like a cat which brought a sample of pleasure, "I like it!".

I didn't know it was possible to have a hairy dick.

3831693 I have recently taken a AP psychology class (I am the only one who has an A+) after I wrote the clop so I will try to edit it with my improved manipulative skills >:) It is going to be hard to juggle with the structurally improved story (I improve as I wrote I Notice) at the end.

"Well, see ya, I'll be practicing mah Claptrap beep-box time, check it!", he made beep-boxing noises as he went to go outside to do his thing.

Uuuhhh...? It's BeatBoxing not Beepboxing~