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Creative Delight
Just trying to be a Creative Delight for you guys. Creativity starts with one wish, the wish to make, being it a painting, a story, or a building. It all still comes from a wish, a wish to make
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Welcome back, I'm glad that you're doing alright and here's hoping you get better.
I've always liked this back seater in someones mind, sadly it isn't used enough, can't wait to see what you've got in store..
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Thank you for the welcome back. I am also glad to be back, as I have a lot of ideas for the story.
The world is certainly having a time right now. Glad you're doing alright.
And can I just say, there is a huge amount of improvement in your writing. There are still some weird sentences, and I noticed a lot of capitalization issues but you've done fantastically with this.
This was the only large problem point in the whole story, and I did a quick fix on the first paragraph as an example.
The 'W' at the beginning of what should be capitalized, and I removed the "A creature she has never seen before." because by describing the thing as a "giant unknown creature", it's implied that she hasn't seen it before, and the extra sentence is a little clunky. I also removed the "asked Twilight Evenfall" because I didn't think it was necessary. A new paragraph wasn't started which meant it was still Twilight talking, and by the question mark, you know she's asking a question, and because the line references who she's talking to, well, I didn't think it was required. Unless "Twilight Evenfall" was meant to be a reference between the fact that the two characters are one in the same, in that case, it does have importance and can be left in. I also added 'know' into her question because it seemed like it fit there.
Outside of those couple of paragraphs (which still showed a great amount of improvement by the way), this chapter as a whole shows great progress. Keep writing, keep getting better. You're already on your way to becoming a great writer.
-Noobblue
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Glad to see that you are ok too. For most of the improvements, you can thank Grammarly Premium. It is a big help. Sometimes I think faster than I write, and that is why some words end up missing. But thank you for helping me out. I did an edit on the last chapter. Heeding your advice from last time and getting help from Grammarly Premium. Thank you very much, I wish you the best of health and good luck. Gonna fix it now.
Great work love it keep it up
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Thanks, I will. you have a great day, noon, even or night.
I'm a reviewer- I'll read this later
Is this dead? Hoping that isn't the case.
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it’s not dead. it’s more that I am dead. mental problem.
ah Alright looking forward to see what you have done
Great job
Alright here we go again lets see how things go form this new start
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Well, it is more of an extended version of the same chapter. Just hope you like it. Most of the other chapters are gonna be done in the same way at least chapters 2 and 3 are.
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So far i do
Looking forward to when you can continue this story. Despite your not liking the first chapter (I get it your toughest critic is yourself like most authors) I however enjoyed it and wanted you to know. Definently liked and followed
Excellent work
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Why thank you. Glad you like it.