Please take a seat and do not stir
As I tell stories that will curl your fur
Yes, take a seat on that fallen tree
For the stories of what I did see
So hush, dear children, for stories of old
Stories of mine and some I’ve been told
The world around seems so sugary sweet
But hear my stories of a much darker treat
A big thank you to Hartwick for this pic, and allowing me to use it for this fic.
http://harwicks-art.deviantart.com/art/Zecora-403075849
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Am I the only one who read that in Zecora's voice?
A half-decent effort at a difficult task.
To rhyme without fail is not a small ask.
In several instances, you stuttered and stammered;
so check over your work for spelling and grammar;
and do not forget your punctuation,
for that was quite lacking through the duration.
And yet the art of the poet is not beyond you to learn
so I wish you success that more skill you might earn.
And as I await to see improvement in chapter two
I offer this gift, and pray that it guides you.
http://www.rhymezone.com/?loc=bar
3275489
Nope.
3275496
Thanks for the advice
I wrote this in a rush and didn't yet re-read it. I know that's really not the best strategy in sharing stories, but I really wanted to see how people would respond in order to see how I will carry on with this.
I never really like putting punctuation in my poetry. I just don't bother putting punctuation at the ends of lines for the most part, and don't particularly plan to. However, I wouldn't be surprised if I have made faults in the punctuation that I do use in this.
The biggest thing for me here, is getting into the tone of Zecora. There's more to it than just rhyme. I have to somehow get myself into her style of speech and avoid sticking to my comfort zone.
I've been writing poetry for a pretty long time, so using rhyme zone really doesn't feel right to me at all.
oh my god this was done extremely well
3280720
Thank you!
These are a fun addition for the month of October! Quite the impressive use of your rhyming skills as well... Composing such adventuresome (and timberwolf infested) poetry cannot be easy, but these do our favorite zebra proud and are easy to read in her voice!
3289641
Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me.
Zebras eat meat?
3300074
haha, in this story yes.
3300074
It's weird, but I wanted to think up something random for this one.
Too weird?
Too weird; there's lots of other things they could be eating.
3308198
Alright, I suppose I'll change it.
Thanks for your input.