Hi..... Sirius Blacks girlfriend your looking at ;)
'Cavete"
Strange peices of metal.....
It was all very queer.....
Pinkie Pie queer.....
(The characters are Human)
*Dedicated to my 5 best friends*
I really hope you like it.... its my first story (with a lot of help from my best friend) and please comment Thank you! (I know its not the best but try as it is :)
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Hmmmmmm.... (strokes non-existent beard)
It seems a bit rushed but interesting.
Grammar-wise not bad, only counted a few mistakes. Nothing major.
Are they ponies or anthro or humans? That needs to be said.
Although, I would like to know where Twilight is...
I'll see where this is going for now, but try and slow it down a bit next chapter.
Thank you! I know it was very rushed... i kinda felt that too.... and Yes... i think i have slowed it down alot for the next chapter. Thanks for reviewing! It made me very happy!
Ooh and twilight is back at canterlot for her 'princess duties' didnt i mention that when pinkie found the peice of metal?
When are u gonna post chap two? Me dying ta know...
Tommarow RainbowJack2000 :)
I bet this is a sick twisted game of Twilight's to see how her friends are getting along without her.
And yes I did like the slower pace, It didn't feel as rushed as last chapter.
Once again few grammar mistakes, but nothing major.
I also like how you answered my questions about Twilight's whereabouts and their body structure in the story instead of taking the easy way out and just putting it in the story summery or a comment.
3227782 Thanks, and no it isnt a sick twisted way of Twi... as far as i have planned that is...