The Wheel and the Butterfly
A Dan X Pinkie Pie saga
Part 8 Dan & Pinkie Vs. Ordinary Week
Chapter 64: Pinkie Vs. Vamparty
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Becky struggled vainly in the grip of the two vampires, attempting to twist her arms out of there vice-like grasps.
“Now calm down, girly.” The one in the leather jacket said. “This will be a lot easier on you if you don’t resist.”
The female vampire chuckled. “We can always go ahead and make it painful anyways.”
“Hey, guys.” The third vampire spoke up. “Wasn’t she talking to some…”
‘Shhhlltheeenk’
The vampire suddenly found completing his sentence or even talking difficult given that a silvered katana blade had just sliced neatly through his neck.
Ninja Dave silently hit the ground, landing neatly on his feet and one hand, the other having drawn his katana on the way to the ground. His glasses has been removed as had the hood to his nun’s habit.
The beheaded vampire’s entire body sparked brightly as if it had been lit aflame and quickly reduced to a pile of ash that littered the cavern floor.
Startled the two vampire’s loosened their grip on Becky.
“Hey, what the he…” ‘Shshshshsh’ “AHHHHHHHH!” The male vampire screamed as his chin began to smoke from contact with holy water.
“Where did you…” ‘Thopthopthop’ “AIEEEEEEEEEEE!” The female vampire screeched as silver pellets pierced the fleshy skin behind her chin.
Becky wasted no time and taking advantage of her would be assailants distracted state, having reached for the two boxy guns in her cassock and firing them point blank. She easily escaped their grasp and rushed towards Ninja Dave.
“Where did you go?” Becky asked with a mild hint of irritation in her voice as she leveled her weapons at the vampires.
“Up.” Ninja Dave replied simply.
“You’re going to pay, for that girly…” The remaining male vampire growled out.
“Boy or girl?” Ninja Dave asked Becky as he nodded towards the vampires.
The female vampire spit out number of pellets, wafts of smoke came out of her mouth. “I’m gonna bleed you dry, you ugly waste of flesh.” She growled out in a now, somewhat gravelly voice.
The male vampire looked over Dave’s attire. “Dude, are you wearing a dress?”
“Girl.” Becky answered.
“Boy.” Dave said simultaneously.
Becky leveled her weapons at the female vampire as Dave charged forward, holding his katana blade pointed behind him.
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“Rock goes up!” Pinkie said cheerfully as she pulled on a one of the lamps.
A taunt chin retracted up into the ceiling, dragging up a large, rectangular carved, spiked rock with it.
‘Chinkchinkchinkchinkchinkchink’
Mr. Mumbles perched on Pinkie’s shoulder, watching the rock retract back up into the ceiling.
“Rock goes down!” Pinkie said as she pulled another lamp.
‘THWOMP!’
“Rock goes up!”
‘Chinkchinkchinkchinkchinkchink’
“Rock goes down!”
‘THWOMP!’
“Rock goes up!”
‘Chinkchinkchinkchinkchinkchink’
“What’s that crate doing on that wagon?”
“Eeeeek!” Pinkie cried in alarm, grabbing the wagon holding Cratey, quickly positioning it, and pulling the tiny lever attached to the small catapult inside.
‘TOING!’
Cratey flew from his position on the wagon, on a collision course for the unknown voice.
“Oh no! That crate is coming right for us!”
‘POW!’
“Ahh! I just got hit by a crate covered in silver wire and it burns!”
A man with slicked back, jet black hair, dressed in black denim pants and a button up black shirt sighed. “Ed, you are without a doubt the worst vampire. ever!”
“Whoops!” Pinkie exclaimed looking over the group of darkly clothed individuals and ‘Ed’ who wore a light-blue button up shirt, and writhed in pain from under Cratey. “Sorry!” Pinkie offered.
“Pffft…whatever.” The female of the group said dismissively, as she flicked out a bit of her long, blond hair out with her hand. “No one likes Ed.”
“Aw, come on guys!” Ed said, wincing as he pushed the crate off of him, his hand smoking slightly from contact with the silver wire as he did. “Vampire solidarity!”
“Shup UP, Ed!” A male vampire with long brown hair cried, dressed in a long, black leather duster. “No one likes your stupid” –The vampire rolled his eyes and air quoted—“‘vampire solidarity’ nonsense.”
“Hey! You guys shouldn’t be so mean to him!” Pinkie insisted.
“Lady, you don’t even know him!” The male vampire dressed all in black said. “And you’re better for it!” He insisted, pointing an assertive index finger at Pinkie.
“That’s cold, Steve.” Ed said, his once flawless, granite skin now sporting several reddish black lines across his face.
“Du’h Ed! I’m a vampire!” Steve replied. “We’re supposed to be cold!”
“Still, doesn’t mean we have to be hostile to one another.” Ed argued as he stood up.
The female vampire folder her arms across her charcoal colored blouse. “Ed, you’re just horrible, you’re lucky the boss thinks your abilities might be useful or someone would have staked you long ago.”
Pinkie walked over towards the group and put a sympathetic hand on Ed’s shoulder. “Awww, leave him alone! I’m sure he’s trying the best he can!”
Ed grasped Pinkie’s hand with both of his and looked deep into her sky-blue eyes with his liquid, golden topaz eyes. “Thank you, but I’m afraid the tragic nature of my condition must mean you and I cannot be together.”
Steve sighed heavily and rolled his eyes. “Oh, here we go…”
The other two vampires, likewise made similar signs of irritation and disgust.
Pinkie gave Ed a blank stare. “Uh…”
“No!” Ed said forcefully. “For your own good you must not fall in love me!” Ed closed his eyes, and placed the back of a hand up to his forehead for dramatic effect. “We’re just from two different worlds! And I’m afraid I’m destined to be alone!”
“Oh…Okay!” Pinkie replied cheerfully as she retracted her gloved hand.
“Huh?” Ed uttered in confusion. “But I thought…”
“Oh my GOSH, Ed.” The vampire in the leather duster exclaimed. “No woman on the planet is dumb enough to fall for your ridiculous ‘tragic figure’ shtick!”
“Whatever, James!” Ed said. “You’re just jealous because no one thinks your stupid leather jacket is cool.”
“IT’S A DUSTER!” James replied angrily. He motioned to Pinkie. “Even she’s dressed in one!”
Pinkie nodded her head up and down vigorously. “It’s true!”
“James’s duster might be lamer than he thinks,” The female vampire said,--
“Hey!” James protested.
--“but at least James is smart enough not to try to woo anyone with such a ridiculous song and dance.”
“But…” Ed protested, “but, I’m impossibly handsome to the point of being almost godlike and have perfectly quaffed bronze hair!” He whined.
“DID SOMEONE SAY RIDICULOUS SONG AND DANCE?!” Pinkie exclaimed.
“…What?” Steve uttered.
“Ooooh! Here in this creepy cave”
“I just made some brand new friends!”
“Now let’s party from the grave”
“And let this shindig beeegiiin!”
Pinkie enthusiastically wrapped her arms around the four vampires who grunted out a trio of pained replies with Ed seemingly enjoying the contact.
“Merrow!” Mr. Mumbles mewed from Pinkie’s shoulder.
“ULGHK!” The female vampire exclaimed in a pained tone. “Lady, what the heck! It’s like you’re wrapped in pure unpleasantness!”
“Awww, come on, Sarah!” Ed exclaimed. “Just enjoy the feeling of vampire togetherness!”
“It’s Mahalath.” Sarah replied angrily.
“Cough…cough…Sarah,” Steve choked out, “No one…ulgh…thinks your ridiculous made up name is cool.”
“IT’S A SUCCUBI!” Sarah insisted. “It’s from…cough…Kabbalah!” She said forcefully. “Read a book, STEVE!”
“NO ONE WANTS TO READ YOUR STUPID NEW AGE GARBAGE!” Steve shouted back.
“IT’S NOT NEW AGE, IT’S JEWISH LORE!” Sarah screamed in reply. “AND AT LEAST I CAN DRESS IN SOMETHING OTHER THAN BLACK!”
“BLACK IS SLIMMING!” Steve shot back.
“Cough…WHY ARE WE STILL LETTING HER HUG US?!” James demanded.
“Shhh,” Ed whispered quietly, “just let the good vibes flow through you...”
“THE GOOD VIBES FEEL LIKE PAIN AND SICKNESS!” James insisted.
Pinkie broke her hug and began gently patting James’s cheek.
‘Pap’
‘Pap’
“Shush, shush,” Pinkie whispered quietly, “just let the negativity flow out of you…”
“HURCK!” James grunted out a sickened sound has his eyes rolled back into his head and he collapsed into a heap on the floor.
“Oh no!” Pinkie cried. She leaned down and began to gently shake James. “Are you alright?”
James began to foam at the mouth in reply.
The remaining standing vampires looked at the scene in front of them in concern.
“Huddle up crew.” Steve commanded.
Ed and Sarah joined him in a three vampire huddle.
“Alright, apparently none of us can touch her without feeling ill…” Steve began.
“I can!” Ed said happily.
“Shut up, Ed.” Steve said as he quickly shot Ed a glare. “I’m going to get backup while you two keep her distracted.”
“What?! Why do I get stuck with the crazy woman and Ed?!” Sarah protested.
“Because…BECAUSE!” Steve insisted.
“Hey! What are we talking about?” Pinkie asked, somehow having added herself to the huddle in between Steve and Sarah.
“Mew?”
Steve and Sarah recoiled from Pinkie’s touch.
“Uh,” Sarah uttered, “we…were…erm”
Steve slowly backed away and mouthed ‘party’ to Sarah.
“We were just talking about how awesome our vamparty is going to be!” Sarah said, grinning nervously.
I can’t believe I just said that out loud…
Pinkie gasped loudly. “VAMPARTY?! Now you’re talking my language!” Pinkie leaned in close to Sarah. “My language is the language of party.” Pinkie explained quietly.
Sarah shuddered at the near contact. “Uhhh…I got that…”
“LET’S GET THIS ROCKING PARTY STARTED WITH A ROCK!” Pinkie declared as she pulled on one of the lamps.
‘THWOMP!’
“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”
Pinkie, Sarah, and Ed all turned towards the loud noise and scream to see Steve flailing from under the large, spiked rock.
Sarah and Ed gawked, while Pinkie went for the other lever in a slight panic.
“I CAN FIX THIS!” Pinkie insisted.
‘Chinkchinkchinkchinkchinkchink’
Pinkie rushed over to the fallen Vampire.
“Are you okay? Anything broken?” Pinkie asked as she reached for Steve’s hands.
Steve grabbed Pinkie’s hands and immediately regretted it, as waves of discomfort and sickness washed over him.
Pinkie began to tremble and looked up. “Uh-oh…” She quickly took a few large steps beck.
‘THWOMP!’
“WHY?!” Steve cried out.
“Wasn’t me!” Pinkie insisted as she held up her hands.
Sarah and Ed began laughing as they stood near the lamp that caused the rock to fall.
Pinkie pouted. “Guys, that’s not funny! He could be really hurt.”
“It’s okay!” Sarah insisted. “He’s a vampire! This can’t kill him…”
‘Chinkchinkchinkchinkchinkchink’
“Oh…well…I guess that makes sense…” Pinkie said, glancing towards the rim of her hat briefly.
‘THWOMP!’
“ARGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! YOU GUYS ARE WADS!”
Sarah and Ed merely laughed harder in response to the vampire’s pain.
Pinkie quickly zipped over and placed her hands over Sarah’s. “Now, I think that’s enough rocky fun…”
“Hulrk…” Sarah grunted as she puffed out her cheeks. “Uh, yeah…sure…” She responded retracting her hand.
“Oooo! I know what we can do that is fun!” Pinkie declared. She quickly set back up the wagon, Cratey, and Mr. Mumbles.
“Hit it, Mr. Mumbles!” Pinkie commanded.
“Merow!” Mr. Mumbles began to bat at the wall once again, causing the lights to flicker.
“VAMPARTY RAVE!” Pinkie declared as she rushed over to Sarah and grabbed her hands, pulling her out towards the center of the open tunnel.
“NO! Wait…” Sarah pleaded.
*soon*
‘THUMP’
Sarah collapsed to the ground in a heap.
“Whoops! Guess I partied a little hard there…” Pinkie mused, looking over the downed female vampire.
“Uh…she’ll be fine…” Ed said. “Probably,” he added. “Hey! I have an idea, why don’t I show you to the whole gang!” Ed said in an excited tone.
Pinkie gasped. “So we can have an even BIGGER vamparty!?”
Ed nodded. “Absolutely!” Ed reached out and grasped Pinkie’s hands as he walked her down the tunnel. “Let’s go!”
Pinkie quickly grabbed the wagon’s handle as she began walking with Ed. “Yay!” She exclaimed. “Now please let go of my hand.” She added.
Ed awkwardly let go of the hand he was holding. “Erm…sorry…”
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‘Thopthopthop…’
Becky rapidly depressed the trigger on her pellet gun while spraying a jet of holy water out with her squirt gun.
Her opponent, ducked and weaved, covering her face as she approached Becky, still taking several silver pellets to the arms which began to smoke on contact with her skin.
‘Sshhwosh’ ‘Sshhwosh’
Dave took a couple of swings at his opponent who dodged to the side of each one. “Heh, you’re fast for a human, but not fast enough.”
‘Thunk!’
The vampire looked up at the shuriken now imbedded in his forehead.
“Hey! Nice aim, but you need silv…”
‘Shhhllllshh’
“GRAAAA!”
The vampire recoiled as Dave’s katana cut shallowly through his abdomen.
“You talk a lot for a guy in a fight.” Dave commented.
The female vampire got within striking distance of Becky. She swiped out her hand and easily batted the pellet gun away, then followed this up by grasping Becky’s shoulder hard. She pulled her free hand back in preparation to strike at Becky.
Becky quickly moved her squirt gun into position and shot one more stream of holy water.
“AHHHEEEEK!” The vampire shrieked as her hand began smoke, hitting holy water before she could thrust her fingers into Becky’s flesh. Instead she slammed clumsily into Becky, taking both girls to the ground.
Becky’s squirt gun clattered to the ground and slid on tunnel floor out of reach.
“Alright, girly man.” The male vampire uttered out with a smirk. “Time to show you just how fast a vampire can be.”
Dave paused as his target suddenly became a blur that escaped his field of vision.
The vampire suddenly appeared behind Dave, reaching out hands for the ninja’s neck.
“Got you”--‘Shhlllonthg!’—“Hughk…” The vampire grunted.
Dave sighed glancing behind him as he withdrew his katana from the Vampire’s chest. “Behind, dude? Seriously? Really creative there!” Dave said sarcastically.
Dave turned to face his opponent who dropped to his knees.
The female vampire’s eyes widened hungrily as she held Becky down with her weight. “Time to die!” She announced as she opened her fanged mouth wide.
Becky quickly dove her hand into her satchel, then pulled it out, positioning it in between her attacker as the vampire lunged forth.
‘Thhulorch!’
Becky grinned. “Big Mistake!”
The vampire looked down at the stake in her chest as Becky shimmed out from under.
“I hate you sooo much!” The vampire hissed.
“WAIT!” The remaining vampire pleaded as Dave raised his sword. “If you kill me, you two will never find a way out of here!”
Dave glanced at Becky and her opponent as the later sparked and turned to ash.
“I think we’ll manage.” He answered as he swung his sword neatly through the vampire’s neck.
‘Shhhlltheeenk’
Dave turned towards Becky as the vampire corpse behind him turned to ash. “Alright, I admit it, you are tougher than you look.”
Becky looked up at Dave with a shocked expression on her face.
“Uh…are you okay? Oh, geez…I guess this is your first time killing someone…” Dave said with a tone of concern in his voice.
“WE’RE REAL LIFE VAMPIRE HUNTERS, DUDE!” Becky said enthusiastically as she jumped to her feet.
Dave breathed a sigh of relief. “Yeah, I guess we…” Dave was interrupted as Becky leapt at him without warning, wrapping her arms around him and pushing her lips against his.
Dave froze, still holding onto his katana in one hand, unsure of what, if anything, he should be doing.
Becky opened her eyes wide and retracted her lips and hands. “Uh…sorry…erm…just…just got caught up in the moment.” She explained.
Dave chuckled nervously. “Heh, right…it’s all good.” He replied.
The pair of vampire hunters sheepishly avoided eye contact.
“We should…” Becky said trailing off.
“…Find Pinkie?” Dave suggested.
Becky turned to face Dave. “Right! Totally! We should totally do that!”
Dave nodded. “Totally.” He agreed, sheathing his katana.
Dave and Becky began to continue their journey down the dimly lit tunnel in awkward silence.
“…”
“…”
“………”
“………”
“So uh…” Dave began breaking the silence.
“Ummm-hmmm!?” Becky replied a little too enthusiastically, looking up at Dave.
“Er…I was thinking…after we meet up with Dan and Pinkie and they get back their game system, maybe you and I can..?”
Becky began to grin. “Ummmmmm-hmmmmmmmm!?”
‘Click’
“Uh-oh…” Becky uttered as she looked down at her foot, and more importantly, the rock that had just clicked underneath it.
The ground opened up beneath Becky and Dave, and they fell into the darkness below.
Heh, Somehow I had a feeling that you were going to ship Becky and Ninja Dave!
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What can I say? I'm a sucker for romance. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png
Ed, eh? Heh. Heh.
Heh.
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Hehe, I decided not to be subtle with that one.
Question? Are you going to use cannon from todays episode in the next chapter, because it looks like my theory about "equestrian vegetarian vampirism" is correct seeing how Fluttershy seems to contract it
and even if you aren't using events form season 4, this guys...
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should still exists and pinkie should know about them. I still think Ed's variant is still the lamer of the two via it's association with him despite his useful immunity to most vampire weakness's.
Fruit Vampire Fluttershy is a far better Vampire then Ed.
Speaking of variants, I could not for the life of me find the show that I saw the mosquito queen on, so I'll describe her myself.
She is a withered old lady who does most of her talking thru her Human lackey "son" but is a powerful shape shifter who can become anything from a swarm of countless insects to a hideous giant monster the size of a building.
She commands three different types of mosquito drones.
harvests that are the size of regular mosquitos that collect her blood for her, working in a swarm they can bleed a man dry in minutes or even pick someone up and fly off with them.
brain-jackers the size of small birds, they can take control of a hosts body if they can loge in the back of there necks
and finally mounts the size of horses that are used as, well, flying mount for her human minions(brain-jacked or otherwise) or in this case vampire allies
As for weakness's, silver and wooden stakes never came up in the show she was in so I don't know how they'd affect her, but she is weak to holy objects (but unfortunately she can make un-holy water that can de-sanctify anything it gets on), sunlight can incinerate her drones and weaken her to the point she cant shape shift but wont outright kill her. But her biggest weakness is that the blood of anyone who has a decent amount of garlic in there system will kill her, it will kill her harvesters(and brain-jackers) too, so that acts as a buffer preventing any tainted blood from getting back to her and she never feeds directly unless she is provoked to(that's how they killed her in the show)
Ed is surprisingly resistant to the garlic oil in Pinkie's gloves. And I am a little curious as to the nature of his "Powers". Still, though, what kind of dweeb tries to use reverse psychology to score a date? Poser.
That said the group around Pinkie were all kind of fail-Vamps. I mean, one was named (by herself) after an obscure night creature, and another was wearing a full leather duster, which is an in universe Angel reference whether you intended it to be so or not. Last one just kind of failed at making an impression.
Their master really should have had better vetting processes. There is a fine line between minions competent enough to be useful, and competent enough to organize a coup. Employees are the bane of any Evil Overlord.
Fruit Vampire Fluttershy is the resalt of Twilight magic mixup but im still saiing
Ed the vampire? For some odd reason this reminded of the Ed Edd n' Eddy show. Weird.
And Steve's joined the "arguing with himself" club.
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I was rooting for them all along.
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Fixed! Thanks!
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I haven't watched today's episode, yet (though I will).
I'm trying to keep this taking place after all available show and comic book canon. This has forced me to retcon the prologue with an alt version that will eventually take over as the real beginning (and the Twilight Vs. Discord chapter probably could use a tweak or two). Though, season four has given me more ideas and chapters for later, so I'm not complaining.
I just hope Pinkie never gets shipped with any pony canonically on the show. Otherwise that pony might need to be put on a bus...or get hit with one.
Anyhow, Vampirism was mentioned in the comics, so this is where I got the idea that Twilight and Pinkie would already know how vampires work. Though, I'll certainly see if today's episode makes me want to retool anything.
The mosquito Queen sounds like an interesting idea. I'll keep it in mind possibly for a little ark, I think I mostly have this one sorted. Though, you guys have me thinking I need to do more with Vampires at some point, I've gotten a lot of comments and suggestions this ark.
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Heh, it's not garlic, though that's a really good idea. It's something else on Pinkie's personage that's making the Vampire's feel ill. Ed's name, physical description, and the fact that he's not effected is something of a hint here.
And yeah, the four definitely where more comic relief here than anything. They're all still inhumanly strong, and what have you, but they sort of got caught up in arguing with each-other over doing anything effective (or trying to do something effective and getting killed).
I'm getting the recent feeling that people are getting to the finding mistakes before me nowadays.
I feel sad
... And maybe a bit happy for the people who found the mistakes
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Good on you!
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Also good chapter :D
“I think…I think I ship Dave and Becky.” Selias said with a slightly embarrassed tone.
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Pinkie being the exception to most rules by dint of being herself, it could be nearly anything that's causing them to burn on contact.
For all we know, the seals on her coat/gloves are functional, or Dan washes their clothes in holy water he makes by the gallon "just in case". Really, nothing is surprising anymore. My suspension of disbelief has been stretched to the point that the fantastic barely registers. It just is.
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That's actually what I love about writing these two, between the two of them and the abilities they already posses from their respective shows, I can write almost anything and no one questions it.
Pinkie and Dan figure out a fairy broke into their home because they licked glitter Pinkie found on the floor? Sure, why not? They're just weird enough for that to make sense. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Emoticons/shrug_Derpy_Hooves.png
3694838 No canon confirmation but I think Fluttershy is now a pseudo-vampire, at lest her origin story reminds me of Morbius the Living Vampire from spider-man. Just instead of vampire bats and electroshock therapy, she got vampire fruit bats and Twilight messing up a spell
I would think Fluttershy would need more reassuring that Dan wont set her on fire after this, and if she can "at will" it, I'd love to see his reaction to her Flutterbat form.
As for pony shipping, Weird Al is rumored to make a gest appearance. He and pinkie are going to start as rivals, but you know how that wind blows in the fandom. But look on the bright side, Dan Vs. Weird Al Yankovic has a nice ring for a chapter name.
I told you about the Mosquito Queen because I consider her the creepiest of vampires, but that just me and my allergy to mosquitos, and I thought that the way she was killed in the show was a vary Dan move. If you need a reason to set Dan off, in the show she had her "son" distribute a bug repellent that actually attracted her harvesters, that or it could just be that be that Becky sticks with "real" vampire hunting after this.
BND second date!
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I've seen some info on pony!Weird Al. Fan shipping between Pinkie and him is inevitable (actually, I was probably amongst the first to speculate this on the forums).
Though, I doubt they'd canonically ship Pinkie with a character who is essentially a celebrity stand in.
3695541 that wont stop Dan from getting jealous if he misinterpret something
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True.
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Just watched the new episode.
I'm curious to see if they actually do something with this or if the ending was more of a throw-away gag.
I would like to see more bat!Flutters. I was hoping we'd get to see her coherent during her transformation and have her actually deal with the fact she's changed as well as the other characters getting to talk with new, Bat!Flutters. No such luck.
3695675 No such luck indeed, that would have been nice. I did like Pinkies "Who's on first" bit at the end thou
I think I will put this in my collection of stories that include Harry Dresden, Basil Fawlty, but especially Blackadder.
With some Holy Grail and Life Of Brian etc.
Sparkly Vampires? Wonder just what the Boss actually is,and if burning with advanced fire plus will be enough.
Pinkie, I cast Cap Break.
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Thanks!
Speaking of which, I keep wondering if I can somehow fit a Blackadder reference in somehow...I guess Pinkie announcing "I have cunning a plan" may be a little too subtle...
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Dont frget the giant excessively riced turnip that gives Dn the idea to take on GM food and evil companies takeing whathe hates, nature, an trying to pass it off as the pure, junk food.
Then theres the problem with shipping, Flash Heart and anything you care to abuse.
Then thers the fake costumes. Oh look, genuine cat hair, its evn got teh collars on.Mr Mumbles wants REVENGE
Are you sure Dan isnt a decendant of Blackadder in sme way?
Baldrick? What I find suprising, is just how much cream you managed to get out of such a small cat.
Hmm..Boxed set.
3694838 Bit of advice, find a spot in canon that works for your story and nail it down as the start point. You will drive yourself insane trying to retcon everything in, not to mention destroy the story you are crafting and force me to shred my sketchbook.
None of us want that.
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It's good advice.
Note that I have a limit to what degree I'm willing to retcon.
I actually sat and thought about the (Season 4 Spoiler) Harmony Tree before I decided it was something I wanted to touch. I realized it actually helped address a few plot points I hadn't completely fleshed out and incorporate it for the benefit of what I eventually intend to write.
If Pinkie really got a coltfriend, or season 10 rolls around and suddenly the Mane 8 are fighting intergalactic crime with their magic, space mechas, I think I'd happily slap "Alternative Universe" as tag #6 and continue writing.
Gotta admit, that magic, mystery box has me a bit unnerved.
Edit: I just realized this implies I might be writing this thing six years from now.
Not sure if I have THAT much material...
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So who else called this the second they heard Dan call them up?
3698167 Psssh, don't doubt yourself too much.
I believe in you! So here's to six years of the Wheel!
I'm kind of surprised no one directly mentioned who Ed was obviously parodying, i'm really hoping there will be a running gag of Becky always activating all traps in this kinds of scenarios.
I see the shipping has been doubled. Good for you, though I can see an otaku/comic book nerd totally digging on a real ninja.
also I might be jumping the gun here (no pun intended) but I was thinking of this when Dave and Becky were fighting.
too soon? should I hold on to that for Pinkie's eventual vampire fight?
Since I seem to have outpaced MythrilMoth by numerous chapters, I've decided to step back in all these weeks later. I may or may not be doing this for all chapters following this one, and when Myth catches up, they may find more. But here's what I've got for this chapter:
Their, not there.
Get rid of the apostrophe in vampires.
Ditch the comma.
I think you meant a taut chain, and rectangular carved should be rectangularly carved.
Is granite flawless? I've heard of ivory, porcelain and marble but never granite skin. If that's what you wanted then leave it be.
I personally write duh without an apostrophe. But style choices can be a thing.
Accidentally a comma.
began to smoke
slid on the tunnel floor
Dave sighed, glancing behind him
latter
The vampire shrieked as her hand began smoke
1. Began to smoke.
BATS, never as good as CATS
We've secretly replaced Pinkie's regular Dan with Dan from Street Fighter. Let's see if she notices.
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You do a lot of research
4895898 He is a totally insane genius. Like me. But with a whole lot more time.
I, on the other hand, am a scientist who must spend much time doing sciency things. With mice and microRNA!!
Pinkie Pie? More like Pinkie WHY!
5202953 I see what you did there
Haha, Ed.
Surely he beith the vampire who sullies the family of the guy that voices Optimus Prime. xDD
Nice Ace Venture reference!
I do believe that I wish to see Ed suffer an acute case of "you're dead you failure of a vampire wretch, you can't even die right the first time, so you needed my help!"
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RNA is already micro.
WHAT KIND OF SCIENTIST ARE YOU?
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Pseudoscientist.
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I noticed this tid-bit, and kudos to you Justice; you ended up having a lot more than 6 years years of material! And, frankly, that makes me very happy. I hope this fic ends up being one that just keeps on givin’.
Well, giving good things. I hope this isn’t a point of tension or anything.