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Analsaurus


Hi there. I'm a bit new to writing, but I've decided to try my luck at clopfics, particularly, ones that specialize in... well... anal.

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Somewhat surprised at the dislikes. While it's admittedly shameless fetish fuel the execution is just fine. A bit short since there were rather few paragraphs to describe the circumstances but as a PWP fic it's a good read. There're little to no spelling or grammar errors, fluid writing, proper abstract and content warning and mostly believable characters. Rarity seems a bit too expressive and blasé about sex from the get-go, given her usual "prim and proper" act.
Otherwise I found it an enjoyable read.

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The general formula for this is, take an adequately (or better) written pony x human clop story, with less than 10.000 words, and fill the bar with 25% additional red than the quality of the story deserves. Make that up to 40% if the story has less than 2.000 words.

I for one find those simply boring, and I wonder why I read this one. It's nothing special at all. People just want to find a let out for whatever urges they have, which is okay, and then share it, which is okay, too.

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My reasons for going with Human x Pony fetish fuel were for... well, you hit the nail on the head. I was expecting more people to enjoy an anal fetish fic, seeing the amount of "pony ass worship" scattered around the internet. I tried to follow the basic guidelines of a typical anal clopfic, while adding a little extra originality by trying to make the reader feel as if he were actually a dimwitted ass lover with a one-tract mind, like the anonymous human character portrayed in the fanfic. You can't change the characters that the MLP fanbase has come to know, but I would still like for the readers to believe they are fitting an entirely different persona with each fiction.

Since anal sex (and apparently, Human x Pony) fictions aren't widely accepted here, do either of you have any suggestions for a new writer?

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VX #4 · Aug 27th, 2013 · · ·

Ass. Needs more ass.

I for one approve most heartily of pony ass and wish to subscribe to your newsletter and/or pornographic magazine.

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Why thank you very much. I would like to keep featuring pony posterior in my stories in the near future. I'm glad you enjoy asstastic ponies like I do.

Always love plot-stories ;3

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I don't know if I'd call it widely accepted, but if you want to write something that doesn't get unfairly downvoted, maybe try something longer (but not unnecessarily long-drawn), without stereotypical OCs in main roles. Alright, your human wasn't stereotypical, but he wasn't very... meaningful either. Try being a bit more original than giving one protagonist an unusual trait (unless it changes everything that happens in the story.)

Let me say again, it wasn't bad writing, just not the most exciting story for me. I guess someone who's new here and interested in reading human x pony clop will probably like it more.

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By "meaningful", do you mean having traits that affect the plot and possibly even the "purpose" of the story? I would like to aim to fit different persona in each fic, and if you're meaning that I should incorporate it that way, I'm sure I could make it work, if I'm understanding you correctly.

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Yes, with meaningful I mean the characters' traits should affect what happens. Here his forgetfullness was just a bit silly and funny, but it had no real impact on the story. It seems to me like you want to tickle more details out of me what you should write, but you have to decide that for yourself. I think you're simply a writer who likes writing for others, so you should mainly think about it yourself what others would enjoy, not ask one specific person. How about I give you a little rule that you'll have to incorporate into the next story you write? Would you like that?

Comment posted by Fugly Duckling deleted Aug 27th, 2013

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That sounds perfect. Sure.

Needs more facesitting :twilightblush:

I agree I like raritys accent. So it baffles me when I come across fics that say its either grating on the ears or makes her sound stuck up

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Do you think I did a good job impersonating her in the fic? I know it's not the best, but would imagine you having a stronger opinion.

3130297 well for its length its fine if you'd gone any longer I would have a few problems. Her speech pattern was pretty spot on though

the anon in this story must have either really bad ADHD or his remembrance ability that all rational beings should have is dead. either way funny as hell:rainbowlaugh: and good story:twilightsmile:

:rainbowhuh: So these little ponies are about as big as medium-sized dogs? Or the stallions just aren't hung at all? Can't quite figure out why the human would be bigger than anything Rarity has ever seen. Also, if he's that huge (on her scale), you'd think she would want some sort of lube...

Like my fourth time reading this :rainbowwild: Thank you, Analsaurus!

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Although most men can't compare to the average horsecock, that part wasn't really meant to be realistic. For convenience, let's just say she's been choosing the more... lacking stallions, for whatever reason.

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That picture and the name... Bravo.

3175925hay Trevor it's me! JIMMY!!!

3480819 *makes awkward eye contact and continues to jack-off*

Not now kid. I think I may have found the perfect turd

348436 *looks at Michael* this is the creepy one you said was dead? You guys better go ruin my sisters chance to get on tv now!!! *runs upstairs* I'm gonna go upstairs and jerk off and smoke weed bye guys!!

For your first clop fic, good job sir.

It's hard to find a good anal fic around. Or, any for that matter, it's not a really popular fetish on fimfiction for some reason. It was good, thank you :heart:

Comment posted by Aurelius deleted Jan 14th, 2015

I want to like this, but there are three major flaws keeping me from liking it.

1. "Anon". Couldn't you be slightly more imaginative than that?

2. The sex part moves way too fast.

3. The repeated descriptions of Rarity's butt as "large", "round", "massive", etc. I just...can't even remotely begin to take that seriously.

No downvote, but no upvote either.

Somehow this clop is distiguished from other Human on Pony clopfics involving Rarity. It is kinda rushed though, otherwise great clopfic.

Not bad for a first time, but there are a couple of minor things you may want to edit.

It was important that you did your job and you did it right, not to mention it's impolite to stand oggling a lady, especially your employer, of all people.

There's only one "g" in "ogling".

From behind you rolls a stepladder, covered in a sparkling purple aura which catches you off guard and startles you a bit.

And Rarity's magic is typically blue.

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The way I've come to look at it is like this: they're not only a tad smaller than us (though by no means dog-sized) but, more importantly, they're more compact than an Earthly equine. Simply put, an Equestrian mare would have to have a vaginal cavity running all the way up to her chest in order to accommodate an Earthly equine's cock.

Compare:
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upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/f/f2/Dartmoor_pony_2.jpg

W-why I never! -Blushes- I never imagined my....rump be that attracting...even to me.

5535914 but a horse on earth penis is only so big to make the "process" quicker since they are a prey species, and with magic and wings it isn't so far fetched to believe there NOT a prey species, thus they would have a dramatic decrease in "size". You could assume that the earth pony have the biggest, but like on earth, stereotypes aside they would not be much bigger even IF they were bigger.

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Well she likes to hangout with high society rich ponies who are generally unicorns my head cannon is that unicorns have tiny cocks with pegusi being average and earth ponies having sizes that would make black people jealous

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