Overwhelming Light
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You Know Overwelming Light? I Like Apple Fritter She Is My Favorite Apple Family Member And I Want Apple Fritter To Have A Speaking Role In Season 4 Of MLP:FIM When More Episodes Debut
2950656 She is definatly one of my favorite characters in the show. I agree, she should have a speaking part.
Problem: IT'S TOO SHORT!
Great job on the story though. Enjoyed reading it a lot.
2955612 Thank you.
I will just have to make the next one longer! 
2955991 needs more in the sex part with more detail about their passion.
2956204 Okay Thank you for the helpful input!
The next one I write should be better, Thanks guys! 
2956215 no problem
2956220 I have one question though, how was the lead up? It wasn't too rushed was it?
Looks good, long lead for a little shy on the finale.
I really like the pairing. 
Needs a little more emotional fleshing in the finale (not necessarily details of the deed) to really bring out the pair. 
You've got the building blocks in the right places. 
I look forward to your next one. 
2956584 Thank you very much!
I understand and I hope to not disappoint! 
2956680 You could only disappoint if you do not. Remember: Do or Do Not, there is no try. To do not is to embrace failure. To do is to act, to attempt, to go forth, to learn, and eventually to achieve. Please Do more.
2956796 I SHALL HENCEFORTH ONLY DO! I shall do! And it shall be GRAND!
2956225 not quite but I would kinda lengthen the moment before they kiss though like have Macintosh confess how he feels and have them talk more a out the times before and how it leads to the present moment bu have them talk about it like how Macintosh felt something a couple reunions or so to keep it from going too fast really. That and more details and lengthen the clop part.
2957899 Okay Thank you!
this was damn good. i would never have thought of this shipping but it makes a lot of sense. it warmed my heart.
2964020 Thank you!
Yeah, as the others have said this could be waaay~ longer, could there possibly be a rewrite coming anytime soon?
2976077 I was thinking about it...
hmm I think I will.
2976077 If i did do a rewrite, would you want me to keep the same intro and just make everything else longer?
2976568
yeah, that'd be great, like everyone said; the story needs to be longer, especially the clop scene since yaknow, thats what everyone came for. (heh, came)
And i use yeah way too much
Thank you is all I can say.
2992536 Not a problem! And hopefully soon there should be an even better version of this on here!
2992545 yay
Great plot but could use a little fleshing out...
Be descriptive, ya know.
Try putting yourself in their perspective, what would you think or feel?
5841604 If I ever publish another story, I guarantee that it will be better than this story.
I'm not a fan of incest but i have really loved this story,Macintosh is still awesome and i really liked your personilisation of the character Flitter.
The story is a little short exept that it's awesome
Thank for the story
Is there ever gonna be a sequel?