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Marine King


This is my C-14 Impaler Gauss Rifle! There are many like it but this one is mine!

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:moustache:interesting start.
:rainbowdetermined2:Keep it up

2648674 Thank you good sir. I've been getting help from friends on this site, so I should give them some credit.

Intresting premise. Hope you keep it up man/woman/pony/( other organism/inanimate being)

2648969 Thank you for the support, good sir! You find any problems with my writing, you drive the metaphorical dagger into my back and make sure I fix it quickly.

Not a bad start and sounds interesting.
Keep writing.

2649492 Definitely will. I hope that you stick with this story all the way through. Might be able to put the first chapter up tonight, if I can. If not, early tomorrow morning.

2649512 That's good. Next chapter coming up soon, so keep in touch.

good chapter keep it up.
Also waking up after a week and the first thing you listen to is Skrillex? Thats a good way to start the day

Why in anthro fics do they always make the princesses freaking tall!?

2650062 Well, the princesses are freaking tall in the show, and the anthro ponies are like 5'6 or something. Daniel is 6'4, but he's still shorter than Luna and Celestia (who's almost eight feet tall). They are a mix of all three pony types, so it's understandable that they would be naturally tall.

2649995 Gotta do something with your life. Plus, it's how I normally wake up. Eat cereal, go on Youtube, grab a Skrillex song, write a little, get ready for work, then come home from work and write until I get hungry or I'm tired.

2651484 i'm sayin that's a great way to get the day going. I'm a big fan of skrillex myself.

2652016 Just making sure to clear up any confusion.

it seems kinda far fetched that twilight just decides she wants to see a human and travels into another universe to see them, that's just OP as balls... but i'm glad you didn't just decide to pop him up in the everfree forest like every HiE EVER

and also,

-Golden Rod Library, Equestria-

it's supposed to be Golden oaks library

2652952 I was trying to veer off the path of every HiE fanfic, but they still needed to have a reason to just randomly appear on Earth and just happen upon an injured boy in the forest. Also, I checked the wiki and you're right, I'll change it right away sir.

it's leaning dangerously close to being really cliché right now, i hope you change that in the next chapter.

also...

-Mercy Hospital, Equestria-

pretty sure it's called Ponyville Hospital

not a big fan of skrillex, but he's made a few songs that i like.

love beethoven though

2653049 I didn't want to make it full on Ponyville based things, so I switched up a few things, although most not noticeable. I'm a big music fan, can listen to just about everything, but I'm not big on rap since every song is almost the same as another, just slightly different lyrics.

2653102 yeah, i listen to pretty much everything except pop (with an exception for michael jackson and the likes)

i often find myself listening to music from the 50s... the ink spots and louie armstrong, i've got a playlist on spotify with 139 tracks with classical music:pinkiehappy:

lulz, fluttershy likes slipknot:rainbowlaugh:

2658061 In the first chapter, I had her slightly nodding to Skrillex also...

Fluttershy was hiding from view, but I saw her head bouncing up and down slightly.

Would like to get her to like a lot of music, but Snuff was a real soft song of Slipknot, if she heard the rest, then she would probably not like it at all.

2658091 yeah, and now i had to start listening to slipkn ot again... i can't believe i haven't listened to them more, but thank youi for reminding me:pinkiehappy:

2658101 I've been listening to full albums of Disturbed, Slipknot, Breaking Benjamin, Muse, Beethoven, and countless others while I write this story. I enjoy putting some of the songs into the story because I love them so much.

2658108 love all those bands:pinkiehappy: do you listen to Bolt Thrower or judas priest?

2658119 I'll take a look at them asap, but right now I'm writing the next chapter in the story right now, and SPOILERS, Fluttershy likes Daniel.

2658147 I didn't know this before, but I listened to a full album of Judas Priest and loved it, but forgot about it. Screamo isn't really my thing, but it's something I can listen to if it's one of those days.

2658149 This is a warning to those waiting for clop, I will try to bring that out later as the plot thickens and the two realize they love each other. I don't like trying to rush clop into a story, so it'll be around chapter 10-13 I would put a scene in.

2658149 well, bolt thrower is the official music for warhammer, and warhammer is grimdark so you might not like it

Comment posted by Marine King deleted May 31st, 2013

2658190 GREAT:pinkiehappy: then you should like Bolt Thrower, it's so manly, you immediately grow a beard, and it is the manliest beard of them all

Great choose of songs...the poor guy apparently has demons of his past besides what's already been revealed. Can just hope they'll be cast aside by the help of these ponies :3

2658212 Yeah... I think I could get the next chapter up tonight, not sure though. If not, then tomorrow and I'll definitely get another chapter done on the same day also.

Comment posted by Marine King deleted Jun 2nd, 2013

2663566 Glad ya do. I've been working hard and my minds a constant buzz with activity. I'm possibly going to get a few more stories up and put a lot of my ideas onto the screen. I have a crossover coming up quickly, most likely going to finish it tomorrow.

well that escalated quickly.

Your Latin is quite strange.

"Ex Omnium Sententia?" What? "Out of all's opinion?" "Out of the feeling of all people"? Interesting . . .

"Volens Cogitandi." Interesting. I've never seen this use of two participles.

"Spem Somniis"? To the hope with fantasy? To the expectation by fantasy? Weird . . .
"Somnia Testimonii et Trullas—Dreams of a Testimony and Toward Ladles." LOLWUT :rainbowhuh:

"Rupta Clausa" seems kind of redundant to me. "Clasum" already implies something that is enclosed.

"Lunae Sicut Stellae—The moons just like the stars." Interesting . . .

Is this a humanized story?

2735367
Can you give a picture that shows what they look like, because this line,

six strange girls

makes it seems like a humanized fic.

2735377 That's when they arrive on Earth and find him near death with three gunshots, then they took him to Equestria. They changed back to their anthro'd forms traveling through the different dimensions.

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