Not bad. Still a few spelling and grammar errors, the clop was a bit short (come to think of it, so is every chapter), but other than that not bad.

I have only one reaction to this, good sir. One only Spike can display and that is..!

Im liking this story a lot, cant wait to see how it ends.
On a side note, i think Pinkie is somewhat like this right now.

These are way more interesting to read than ninety percent of the other logical stories on this site. Pinkie smoking crack!

I don't think Twystron500 left enough comments.

not bad not bad at all at first i was thinking this was kinda of a proluge to pinkie pie the filly molester (odd story)but then i read this and found it was better

hmm... i'll be honest... I really really liked the beginning of this chapter but the relationship with Candy... I don’t know it just didn’t fit in right... Well for me at least. Anyway it's not my fanfic and you can obviously take whatever turn you'd like with it, plus I can’t judge it completely until it’s over. Good job though man. Tracking.

Whats with you people and not leaving one big comment?!?

So you can write normal clops lol I like this hope to see more soon.

286234 I'm not really good at writing normal stuff.

WHERE'S THE GORE?!?!?!?!?!?!

So am I never to see the end of this story?

Good God. I am reading this as soon as I can, I will NOT miss this. Please don't let me down.