Taco cutie mark? Dude, Mexican drug joke in MLP. Now that's dark.
I hate to talk down to writers (I really do, Applejack's honesty), but the spelling errors do throw me off the story a bit. Run it through a spellcheck and flesh it out a bit and there's a real diamond in the rough here. Probably a blood diamond
Edit for mrhappyface's answer below: Difference between politically incorrect and racist :) That's just funny.
185346 Sorry, I let my sister use my computer for 5 fucking minutes and the next thing I new Microsoft word and every word editing software on my computer was deleted. I know my spelling sucks and will try to fix it in the future.
Not to be a hater, but spelling. Work on it. Slight improvement from the beginning in terms of plot.
lots of grammar errors
good writing, but the story seems...iffy
Taco cutie mark? Dude, Mexican drug joke in MLP. Now that's dark.
I hate to talk down to writers (I really do, Applejack's honesty), but the spelling errors do throw me off the story a bit. Run it through a spellcheck and flesh it out a bit and there's a real diamond in the rough here. Probably a blood diamond
Edit for mrhappyface's answer below: Difference between politically incorrect and racist :) That's just funny.
180534 It wasn't ment to be rasict I just coldn't think ofanything else
the idea is great, but the execution could use some work.
dude I would take this a whole hell of a lot more serious if the spelling wasn't so god awful
185346 Sorry, I let my sister use my computer for 5 fucking minutes and the next thing I new Microsoft word and every word editing software on my computer was deleted. I know my spelling sucks and will try to fix it in the future.
THE SPELLING HAS BEEN FIXED!
pretty good
"His cutie mark was a taco"