Ending could have been better, was hoping Twilight was gonna get in on that action. Also First first EVER!!! Woot

BWAHAHA! The end of this is bucking hilarious. If we still had stars, you'd have 5 from me

Wut

Wow. That ending came out of nowhere. Kinda... disappointing. But it was funny, I guess.

I gotta agree. The ending, while amusing, was pretty random. I'm still thumbing this up, though.

That was fucking hilarious! And terrible, but in a good, comedic sort of way.

Sweetie Belle's theory of relativity.

Looks like Pinkie is a biooooootch that likes bananas... or doesn't.... or isn't really sure...

That is all.

Have a good one.

Good show, man

This was quite wonderful

Bahaahaa defintely a funny ending XD

Yeah, the ending was funny, if a bit sudden.

Still seems kinda lame that Twilight didn't join them in the action though.
That would have made the sex scene a lot more interesting.

Good Clop-fic, keep writing! The ending was very rushed and weird though..

242147 On the MOOOOOOOONNNA!

Wow. The ending was.... unexpected and quick.

Very glad I read this.
Very good for a first time writing clop. Aside from some tense agreement errors, minor typos, a bit of word repetition, and a kind of silly, puerile ending, this was a great story. I've seen much worse from people with more experience. This story had a great plot (pun not really intended), and was fairly original. Keep writing stories!!

The only advice I'd offer is to try more description. Dwell on the sex scenes and drag them out, letting them build and get hotter so your readers have more time to ...well, you know.

Either way, it was great and I came buckets.

Is Sweetie Belle's cutie mark an orange lambda or a red crowbar?

kind of a sad ending. is it not?

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This. All my internets. Find a way to put them together.

340999 Uhh... Huh. Ive never gotten any internets before, much less this many of them.
*rubs chin* Im gonna need a bigger boat.

Hey, reviewed your story. See it here: SHAMELESSNESS

Split it into two parts: MORE SHAMELESSNESS

AJ: aww
fluttershy: AWWWW
spike: gentlecolts?
rarity: :P
twilight: :P (too lazy to put in idea for expressionz)
sweetie: wut
sooo...... I HAS NO MOAR INTERNETS CUZ I GAVE DEM TO YOU

There is no quotation mark before "Well, someone certainly is excited."
"with the juice dreanched tunnel" - hoa 2 dreanched?
"scientifically fucked every mare in town discover which was right for her" - Miss a word?
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yay! for moon parties

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Have to say I'm disappointed in this fic, mostly because the lemon was so sudden and a bit short and also because Twilight did nothing to really help Spike (and to be blunt I'm not whatsoever a fan of Spike/Rarity romance) but that's my opion. The ending was a bit funny save for Spike/Rarity idea and Pinkie Pie will never learn!!! LOL, GO SWEETIE BELL!!!!

+ = FOREVER!!!! (in my personal view)

thank you very much for those last lines, they made me laugh harder than the rest of the story :D

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I kid you not, I had to leave my goddamn apt building because I was laughing so hard I would have woken up my neighbors. I left right after reading "Twilight Sparkle finished clopping then politely left." When I came back and read "As a result of this intellectualism, Sweetie grew up to be a world renowned physicist." I completely lost the rest of my shit right there. It is three in the fucking morning here. Bravo, TQ.

that ending = WTF?!?!?!?!

This is the chapter where the author just flipped the table saying "fuck this story, I'm moving on to better things."

Still, it was a good ending, and a great story. I love it.

- A hilarious end, but it could to have been best if the autor had worked more with Twilight x Spike.

funny end, but i was hoping for a TwiSpike ending, maybe even a TwiRariSpike one

Well... That happened.
So, Spike and Rarity hooked up and presumably had more sex, slowly making Rarity the most powerful non-Twilight unicorn in Equestria. Sweetie Belle meanwhile discovered the electron and developed the atomic theory. Pinkie greeted the astronauts of Apollo 11 and Twilight became a princess... she got the wings later.

Um....can't really say i liked that ending, like.....at all, but for the most part it was a very funny and sexy fic.

Most interesting.

Moon Party!
I blew Spike
I do Spike
Spikey blew me to the moon!
All I got was dirty hay!

DHX you listening?

hey when i pot one-piece in search this storie came up why?