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After following through with a daily update schedule for this story for a few days, I feel I should clarify some things about it. I am not writing these entries on-the-spot each day: These are all pre-written and edited for the entirety of this first "novel" of this tale. If possible, I continue to release one section and any applicable documents every day.
Sorry about jumping the gun on publishing this "chapter" this morning. Somehow, I completely overlooked two entire letters to be included in the documentation. It has been fixed now.
Great story can't wait to read more
Wow, Willow I don't know wether to applaud you or
, yet another example of why canterlolians get such a bad rep...
2273962 Let's just hope nobody gathers their opinions of a group based off of him, for he has yet to hit the bottom of his barrel of face-palm-inducing buggery. In fact, only two chapters away I can already recall another such incidence coming up...
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Bet there sure to rustle Ben's jimmies...>.>
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Perhaps.
All that in one sitting!
It's a nice story you got there, shame it's not known more.
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Well, thank you so much for saying so. It took a long time to put together to be honest, but I'm not too worried. Comments like these made it worthwhile. I'm sure that once I slap the "Complete" tag on there, see if I can ask a mod to help me lower it to a Teen rating to eliminate the filter, and have a few more brave folks like yourself give it a chance, the story will pass around eventually.
Also failed to mention, but congratulations for making it through all that in one sitting! That is quite a feat.
I am so glad to see people enjoying this story. It has come a long way and I can easily say I am proud to have had a part in it.
Well, tomorrow is Friday and I have it planned to be a double header as far as the story's concerned. Tomorrow's upload will technically be two independent entries, but since they occur within the same typically designated time period (One full season), I want to release them together.
Of course, for anyone who doesn't want to listen to Ben prattle on about health concerns and safety protocol, I will include a synopsis in the author's notes of tomorrow's first section. This will be the only time in this story I will be supplying this, and it is because I wish to do it as an apology for what I believe to be the least interesting section of the journal. I have already asked myself time and time again if I could simply remove entry 40A (or, as it will be labeled here, 40-1), but I find that the information within is used later and does give purpose to the happenings in 40-2 (In my logic, it does at least). I can only humbly request the reader to please be patient with me, as I personally feel that 40-2 does make up for the possible stagnation of 40-1.
Conflicts! Love it.
2302134 Glad you liked it! Also glad to see you still around. Hopefully you'll like tomorrow's section as well: It finally explains the cover image for the story.
The answer to life is 42
At this point you would think the notion to atleast get some kind of fighting experience under his belt so he wouldn't need to be so reliant on others to bail him out. Regardless of size and brute strength comparison he'd be capable of holding his own if not somewhat competent. If he lost Hyacinth then because of that, I swear I was going to punch something......
....i'm getting way too into this...
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YES! I'm not the only one that absolutely loves Hyacinth! It's awesome to see folks getting into the story like this.
2315467 Love the comment! Afraid however that this is the first time Ben has been pushed into a fighting position, so there wasn't really any reason for him to practice. Until this point, the most violence he has dealt with was Flinch's unfortunate scenario, and that is what mercenaries were hired on for. I promise, however, that Ben starts displaying a little more martial prowess in the upcoming sections to be more competent, as you put it.
As a note on tomorrow's section, which I believe will be labeled Post-Mortem Curiosity, I wish to once again beg the reader's patience. The beginning of the section is very technical, but I just wish to promise that the section does pan out to be one of the more comedic ones by the end of it. It will be up tomorrow morning, as usual.
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Heh, you portray the characters in a way that I can actually garner an real reaction from what's happening as if im there....>.>.......soft spot for Hyacinth non-withstanding. Shoot, far as interactions goes he could have a pseudo-family thing going for him...if he doesn't flip out at the notion lol.
Wow, he's high on fumes isn't he, once again things about to go fubar because of a clash of cultural ethics.
2317469 I figure that someone locking himself in a room with no windows and opening a can of paint to stew for a couple of hours would have roughly the same effect as Ben's situation there. We all make mistakes, don't we?
I would simply like to congratulate you on the story even if it does seem like there were two stories here, not just the one. The first of his journey to Equestria and searching for his dad which never was really finished, and the second as the 'dwarf fortress' tale.
You did base it off of the dwarf fortress game right? or a similar one like towns?
I foresee the story taking a turn down a third rout rather soon, dealing with these deicidian ponies of the north, a re-meet with the ponyville gang and him finding his father living or possibly leading the deicidian ponies and having to kill.blast him wit the elements.
If that is actually what will happen, let me know and i will remove that portion of the comment... sorry.
Good show sir!
and i award you thirteen of the not-yet-added luna emoticons! (where the f--k are those things anyway?
2322229 Morning, and thanks for the comment! I feel this really does bring up a few factors that I myself have wished to discuss, and I believe this might be the perfect time to mention them. Hope you don't mind a wall of text being posted back as I take a little time to explain a bit about my reasoning.
For your first question however, it was indeed based off of Dwarf Fortress, specifically a game played in the DF2010 build. Of course, the story-line is loosely based off of it because I did not want it to be specifically for players of the game, but a Dwarf Fortress player can easily catch some of the game's happenings (Flinch's scenario, for one of the best examples, was a failed Strange Mood). Songring is also not the only settlement that Ben will take part in, but that will be discussed in just a moment.
I wanted to make some mention of the fact that the story regarding his father has not been resolved. Thank you for bringing this up, for it is something that has itched at me as well and have been trying to do a very careful job of not dropping it entirely, but not letting it dominate the psychology of our protagonist (and admittedly, doing a poor job at this. I apologize). There are two major reasons that the story of his father has not been resolved yet, the first being that I subscribe more to the theory of Maslow's Hierarchy of Needs for Ben's actions, and finding his father falls under self-actualization. Ben's physiological and saftey needs are constantly challenged (between needing money, needing to keep from being sent to the moon, etc.), which shifts his focus. I had hoped to use this as a representation of something that all of us face: Losing sight of our goals. Between school, work, relationships, there are many times in life that our major goals are lost to us from time to time and we have to go back and rediscover them at some point. There is a future section that Ben grapples with the fact that he has not been searching for his father, so I hope you will still be around when it is released.
The second reason is that once Ben's father is found, that is the end of Ben's story. The overarching goal of finding his father is the reason he continues to record his journey in his journal. However, through this, I wish to promise you that by the end of this trilogy, the story of Ben and his father does have closure. It might not be quite in the way one would expect. There is much more story in between however, including more service from Ben to the crown, so I apologize if you're hoping for a quick resolution to his searching.
Lastly, even if you did get it right, I wouldn't ask you to revise your comment. I just won't admit whether or not it's correct.
Man I hate that intern
It might interest you to know that lead is used frequently in the glassblowing process so manticore sting to the head+ lead poisoning = mental instability. Hat making used to use mercury when making hats so that is where the phrase mad as a hatter comes from. And one last thing you can use lead for quite a bit of things and I would recommend mentioning that some time in the future
2327362 That did indeed interest me! Thanks for mentioning it. I wish I could say that I had planned for such, but it would be completely coincidental.
On your suggestion, I started looking up some of the domestic uses of lead for myself, and was surprised by the number of answers I got back. I could not seem to find any that struck me as immediately apparent for Ben to realize or that would ease Songring's needs however, so I cannot promise a further mention of the use of the lead in this first journal. However, I might indeed have it be a note of intrigue in the second novel as there will be no doubt for recollections of the events of Songring, including the discovery of the galena formations.
It is very late for me however, so perhaps I'm not exactly at my most scholarly right now...
Ugh, eaten alive by the tigerfish is quite a way to die...personally I would have been more brutal to the invaders, controlled rage can make up for inexperience in some cases...if your lucky. Hah, Dawnstar getting mixed feelings at Maple comforting Ben(or vice versa).
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Ben rarely feels lucky. If I may quote one of his earlier conversations:
"Do you believe in fate, Benjamen?"
"I believe it has it out for me, yes."
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Why I say IF your lucky, and of those who died living in Songring did they have families outside of the settlement? Or is any background on them ended there, saying because there could be issues further down the line from relatives if they blamed Ben...as already said fate and luck has it in for him.
2328822 Funny you should mention Ben being blamed. As I'm currently working on the second novel, that was the main premise of the section I just finished piecing together yesterday: About the backlash Ben faces regarding some of the poor choices made at Songring.
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Sure to be entertaining and suspenseful, eh? As well as entertaining.......not so much for Ben.
Would you mind if I used some of the features of the piper from earlier to help flesh out a character I am developing for a story I am writing? I figured it fit the part of being a phsycopath i needed but I also wanted to make sure it was alright with you first since you created it and all.
2331709 I can't say I would mind. The Piper is honestly a personal adaptation I'm using of the "Keshi Pony" that was a part of the My Little Fortress mod mentioned in the Special Thanks section of the description. I added a few physical traits to them, renamed them to fit a bit better with the naming scheme of the Deicidian species I wished to use, and fleshed out some concepts of what brought them about as well as trying to keep them obscure by having more myths about them than facts. Since I used an inspiration for them, I certainly will not deny someone else's wish to make their own adaptation of the species. If you even want to use the Feral Ponies as-is, feel free to. I'd like to see what you'd do with them.
2331942 cool I already had a framework of a character built but your take on the feral ponies helped solidify it. I had a phsycotic killer working for celestia as a more or less button stallion to take out undesirables so the feral pony gave me a mental picture for that and so I thank you for that and bid you farewell good sir.
So I want to take a chance to give a few words about tomorrow's section before I prep and release it (that is to say, entry 46, releasing on March 29th).
I mainly wish to state that Dwarf Fortress has been most accurately described as a game with sadism coding. While the game-play from Songring was used quite loosely for this story, I did try to adhere to major events that presented themselves. One of the events occurs in 46, and I just wished to defend myself that all that happens is not my own choice. I was simply tasked with the daunting task of trying to imagine and weave an explanation for what had to be one of the most baffling occurrences I had ever experienced in my fortresses. More in-depth explanation of what I mean will be available in tomorrow's Author's Notes, but I suppose I just hoped to give some warning about tomorrow's content.
and allow me to christen this story with the holiest thing around. BACON!!!
seriously though this story is worthy of the great and bountiful piggy christening.....or so I can tell from this brief intro!
May Firewall guide, threaten and piss you off.
yours insanely TheKeirens
2336607 Well, best of luck to you as you start your read then, if you'll be sticking around!
And may Notch protect your port-forwards too, friend.
...honestly don't know what to say that'll have much meaning except, just wow..tragic loss after loss I sense ahead of you Ben...
2341050. Not much that can be said for him. Time will pass however, and with it, hopefully the sting of the aftermath will too.
Nice chapter, I laughed for about an hour afterwards though
2348180 Glad somebody enjoyed it! I know it might have been a little cliched, but it was fun to write nonetheless.
Was about to call the prego card till i thought about Teardrop's personality and ice cream an universal comfort food......can see Willow raging like Abeo.
2358476 For the fact that he'd have to make a crib? Or for the fact that he'd possibly have to make a coffin? Willow can only dream of being a father; it'd take a very special mare to put up with him, and the one he has his eyes on hasn't been overly receptive as might have been seen in the aftermath of the flood.
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In the fact he'd throw an immature fit, but your statement is certainly true in a special mare tolerating his antics...
p.s. On a unrelated note; just noticed i'm apparently a gold member and I don't know the deal with that.
2359352 I got excited when I saw it too. Afraid the gold membership stuff is just a new implement they are in the testing phase for. Everyone is a gold member on their side, and everyone can see taht members with an ID ending in 0 are gold members. It should be resolved soon, and implemented properly later.
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Hmm, I remember being able to see an counter for how many words read on the site on your profile, miss that bit honestly...
Been wondering to if Ben was optimistically naive or blatantly ignoring because of humanities ethic view on the matter......really not surprised at Overcast....from whats been seen he would cling to Ben enough for him to even consider getting with Ben. Kinda hoping to see more awkward moments because of what Ben basically screamed in his face....now I feel even more bad for him.
2375544 Trust me, with tomorrow's and Saturday's sections, Ben won't need anymore embarrassment to supplement for him. Also, of course he's been ignoring it as just foolish and uncomfortable. Woe be unto him that Hearts and Hooves day is on the way, and Songring is highly undermanned... understallioned... however one wants to refer to it.