Pinkie Pie's Surprise

by BrianPony

Mystery Solved

Pinkie Pie left the library and trotted towards Sugarcube Corner. The sun was shining, birds were chirping,and the world seemed to be smiling as big as Pinkie Pie was. She bounced up and down as she trotted and sang another song. No other pony was around but she didn't care. She was so excited to find the answers to her questions.

As the clock struck 4:00 PM, she arrived at the doorstep of the gingerbread house bakery. Pinkie's hooves were shaking a little as she turned the doorknob and walked inside. Even though the sun wasn't going to set for several hours, Sugarcube Corner was pitch black. The pink pony fumbled for the light switch. Finally she found it and flipped it on. There was no response. Pinkie flipped the switch a few more times. After the third try, a blinding light turned on. The light was so bright that Pinkie's eyes winced as she adjusted to its brightness.

After her eyes adjusted, Pinkie noticed that the light was spotlight. A moment later, there was a breeze and a puff of smoke. Now appearing under the spotlight was an unusual character, but one that seemed familiar. The character was covered in black, and wore a matching purple fedora and black cape. It was the "Mysterious Mare Do Well!"

"PINKIE PIE!" the Mare shouted in a disguised voice. "I see you made it on time."

"Y-yes I did. Pinkie stuttered. "Were you the one who sent the letter and the clock?"

"Yes, it is I" the Mare continued. "Did you find all the items and bring them to me?"

"Absolutely!" Pinkie replied. She opened up her saddlebag, got out the picnic basket, and pushed the basket towards the mare in the middle of the room.

"Well let's see here." said the mare as she opened the basket and looked inside. She began to laugh. As the laughter grew louder and longer, Pinkie Pie spoke up.

"Um, excuse me? My friends and I went all over town today getting this stuff for you. Aren't you going to reveal to me the mystery of the clock?" The laughter continued and the pink pony cried, "What's so funny?" She kept her eyes fixated on the mysterious mare. She had laughed so hard that the mask was starting to come off and a unicorn's horn could be seen. Suddenly the horn lit up with a magical red aura. Pinkie pie gasped. Moments later, magical fireworks went off inside Sugarcube Corner in a rainbow of colors. Pinkie gasped again and her eyes grew as big as saucers. A broad smile grew across her face. After the explosions of color, the lights flipped on and Pinkie Pie was tackled by her fellow Elements of Harmony. The pink pony started laughing with surprise and glee, as her tail began to twitch.

"SURPRISE!!! HAPPY BIRTHDAY PINKIE PIE!!" her friends shouted. Instantly a multitude of multicolored ponies jumped out from their hiding places all over the room. Each of them had their own miniature party cannon. After Spike appeared and shouted "Now!" every pony fired their cannon and a blizzard of rainbow-colored confetti and streamers filled the room with color and sound.

"Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh!" the pink party pony squealed as she started bouncing happily around the room. "This is the most wonderful thing any pony has ever done for me. You guys totally got me. I am totally surprised!" cried Pinkie as she started hugging every pony in sight. She was interrupted by feedback from a microphone. The sound came from a stage on the other side of the room. Her friend Twilight Sparkle stood on stage holding paper in front of her. The purple unicorn cleared her throat.

"Every pony may I have your attention?" The bakery became quiet and all eyes were on Twilight. "Thank you. We are gathered here this afternoon to honor our friend Pinkie Pie and celebrate her Birthday." The crowd cheered and stomped their hooves. "She makes us laugh, smile, and helps us remember how special we all are."

"Not to mention she's the best prankster in Equestria!" interrupted Rainbow Dash , "Well, second best."

"And her parties are to die for!" added Rarity.

"Don't forget those sweet tasty vittles" chimed in Applejack. Twilight was now tapping her front hoof in frustration.

"And she's..um..a great friend to everyone." Fluttershy said softly.

"Assuming the interruptions are finished, please join me in welcoming Mayor Mare, who has a special proclamation." Every pony stomped their hooves as the Mayor made her way to the microphone.

"Thank you Twilight Sparkle. Good afternoon, Ponyvilians. We are very blessed to have such a wonderful friend, such as Pinkie Pie, as a citizen of our fair town. She brings joy to our lives. Every time something or some pony needs to be celebrated, it is her making sure that day is special and that pony feels special. Pinkie Pie gives so much of herself without asking for anything in return. That is why it is with great pleasure and pride that I decree that this day is officially Pinkie Pie Day in the town of Ponyville! The crowd of ponies in the room roared their approval while stomping their hooves. The mayor continued, "Mares, and Gentlecolts, I present to you, the pony of the hour, Pinkie Pie!"

The ponies roared their approval even louder than before. Their party cannons fired even more confetti and their hooves stomped louder than thunder. Multicolored balloons fell to the floor. .

Meanwhile Pinkie Pie was in a state of elated shock. She could not believe what was happening. Her pink face blushed red. She smiled as she slowly cantered towards the stage. When she got there, the other Elements (and Spike) greeted her with warm hugs. "Speech! Speech!" the ponies chanted. The pink Pony wiped away a few joyful tears and she moved towards the mic. Before her, she see saw a multitude of multicolored ponies. Each one she considered a friend and she had once thrown a party for them all. She looked around the room and there was Octavia, Bon Bon, Berry Punch, Mr. and Mrs Cake (along with their twins), Colgate, Lyra, Derpy, Dr. Whooves, Cheerilee, and many, many others. Pinkie looked down, wiped away a few joyful tears, and moved towards the microphone to speak.

"Thank you so much, every pony, to my dear friends, and to all ponies who put this altogether." Pinkie looked back at her fellow Elements and winked. "I appreciate the honors, and the presents I've yet to open all look very nice, but the very best thing about this party is spending quality time with you, my friends. Don't ever forget that Birthdays are about having fun with friends, not getting lots of stuff. You cannot put a price tag on friendship. Thanks for making this the best day of my life!"

"Awww." said the ponies in unison, as they applauded. Pinkie started speaking again.

"Now, let's PARTY!!!" The pink pony pumped her right hoof in the air and jumped off stage and on to the dance floor. Her favorite song started booming from the speakers. The next few hours passed by in a flurry of dancing, laughing, eating cake, and having fun.

Night fell and the party began to wind down. Almost every pony had gone home. Only Pinkie's closest friends: the Cutie Mark Crusaders, Spike, and her fellow Elements of Harmony, remained at the bakery. Before they started cleaning, they all sat down. Pinkie approached them.

"Thanks guys so much. Each of you put so much into making this the best day of my life. I do have one question. What was up with the alarm clock? Twilight looked at everyone else and began to speak.

"I wasn't going to tell, but it was kinda part of the deal. More than a half-year ago, we all met for dinner one night and discussed doing something extra special for you for your Birthday. Of course a party had to be involved. It had to be more special. Rainbow Dash suggested some form of practical joke and Applejack thought a scavenger hunt would be a fun way to keep you occupied until Party time. I had Spike write a letter to Princess Celestia and she dreamed up the special clock. After having it made, I cast a spell so that no real harm was done when it exploded. Rarity decorated it with gems Spike had saved up. Fluttershy made sure the birds and animals were out of the way so the loud noise wouldn't scare them. It took a lot of planning but it was all worth it to see the joy on your face."

Everyone hugged Pinkie Pie one more time. After the embrace the pink pony gave them a fake stare.

"You realize each of you broke a "Pinkie Promise" and that there are going to be repercussions for your actions, right?" All of her friends gasped, blushed, and looked away. "Just kidding!" Pinkie laughed. Every pony was laughing until they were interrupted by a special guest.

"Happy Birthday, Pinkie Pie!" Princess Celestia called out as she floated through an open window. Her subjects bowed.

"How long have you been here, Princess?" asked Twilight Sparkle.

"I've been in the shadows all day long watching everything. It sounds like Pinkie has had quite a day. Well done my subjects!" She looked at the Birthday girl, "And it sounds like Pinkie has shared a great lesson about friendship to the entire town today. Well done. I'm so proud of each of you." The princess turned and faced each of her subjects. "I have some cleaning up to do."

Princess Celestia's horn glowed and suddenly the entire party mess vanished. It was replaced with a gift. The box was wrapped in sparkling pink paper.

"Can I open it?" asked Pinkie.

"Of course." the Princess replied. Pinkie unwrapped the present and found an alarm clock. It was an exact duplicate of the one that woke her up this morning and exploded.

"Will this one explode too?" the pink pony asked.

"No." the Princess laughed.

"Thank you. I'll treasure it forever as a reminder of all the wonderful memories I've made today." With that, the pink pony grabbed all of her friends into one last group hug.

Author's Note:

I hope every one enjoyed my very first fanfic. I look forward to writing more in the future. Thanks for reading and for helping as i wrote each chapter.

Comments

[Alpha Scorpii]

Good ending, it made me smile

Well, not bad for being your first fanfic. Keep writing, and good luck with your next stories

[ZzILuna]

It was cute, i'll give you that and i hope to see some more great stories in the future, i also cant wait to see your stories once you get some experience (seeing how good your first one was ). but in all seriousness, great work

[BrianPony]

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Thank you.

[BrianPony]

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Thanks. It might take awhile for my next story. I am going to work on creating a character but I want to get it just right before going on with it...creating my character I mean. The character I am creating I don't think has been tried before and I am using fan fiction because the actual show wouldn't use a character like I am creating.

[BrianPony]

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Thanks for your helpful input. It is very much appreciated!

[BrianPony]

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Okay now that i have some sleep...a response.

First of all a big bro hoof to you. You definitely know your pony!

1. I realize the twitchy tail means something is going to fall. However there has not been an established Pinkie Sense reaction to an upcoming explosion. Or has there?

2. Very good point. Thanks for the reminder.

3. Yes, you're right. I'll change that.

4. I was definitely referring to the singing telegram.

5. Yeah I know about the ten seconds but I felt ten seconds was going to be too quick with other passengers in the balloon.

6. Very true. However this is also a cartoon world so rules of cartoon physics applies. Water is the cartoon heat quencher even though it doesn't work that way in real life.

8. Do you have any suggestions for an alternative for Pinkie to express in her hyperactive state?

No need to apologize. You definitely recognize that I want these works to come out right, even though this was a warm-up to the main event (so to speak).

[Tsunami]

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As far as I know, there is no accepted sense for when something is going to explode. However, you may want to create one of your own. Other well known fanfictions such as "Fallout: Equestria," "Past Sins," and "On a Cross and Arrow" have done so. Of course, you could also default to sensing the falling balloons if you do not want to change anything. As for an alternative to "Oh my gosh," I cannot really think of anything. There is, in fact, no particular reason why she should not say that. Realistically, she would be more likely to say it because she has heard it from Dash. It is just one of those things that could look either like a mistake or realism depending on who is reading. I myself used a few instances of plot points that could initially sound like mistakes in "The Fall."

Also, hello again to you, jam_i_am.

[BrianPony]

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Thanks for mentioning those stories. I want to read those before I continue. I don't plan on changing much in this story..except for a few minor edits...unless something in my stories down the line requires. Even if this story is unrelated to the overall things about to take place it is technically the launching pad of the upcoming series.

[Tsunami]

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I see. Well, you might not want to read everything that I mentioned before going ahead. We are talking about a combined word count of close to 900,000 words, and that could hold you up for a while. If you want recommendations on what to read though, I can definitely help out there. I can also direct you to tons of recorded readings if that would be better than visually reading. That is one reason that I am surprised that Doom Pie is already here. He has been quite active in releasing audio versions of stories. I think that you would be particularly interested in some of the work released by Illya Leonov though. We can talk more about that later.

[BrianPony]

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Good point. I want to have all my stories have audio versions ultimately.

[APoeticHeart]

What a great way to end a scavenger hunt and terrific birthday. Pinkie Pie celebrating her birthday with all of her closest friends. And Spike got to be apart of it as well.

[BrianPony]

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I am so glad you liked it.

Speaking of Spike Shouldn't he have have a special day with Toby too?

I'm referencing APoeticHeart's excellent story [url=A New Home]http://www.fimfiction.net/story/88624/a-new-home