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ponichaeism


"I've kissed mermaids, rode the el Nino, walked the sand with the crustaceans...."

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Despite Pinkie Pie priding herself as friend to everypony in Ponyville, she's never seen eye-to-eye with the matriarch of the new family across the way. But her resentment towards the party-pooping Polly T. Burro turns into outright paranoia when the donkey lets slip she knows one of Pinkie's secrets. But how could she? Only four ponies, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, and Rarity were there for the incident in question, and Pinkie Pinkie-Promised them all to secrecy.

She comes to the conclusion that one of her friends is telling tales. Christening herself 'Smiles' to conceal her identity, she'll have to rely on the help of her erstwhile assistant 'Mr. Gummy-yum' and reluctant librarian Twilight Sparkle to root out whoever's betraying her confidence before her deepest, darkest secret is revealed. But as the tangled web of deceit she's weaving gets stickier and sticker, will Pinkie be able to keep herself from getting permanently stuck out in the cold?

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 7 )

Intriguing. Feels a bit rushed, and a bit too "jumped into the the middle" but not bad. Faved because I'm interested in more.

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Ironically, that's the exact same way I felt when I first started reading Tinker, Tailor, Soldier, Spy. :twilightsmile:

And thanks for the fave!

Pretty good idea, but Rainbow and Fluttershy seem pretty Flanderized.

Still I'm eager to see where this goes.

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The show itself has always been rather....fluid, shall we say, with characterization for the sake of a plot or a quick gag, so picking one as the "defining" characterization isn't easy (Spike, for instance, went from being a helpful little guy doing the best he can to manipulative and selfish between the last two episodes).

But I've figured out a better way to do some later events in the story, and have taken your criticism into consideration and slightly re-edited the first chapter.

The scene with Gummy and the city of books was priceless :rainbowlaugh:

Ok, I find this very interesting, so I'll be following it! :pinkiesmile:

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