A Dream, A Bow, and a Letter

by Pnakotic

A Letter

After seeing Chrysalis back to her kingdom, this time in a much less explosive manner, Celestia sat by a slowly burning fire recounting the day’s events. Olive Branch had decided to remain behind; Celestia was hardly surprised considering the drone had nearly gone catatonic upon seeing the vast Canterlot library. She had made peace with somepony she up until recently considered a mortal enemy. All that was missing was a friendship report from Twilight, although perhaps it was time Celestia wrote her own report…

Dear my most Faithful Student Twilight Sparkle,
I know that it is usually you who sends me a friendship report, but you ought to realize that I myself have not learned everything there is to know about friendship. Over the past week I have come to realize that a kindred spirit may be found in the most unlikely of places. I realize that you will not immediately accept this nor do I expect you to, also please ensure you are sitting down for this next part. I have entered into diplomatic relations with the changeling empire, including their queen Chrysalis. I know you will find this suspicious and will no doubt investigate this yourself, but I beg you to trust me in this matter. Chrysalis is not the cruel and manipulative demon you most likely see her as, she is a ruler, one who has had to sacrifice much for her people and continue to do so. Which brings me to what I have learned, there is always a better option than outright rejection of another, from the smallest of arguments between friends to a battle between a princess and a queen. When offered the sword it is often better to put it aside in favor of the quill; when offered an enemy, make a friend instead.

Now my faithful student I have a task for you, in a few days’ time I will send a changeling by the name of Olive Branch to Ponyville. I have arranged for his room and board so you needn’t worry about it. The task I have for you is to look past your differences and see the similarities you share. I think you will find that you two have a lot in common.

Sincerely,
Princess Celestia

P.S. If he starts calling me “mistress” again please feel free to… correct him.

Comments

[Pnakotic]

Any critique/criticism would be appreciated, thank you.

[Perteks]

Hmm good one i like it but its much too short. You could show some Celestia internal dillemmas about changelings and ponies, she just do that much to fast for me, totally ignored that this can be trap or something like that.

[Mothykins]

It was short, it was simple, there where moments when the flow was poor, and I expected more Drama from Celestia's Part.

That said, It was a fine example of beating Swords to Plowshares. If you did something like this again, I would bring up that analogy, as well as the fact that those who beat their swords into plowshares plow for those who don't.

The Use of Sombra as the Queens first encounter with Ponies was great; It also marks her as old. Thousands of years of resentment? Yeah, it's make me loath to ask for help.

[Tachyon Xenophile]

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[airbournesquid]

Pretty good, if not a little short. I'm guessing that you're going to come up with a sequel that focuses on Olive Branch, right? If this is the case, then this story serves as a decent prologue.

[ActiveHat]

This was the second fanfic I read. Yay! I really enjoyed it.

As already pointed out, it's a bit short but then again that might a good thing. I was, infact, searching for abit shorter fic when I came across this one. (Still ''new'' to fanfics, so wanted to start up with something shorter)

Like I mentioned, this is the second fanfic I ever read, so my criticism is not to be taken too seriously. But atleast I think it was really nice.

[ScopeEva]

Cute story, not big on details so it could certainly use padding out, more interaction but enjoyable none the less. A sequel would even be nice even though it would lightly be more of the same just with Twilight and company. Then again, maybe it could be used as a quick prequel to a larger adventure? Who knows? Well you do but that’s not the point.

Either way good luck with your work!

[RuBoo]

I hope you don't mind a bit of constructive criticism. I like the general concept (a changeling-pony alliance would be brilliant, in my opinion), and the story is good, but there are a number of issues. For one thing, certain things are awkwardly worded. For another, the punctuation in some places is either improper or missing. Finally, I noticed that, in at least one place, the capitalization is wrong. I would be happy to edit it as best I can, if you would like.

[Fireheart 1945]

Not bad, though I edited the 'goddess' part out of my head for the story.

[Razzy]

Short, but I liked it.

Cya
Raziel-chan