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4 Updates???!?!?!?!?!?! SQUEEEEE
*3 Updates
Holy fuck! 3 chapters in one day! time to read!
ummm why did the other 2 chapter suddenly disappear?
1986419
Check recent blog entries for an explanation.
1986364 This is the exact reason I didn't unfav the story. I just didn't feel like it was over no mater what the tag said so i just felt really bad.
Ooooookay I missed the drama but oh well, let's just pretend it never happened. Ignorance is bliss 'n all
Alot of intensity here to be sure. Twilight's dream, her display of power against the would-be usurpers, not to mention the revelation of the elements being capable of so much. Very well done, my friend. You don't disappoint.
1986426
I'm glad you decided to rethink your decision. this story has a LOT of potential and plus, this doesn't have enough clop! If you don't half ass like before i will be glad however if you do you will get the full might of fluttershy
P.S. I had to refresh the page when i checked back because i thought my computer derped when it said only this chapter was here
one final thing, loyal, i think i speak for most of us, that if you want to leave for a bit then come back and finish, we support you, just don't do that shit again okay?
Oh you increadible...
I saw all the chapters and saw that it was completed just an hour ago. Now it's not?
Either I'm psychic or this is the biggest cliffhanger in the history of cliffhangers.
1986519
loyal decided to try and troll everyone with a completely bullshit ending, thankfully it was just a troll and not the real deal.
I didn't read the troll chapters, but this one at least was excellent. I was a bit upset at twilight losing so easily at first, but when she woke up I got pretty nearly exactly the scene I'd been hoping for. Badass Twilight is badass.
1986561
Too bad I didn't read it D: Dagnabbit x3
End of the Archmage, it did seem too soon. Well played.
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be glad you didn't, i nearly screamed, and i live with people!
and the end is next chapter according to loyal, this time hopefully more thought out
Thanks for writing this story, Loyal. I admire your skill and have enjoyed it immensely. I did read the troll chapters and got the feeling that you were tired of the story - very understandable considering the remarkable pace you have maintained. Please do take a break if you need it - you've certainly earned one.
That being said, I absolutely loved badass Twilight in this chapter
End of archmage eh? Almost bought it :SS Update soon XDD
Commence re-read, alternative?
i cant even begin to explain how awesome this is
Missing word maybe in the above sentence.
Very good chapter, all though i would of liked a little more exposition on when she took hold of both the day and night and balanced herself with them. But oh well, we get what we are given and it was a epic chapter indeed.
Great chapter.
Thankfully missed the false ending, but got a good scare from the first few posts.
Hope you deal with your personal life (trolling urges) and give Archmage the ending it deserves (or decide this
story is to good to finish so soon and continue or make a sequel to it).
1987107
I feel so stupid and didn't think about him maybe making a sequel, in which case, loyal, finish this, and promise to eventually make a sequel okay?
im so confused over what what all the blog posts are about, i can guess, but im still confused.
on the topic of the ending of this fic, i just can't see the end coming closer, this really feels like a really big epic, where we're roughly half-way through, but considering what's been said so far; that is very implausible.
anyways, great chapter!
An impressive chapter! I am quite pleased!
1987440
Loyal decided to troll us by posting 2 extra chapters, which was basically a giant speedup of twilight's life until the end like nocturnal glow's and then the funeral with her sucessor, then luna cried, and the story ended. then everyone raged at loyal so he took them down and apologized for the evil he had caused.
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i see, i got the gist of it after he reposted the troll chapter in a blog as well.
Wonderful story! Full of adventure and feels in equal measure!
One thing I have to point out; there are multiple instances throughout all the current chapters with a single recurring error: the use of "it's" as the possessive. It's just a little thing, but it happened enough times that I had to mention it.
Final thing to loyal, i had the final chapter pulled up on my ipod still and i read the final lines of luna thinking the end of the prophecy: She will ascend, which has a double meaning which i think you know of, the first being ascent to immortality, and the second being ascent to the stars :P
you know i kind of liked the alternate (Troll) ending it was really nice though now im in the work to see past this and see your true intent for the story.
Rating:
I love this story...and even the last chapter but i really wish she would stay with luna and it was so tear moving I couldn't stop crying. But I can't Wait to see what he/she re-post it's going to be good no matter what!!
alrighty then, haven't really got much to say on this chapter or the whole debacle. (love that word by the way)
The dream was... interesting. Its like the first two episodes gone wrong, which sucks for Twilight. I wonder if the dream was a spell or something too. If she died in the dream she died in real life! Also, Celestia seems to really be taking that in stride. The whole,I killed Luna, my friends and you sentenced me to death despite my having no idea what to do at the time beyond stop NMM. Those cultists were stronger than I expected I guess. Also, Luna and Celestia didn't really do much did they. kinda gonna be bad for the press. Course there's that whole we're so strong we'd kill the city if we cut loose factor going on.
So uh, yeah good chapter (Still waiting on that makeup sex) and awaiting the real end.
Another great chapter! Though the princesses worries about Twilight's potential ability to kill them is ominous. Hopefully they don't shoot themselves in the hoof by making that remote possibility an eventuality out of paranoia and fear. It seems like it would normally be OOC but this story has already surprised me a few times so I'm not ruling it out! The peop- erm ponies demand more updates!
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Beat down, stun spells (stun spells)
Twi-Light to the floor
Here we go here we go here we go, now
One, something's wrong in dreams
Two, something's wrong in dreams
Three, something's wrong in dreams
Four, something's wrong in dreams
One, Nightmare let me Live
Two, Nightmare let me Live
Three, Nightmare let me Live
Now!
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Now!
Cast shields again(again)
No interruption
Here we go here we go here we go, now
One, something's wrong in dreams
Two, something's wrong in dreams
Three, something's wrong in dreams
Four, something's wrong in dreams
One, Nightmare let me Live
Two, Nightmare let me Live
Three, Nightmare let me Live
Now!
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Cultist ponies hit the floor
Now!
Mane to Mane, hex and horn
You're all by yourself but you're the one
You balance them and dark they steer
Driven by fate, power to fear
Cultist Ponies hit the floor
Cultist Ponies hit the floor
Cultist Ponies hit the floor
One, something's wrong in dreams
Two, something's wrong in dreams
Three, something's wrong in dreams
Four, something's wrong in dreams
One, Nightmare let me Live
Two, Nightmare let me Live
Three, Nightmare let me Live
Now!
Cultist Ponies hit the floor
More lyrics: http://www.lyricsmode.com/lyrics/d/drowning_pool/
I had a lot expectations about this chapter, I really hoped Twilight and princesses and maybe other court members will team up and beat the bad guys, and, I am totally Disappointed by this chapter:
1) There was only 20 council members ( shadow magic users ) who made a stupid mistake by showing themselves, and there were like 100 council members all together, so from all 80 council members there were only 4 useful and all of the rest complicity useless, running away, they had number advantage 80 to 20 and they just run !
2) Celestia and Luna did nothing, NOTHINK, when Luna duel Twilight, she hurt her tons of times not receiving any damage, Luna totally hurt and overpower Twilight dozens of time, and in last chapters Luna and Celestia did nothing but hurt Twilight, and now, when 20 evil ponies show themselves, they did nothing, come on, even Bastion and Night Danger used some spells, and 2 powerful princesses who had far greater power and duribility just stand there and do nothing until bastion trapped them in shield, that's totally unfair, do those 2 Alicorns are only good in hurting Twilight, Nothink else, really.
3) 2 Powerful princesses, Twilight and 3 council members could easy defeat 20 cult members, not to mention that princesses were never in danger, they are far to durable and strong, but no, they had to hide themselves in shield so Twilight would need to face 20 enemies, Twilight is far less durable than Alicorn, and fight again Luna just proved that her power is nothing near it, and yet princesses did nothing and Twilight had to face all enemies, would it be so hard for princesses to deal with enemies when Twilight was dreaming, do it really had to be Twilight who beat everyone when Pricnesses powers were wasted inside barrier ?
Do not get me wrong, I like to watch Twilight being cool, but I am so tired of watching how useless princesses are all time, and it is not only in this fanfic, they just tend to be useless, but in this fanfic all they do is hurt Twilight or expect a lot of her, Luna even almost killed Twilight when she summoned to strong monster, and in this one time when they had a chance to do something, they did nothing, whatever for they have incredible amount of power, whatever for they are almost immortal, all good they can do is to be villains like Nightmare Moon, and when they are on good side, they do nothing.
Please, stop making princesses so useless, they are much more powerful and they are near immortal, so why Luna and Celestia are only good when they hurt Twilight, and always useless when Twilight would use they assistance, do it is really so hard to make pricnesses and Twilight to cooperate for once, is it really that hard to make Twilight look cool without making her hurt over and over and making Celestia and Luna useless in time of need ?
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amiss the confusion, where everypony was running and crowding, the princesses couldn't of attacked back for fear of hitting anyone other than the usurpers, by the time bastion got the shield up, the princesses couldn't do anything. inside the shield they specifically said, killing the shield so soon since it was recently formed will cause an explosion possibly hurting twilight, which they couldn't take the risk of either.
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That's not true, it took some time before all useless council members run away, but after that happened, 20 traitors started to shot into princesses direction, Bastion and NightDaner played defence, but Prinesses did NOTHING, when bastion and Night dancers were protecting them from rapid fire, Princess had a lot time to analyse situation and counter-attack, all they had to do is to teleport behind enemy and strike or fly up and strike from air, do they would use raw force or hit and run tactic, both ways it would work, but noooo, there was not even good excuse, it was only mentioned that bastion and night dancer protected princesses, but nothing more.
First, there was like 80 vs 20, and all council members escaped in panic leaving it 80 vs 6, then princesses did not even got a chance to make a move for no reasons, they just stand in there doing nothing until Bastion put up a shield.
That is exactly what start to annoy me in this story, everyone who are on Twilight side just for many reasons hurt her ( council force her to do impossible task in 3 days, Princesses did not provided Twilight with much informations and even hide the fact that Twilight parents were dying, Luna hurt Twilight several times in many duels proving over and over how faaaar more powerful and experienced Alicorn is, and then she almost killed Twilight by summoning to powerful creature, they were so good in making Twilight life harder, forcing her to fight her limits, but when there was time for team work, when there was time to fight alongside one another again enemies, all of the sudden for some pathetic excuses Twilight had to safe them alone, forget about Luna who was faaaar more powerful and skilled and durable, forget Celestia who is even stronger then Luna, Twilight just HAD to fight alone.
That is what I start to find disappointing, as much as I like to read about Twilight being cool and getting stronger, it annoy me that everyone on her side are never helping, she is studding from princesses who are far more powerful and almost immortal and yet she never get help from them when she would use it ( I bet that in this story Twilight will face even more challenges, assasinations, trails, she may even safe Celestia twice, but princesses will never help her, they will always be useless, that is disappointing impression I get from story what I liked until this chapter ).
Long story short, I just do not like when Luna and Celestia with all they powers are wasted and showed useless, it is enough that they do not help in MLP show, all i try to point out is that there are more ways to make Twilight be awesome without everyone around her being useless, there is no shame in team work or getting help from someone stronger, there is just no need for that ( Princesses will not be Mary Sues if they get chance to help in fight, there is no need to get them out of the way ).
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Luna hurt Twilight several times in many duels proving over and over how faaaar more powerful and experienced Alicorn is
are you refering to when she dueled twilight to teach her humility for shadow magic? because if you are then its not how much more powerful and experienced alicorn are, its teaching a lesson.
And i'm pretty sure that loyal didn't think of it exactly that way. this is a story about TWILIGHT after all, not about how the princesses are sitting there.
if you got disappointed by a chapter that showed the power of twilight, then i don't really think you really need to read this story.
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I am disappointed that Twilight is forced to do everything, every pony on her side are hurting her to teach her or push her limits ( the fact that Luna tried to teach Twilight humility does not change the fact that she could kill Twilight with easy any time she wanted when Twilight could not even hit her with all her power she used, it only show how more powerful princesses are ).
However when Luna summon powerful spirit what almost killed Twilight, Luna not even helped, she just showed up when it was over.
When Twilight parents were dying, princesses hide this fact and almost broke Twilight heart and trust between one another.
Council forced Twilight to do impossible task in 3 days.
But when Twilight, 2 princesses ( what can easy withstand any magic attack traitors could thrown at her, and faaar more powerful and experienced ) did nothing when Twilight had to deal with all traitors in the end.
I know this is story about Twilight, but do not you think it is overdoing, all Twilight friends, allies, teachers are doing nothing but hurt her to push her limits, she is doing her best to help as much as she can, but when they have chance to help her, they do not, and only because Twilight is hero of this story, does not mean that every one on her side have to be totally useless.
When Twilight was with her friends, they worked as great team, and now Twilight do everything alone, that is what annoy me, as powerful as she is, she is still Unicorn and still far weaker then princesses, so why she have to do so much, why princesses never assist her with they powers, it is one think to use power to protect weaker since they can die without help, but when princesses are around, it is Twilight who is weaker, it is Twilight who can die, so why they do not help.
Like I said, it is not hard to make Twilight awesome without making everyone around her useless, heh, even Applejack would do more to assist her in time of need then Celestia or Luna herself.
And if this story is about love between Twilight and Luna, should not Luna as stronger one protect Twilight in dangerous situations or at last team up with her ?
The only think I ask is that those who are on Twilight side will stop being useless, I do not want to see Twilight saving everyone just because they are useless and lazy.
" if you got disappointed by a chapter that showed the power of twilight, then i don't really think you really need to read this story. "
No, I was not disappointed by a chapter what showed the power of Twilight, I was disappointed because those who are far more powerful then her did not helped, for the first time princesses finally got a chance to protect Twilight from danger since they are more powerful and experienced, and again it was other way around, I just not want everyone on Twilight side to suck just so she can be awesome.
2003114
" ( the fact that Luna tried to teach Twilight humility does not change the fact that she could kill Twilight with easy any time she wanted when Twilight could not even hit her with all her power she used, it only show how more powerful princesses are )."
I doubt that the princesses could hurt her now, shes more experienced now than she was before, so i believe she can hold her own now against luna since the night gave her more power than anypony else according to luna.
"However when Luna summon powerful spirit what almost killed Twilight, Luna not even helped, she just showed up when it was over."
Twilight insisted and luna told her not to make a sound. also, luna couldn't of done anything about it, the being was powerful, and i believe there was a contract there.
"The only think I ask is that those who are on Twilight side will stop being useless, I do not want to see Twilight saving everyone just because they are useless and lazy."
While true that they are being useless sometimes, if this story is about twilights' journey to being archmage, having everyone save her wouldn't really show that she has any power herself.
2005031
" While true that they are being useless sometimes, if this story is about twilights' journey to being archmage, having everyone save her wouldn't really show that she has any power herself. "
I do not expect having everyone to save her, I just do not want Twilight to save everyone all the time, I just expect them to start acting like a team, becoming stronger does not mean doing everything alone, many times character can prove his strength by asking for help, by cooperating with others, team work or asking for help is not show of weakness.
And like I said it before, I will say it again, there are other ways to let Twilight show her power and her getting stronger without making everyone around her useless, I know it is very rare since in many stories, animes, shows and games there is a clishey where to make hero look more awesome, everyone around him are useless and pathetic or to lazy to help, but there are many other ways then that.
For example MLP show Canterlot Wedding episode, I am sure that mane 6 beating 100 changelings ( with Ceelstia defeated in 15 seconds, guards defeated off screen and Luna not even around ) made mane 6 look cool as much as it would be if mane 6 would run to get elements, Chrysalis would follow them but then Luna would show up to slow her down, and when they get closer to door, they would encounter guards fighting changelings, so mane 6 join the fight, help guards defeat changelings, but after opening the door, they are all surrounded and Luna is defeated, and yet Chrysalis would look tired after the fight, tired enough to make mistakes what lead her to her defeat ( in both scenarios mane 6 looks as cool, but scenario number 2 is more epic because background characters like guards and Luna herself make this battle seems more important and epic, basically the answer is easy, do not try to do everything you can to get princesses and guards out of the way so mane 6 can shine, just let others go down but in a way where they try hard and do a good job even if defeated ).
In Twilight Archmage case, she just need to work with others as a team, it is not a shame to be rescued or get assistance in fight once in a while since she help everyone whenever she gets a chance.
2005031>>2005107
Gentlemen... Perhaps you could move this conversation to private messages?
Okay, I'm confused. I get an email saying there's been a triple chapter update for Archmage; "Archmage's Nightmare", "Nightscapes and Normalcy", and The End of the Archmage" - which seems to me like an ending chapter - but when I click the links for the second and third updates, I get taken to the story page, with no sign of either update anywhere. Was it perhaps a premature upload that was retracted? Just curious.
2005426
Go read like, my last 3 blog entries for more details.
2005143
What we can't have opinions about an awesome fic?
2008080
You're welcome to. It just seems that this conversation would be best had via private messages >.<
2008101
i got that :P i was messing with you, TBH its opionins based on a story so really its more of a debate, which sadly if this was my math work i would be done and onto the next part, but nooo i have to write a debate on something i don't care about
Well, there was absolutely no reason to just delete the last two chapters. Sure they were a little rushed and sad/bittersweet. And the ending left some food for thought and speculating...
Of course, if you intend to make an even better climax, and not just turn it into a general kid-friendly Disney-style happy ending, then by all means go ahead
Twilight kicked some flank but really Luna and Celestia could do nothing, wow just wow but it showed charecture development so all in all I can't wait for the next chapter.
ETA on new chapter. Loyalpls.
On a side note, I think I love you.
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Getting Iroh to proofread is like...
Well, insert a clever analogy here because I can't think of one.
But it's tough. Between school and procrastination, he's very difficult to get to cooperate. I have the next two chapters written. They are both pretty long (Over 7k) It's just a matter of getting them ready for release now.