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Ohhh yea! You just made my day awesome
*edit* Whaaaat... that was long.
Ahhh, that got me right in the feels....
Wonder how the showdown happened? I mean, Twilight didn't walk in shred to ribbons so something happened...
And fight time-skipped. Welp, didn't see that one happening. Definitely pulled one over on me.
Edit - now i feel stupid, i read this and commented before the A/N could explain.
Didn't that all blow over a little too fast?
In fact, there's no fight scene whatsoever. What happened, I gotta know man, I GOTTA!
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There has been an Author's Note added to the chapter. Please go back and read it for an explanation.
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Works for me!
I am very much enjoying the story, especially the character growth on Twilight's part.
More please!
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Thanks, i didn't realize that until i got the notification. (/shitstormquelled)
nice little "chapter"
this calms me down somewhat over what happened during twi and luna's showdown, it also kinda makes me think that twilight just calmed down (how the process of calming down went doesn't really matter) and forgave luna...
1778202 Twilight was angry, then comes back in smiling.
.....
Either she totally destroyed Luna and sent her to the moon for a few years, or they had hot angry sex for hours in a time bubble that slows down time for everypony but them. Either one would be awesome
Oh It all makes sense now. I was wondering what happened and what the hell did Twilight do to Luna that also got her to smile..
This will probably reach my top favorites, I'm enjoying the story allot
Before I read the note I got all confused and when Luna wasn't mentioned I thought Twilight had killed her................
Sees Archmage has updated
Reads chapter
Sees authors note
That went better than expected
Even though this chapter wasn't what I thought it would be, I am glad that you can even write something short and it be good. Eagerly awaiting the next full chapter. Keep up the good work my friend
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does this mean chapter 9 is updated? or no?
or does this mean you will POST THE NEXT ONE DAMN IT!
ps. its chapter 11 you mean about explaining right?
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Chapter 9 won't even be ready for edit until close to Wednesday, I'm afraid. Thanks to work schedule changes, I'm going to be patrolling Mondays and Tuesdays. This means I will be unable to write, since I'm going to be out and about (You know, being a badass.)
BUT.
We have a lot planned.
I was REALLY on the edge about uploading this story, but the alternate ending needed to be shared.
As far as the story is concerned, it's chapter 9. I know the readout says it's the 11th chapter of the story... But it's really the ninth.
The first chapter is the prologue (Doesn't count towards the actual story)
And this is...
Well.
It's chapter 8.5.
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you and iroh are an evil team, you upload like crazy, 4ish stories in a 24 hour period then sit there and screw us out of our clopfic!
1778531 that's fine. You just go be a badass and we'll be ok
1778531 You go ahead and be a bad ass. It may help people to understand what this is if you put something like "Alternate Ending" in parentheses in the chapter title.
1778531
so this is chapter 8 alternate end? This actually happens right?
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Honestly, I can't say. I really can't. Just wait until Chapter 9. It should be available come Friday.
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This is not an alternate ending in the way that you are thinking of. Both of the endings happened, and the chapters are in correct order. This was originally one chapter, and the first ending was originally almost the end of a chapter, and 8.5 was the very end. However, we decided to split it up because it caused a good cliff hanger, now everyone wants to read chapter 9. This was a different way of ending the chapter, hence an "alternate" ending.
1778999 So then the cliffhanger question that I guess that you guys want us to be asking is what happened to Luna? okay, that makes sense, thanks.
I spent the last few hours of my work day reading this in its entirety. (It's be really slow, and I'm allowed to read when there aren't customers, but I still can't believe I got paid to read this.) After finishing such an amazing journey (at least as far as it currently goes), I felt moved to the point that I needed to express that with a fave and a thumb. But I couldn't, because I already had. That's when I remembered that I began reading this today because I got an email about it. I had only read the prologue and first chapter, though, because it didn't show up on my favorites page. I'll have to look into that.
Long story short, this story is AMAZING, and I wanted to express that to you in the only way left to me.
If there isn't some sort of DBZ reference in the big fight I will be a sad panda. With the exception of one fight taking 10 episodes of course...... goddamned Namek; Y U NO EXPLODE IN 5 MINUTES?
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The next several
episodeschapters will just be Twilight charging up some gigantic ball.The fact that Twilight walked in like nothing happened between her and Luna out there certainly ups the suspense. I'm very curious to learn just what happened.
Okay. Now to have the next chapter explain, when it can.
1779810 charging up a ball of energy while monologuing
WHAT IN THE NAME OF CELESTIA AND ALL THAT IS MIGHTY HAPPENED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Well, Twilight became Archmage... Then she got shipped with Luna... Then there was a teensy bit of conflict...
Oh, were you looking for something more specific?
1782041 more on the lines o the conflict between Twi and Luna at the end of "Moonfalls and Mourning"
Thank you kindly
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Sure, I'll tell you exactly what happened. In fact, I'll make sure to go into detail so that you understand perfectly. You know what, that may be a bit too long for a comment, I'll just have Loyal post it as a new chapter, it may take a while though.
1782265 I am done feeding the trolls... instead I would like to challenge you to a game of Pai Sho
1782499 and don't worry I have enough Ginseng Tea to go around
*remembers conversation between Celestia and Luna in the last chapter*
I think I can guess how Luna (or The Night) managed to calm Twilight. But will the consequences of such actions?
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*Starts setting up the Pai Sho board*
*Notice the piece you are taking out*
I see you favor the white lotus gambit. Not many still cling to the ancient ways
1784416 ...Those who do can always find a friend...
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Then let us play.
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Welcome, brother. The White Lotus opens wide to those who know her secrets.
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1784914 It has been to long Grand Lotus
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Having fun, you two?
1784967 I am
1784967
I told you to stay outside, Zuko.
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We need passage to Ba Sing Se, do you think you can help?
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Yes, I do believe that I can. I take you two will need passports?
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I'm sorry, but this has gotten out of hand...
I feel that I should end this before we turn the comment section of an mlp fanfiction into an Avatar fanfiction.
1785664 A wise choice as always dear Uncle. *Azula smirk*
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Remember that we are in the comment section of a mature mlp fanfiction. Now remember what happens to Azula at the end of her fight with Katara... and that you are talking to an eccentric old man...
Are you sure that you want to continue down this path?
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K, awesome, that was pretty much my question. Whether we were getting how it COULD have ended or something. Though Loyal's comment now makes me wonder if it IS actually happening or if its all just a dream given by the Night or something.
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I am okay with everything in this comment.
I'm gonna muse through my thoughts on the story as it is now. Don't feel the need to comment on their accuracy, I just like putting them down and thinking about the story and coming back to see where I thought the story would go once its done. Like I do for pretty much most stories I love and really want to see where they're going. Woulda done it before, but this is updating lightning fast (which is pretty awesome) and this seems to be a break.
First off, YAY TWILUNA! Second off, LUNA. Wat R U Doin. LUNA. STAHP! I DO remember that comment from Loyal in the first or second chapter (deleted for a while now, which was a good choice), so I'll wait to see how that can of worms plays in to the romantic conflict Twilight's got going.
Wondering what's up with Luna's past Pegaus' love, who apparently was a asshole, and how that may parallel with Twilight, who is/was totally up for sexytimes with Luna. Hell that whole part with Celestia and Luna is dripping with foreshadowing, with everything from Luna's love life, to Twilight's parents death (making me wonder if Twilight, by becoming Archmage or using shadowmagic fully somehow accidently killed her parents, and they knew about it, given their relationship with Nocturnal Glow) to NMM.
I also wonder what's Luna's exact relation to the Night, and how that might affect Twilight's discussions with it. The darkling called her the Night's greatest ally, but the Night seems to be almost a loving mother to Luna, who wants her to be happy, even if the means by which she is happy are not very moral. This is interesting considering Luna tried to rule over the Night. This also extends the question to how much power will she grant Twilight, if she knows that the power is going to be directed at Luna, perhaps the Night doesn't have a say, perhaps she'll turn on Luna, perhaps she'll influence Twilight to help Luna, or perhaps she won't get involved at all.
In addition, the mere existence of the Night makes me wonder if there's an avatar of love (Cadance?), hatred (Sombra?), friendship(Elements of Harmony?), whatever kind of magic Celestia has going, and if Discord is somehow the avatar of Chaos magic who somehow materialized fully, removing chaos magic from the world entirely or something.
Also I find myself wondering what that Darkling meant by
Did Luna swear off love? And then break that pact?
I do think that the Archmage position isn't very well explained, or its neccesity at least isn't. Twilight's gotta keep the balance of magic, is what we're told, and a bunch of other dudes are currently doing that exact thing, but they can't do it for long. Why can't they do it for long? Why is it so important, WHAT exactly does it entail. How does she do that? It feels like Twilight doesn't know exactly either, so these will probably explained more fully later on in the story, as you mentioned this was like the halfway point.
Concerning Cross Stitch, it feels like he disapproves that Twilight believes she loves Luna because she has had sexy dreams about her, found herself really aroused when drunk, reading the Kama Sutra, and making out with Luna. He probably thinks that Twilight believes herself to be in love, but is really lusting after Luna, knowing how the love he feels for Rarity is more than just being attracted. Again, this will probably be touched on later.
Really enjoying how the clop adds to the story, honestly, there really isn't enough good Twiluna clop, seems to be all Twidash these days... hopefully they'll have hot makeup sex sometime.
You should maybe focus a bit (throw down some dialogue) with Twilight's interactions with her friends and Cadance more. Rainbow, Pinkie, and Rarity moved with her, sure they had reasons of their own but they've placed themselves there, so I feel like they could have been used a bit more in the last chapter where Twilight's mourning. Its said that Cadance helps comfort Twilight, but it felt more tell than show. maybe a scene on the mountain where Twilight's destroying things, and Cadance had to talk her down. Point is, Cadance felt slightly underused. Twilight would probably have gone to her with her love problems too, as that seems like a logical topic for the alicorn of love. Maybe she'll get her time when the magic of love comes up, but it feels like she could have been consulted with in that two week time span about Twilight's romantic woes.
Coming to the most recent chapter I'm reminded again of Luna's conversation with Celestia.
Luna probably goes ahead and brings them back for Twilight for a bit, which calms her down, or maybe Twilight realizes that using that smite spell (I assume that's what she'd use) will destroy Canterlot, and the graveyard where her parents are buried. IF Luna DOES bring them back, I wonder what magic it would be with, and what the cost would be. Regardless, Celestia is probably pissed.
In all, I'm really loving this story and I'm looking forward to wherever it goes. (So long as it ends with Twiluna.) Keep it up!