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Bolt? Alive?
EPIC!
...Well, technically alive.
Wuhu. Cool.
Twilight done it again
I hope Rarity is ok
Good chapter. Looking forward to the next.
Fugggggh, evil cliff is evil.
I am so impatiently waiting the next chapter.
Always a pleasure to see one of my very favorite fics updated. I'm kinda going to be sad when it is finished.
Can't wait to see how it all turns out. Great chapter, and thanks.
Is not Unicorn who can create spell what hold a huge storm and keep alive army of monsters for hundreds of years not a bit to OP ?
I mean, Cadance is Alicorn and she got tired keeping shield up, Twilight magic run out in magic duel when she tried to make age changing spell and in other episode lifting 50 tons weight with magic was very taxing, and here we have Unicorn who created powerful spell what trapped his essence for hundreds of years, now, I do not complain that spell is powerful, if bolt was skilled and powerful, then fine, he managed to create powerful spell, but how can his magic fuel spell for hundreds of years, unless spell itself have some sort of magic artifact or some powerful magic force to keep spell alive all the time.
It is like power plant, it produce energy as long as it have fuel, tank can go as long as it have fuel, in this story, this spell practically keep storm going and keep monsters alive, it mean that storm use magic all time, and monsters feed on magic to stay alive, it is not like permanent magic barrier what hardly need outside influence.
An immortal librarian of the biggest and best library in the world who has an eternity to learn every inch of a library? Yes please!
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*Sigh* I thought I made myself clear. If all you're going to do is nitpick on all the small details of this story, please do so in a private message to me.
This was a trial...
And it left a pony, near to death
It's hard to overwhelm this fortification
Knowledge Compliance
It now saves the thoughts and not the books
For the good of ponykind
Except the one's who are dead
But there's no stress, Twilight, it's a simple mistake
Archmage, with Bolt's guidance, find what caused it to break!
And the spell is undone
And you brought to everyone
An ancient and lost archive
But what of Rarity?
She's bleeding so severely now!
Regal went and broke her heart-
Betrayed she-
Swore to get vengeance!
And left for the quest so full of ire.
Is she doomed, her life be lost?
Or will her savior pull through?
Now this lethal desert is a beautiful plain
There are no more monsters and everything is just fine
But her wounds will still bleed
This is a tragic time of need
If she wants to leave here alive...
She's broken and bleeding...
She's about to walk into the light...
Maybe her friend will come to help her...
Or maybe it's Sombra?
It could be Spike
Or, or
Fancy Pants!
Anyway, a delirious state
Cause her blood loss is acute!
Look at Twilight talking
About books so overdue
That you'd need a mortgage
or sell a kidney or too...
But Bolt says she better run
Since her partner's almost done
Though she's barely, faintly, still alive
And Twilight's running and she's still alive
She's nearly dead but she's still alive
But if she's dead will Sweetie Belle cry?
Still Alive?
Still Alive!
2522083 Grah! Ended too soon! Them cliffhangers bro!
I must be a masochist, because I love the pain they bring.
2521955 No, it is not too "OP". Bolt did not just used a bit of magic to protect the books and have done with it. He use his life force. The very thing keeping him alive was used in the protection of the library. That's what Loyal was getting at, when it was said that Bolt gave his life to protect the library. An unselfish sacrifice like that could quite possibly be more powerful than standard unicorn magic.
Not to mention, as Twilight found out, Bolt is "technically" still alive. While his life force protects the library he does still exist, just without a true body. Since he does still exist, the spell cast when he sacrificed himself will exist too.
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I actually, like kinda...
cried a little bit
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Please don't kill my sister, mister author!
THIS. IS. EPIC.
How much further will the story go? (I wish it would never end but I know this is nothing but a hopeless dream)
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Well, preliminary conversations are about Twilight's student, so... Another 10 chapters or so, I would think. I'd like to hit about 200k words.
one word. Short.
or something like it
Damn...damn
Bolt's consciousness remaining intact after all that time? Twilight changing the spell allowing free access to the knowledge of the library as well as giving Bolt a corporeal from again!? Brilliant! Fantastic delivery, this chapter was very powerful. I just have one request if I may: can Rarity survive this time Loyal? Please?
NEED
MORE
CHAPTERS!
So uhm, I find that Twilight's a tad over the top Mary Sue here. I mean, she pretty much fixed the whole thing in a few minutes (and it felt a bit anti-climatic) where ponies have been trying to regain access for millennia. And she didn't even have to invoke her super saiyan night powers (what happened to those anyway?)..
Not a bad chapter, just... underwhelming.
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Tarox is right. Can she live this time please.
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Awesome chapter as usual!
while the whole concept of bolt being 'alive' in the spell and all is wonderful, i feel like the execution was a little bland, a little too straight forward, like it was just put in there at the last minute without any real impact.
otherwise it was a great chapter, i hope rarity makes it.
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In this case it exceeds my expectations.
Then just let my say that you are a gifted author and I think you made this a better story than most "bestsellers" out there.
I think I speak for all of us when I say that we really appreciate that you share your work with us.
While I liked the chapter, I feel Twilight’s restoration of the spell could’ve been explored in greater detail. It would’ve been a chance for a nice dramatical arc of suspense – as well as the trip through the storm, which was also cut pretty short in my opinion.
Like I wrote, I still liked the chapter, but I think you could’ve done better – you’ve shown that already.
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So this mean that it does not matter how powerful Unicorn is, if even Rarity would sacrifice herself to cast spell, the spell would be more powerful then Celestia strongest spell, even in RPG self destruction is far weaker then that.
Also, if Bolt is still alive, it mean that he did not sacrifice himself.
And how can one spell keep storm and monsters alive for hundreds of years.
Like I said it is totally OP, one Unicorn sacrifice himself while he is still alive ( so he does not sacrifice himself ) create a spell what killed hundreds in hundreds of years while keeping Archmage ( the most powerful Unicorn in Equestria ) unable to break it.
if this is not OP then what is ?
And to the end note, Bolt not only created spell what archmage could not break and what took life of hundreds, but it also last for hundreds of years, life essence of one pony can not keep spell alive for hundreds of years, it would be like 1 Unicorn would become a nuclear generator, and even then it should not last that long.
Seemed really rushed.
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Alright, let me share some author's insight with you, Commander.
1. Bolt was powerful for his time. He was the sole purveyor of synthesis magic, and incredibly talented, just not as talented, powerful, or violent as Blaze was.
2. Bolt gave his life over to not only Cadance (Whom he loved every bit as much as Shining Armor did) but to his entire life's work, that being synthesis magic, and his study of it.
3. The powers of his love and his magic came together to seal (Not him, and certainly not any major part of him) his memories into the spell. While he 'exists,' he is not Bolt. He is an echo. Think of it as a computer at a library. It protects the books by cataloging where they are in existence, and can help someone find them. But it is not a person, or a librarian, by any stretch of imagination.
4. You're looking into this far, far too much, and I've already asked that you keep nitpicky comments like this to yourself. Or at least send them to me in PM form so I can address them privately. Like the user named Aburi did. He pointed out a major flaw with the way Twilight approached changing the parameters of the spell.
5. You're debating magic. And ponies. Who have nasty sex with one another.
>Magic
>Ponies
^Grounds for intense discussion.
... Yup. Totally legit.
Commence read.
Interesting. Now to get at the individual close to dying.
It was a bit rushed, but I like the circumstances surrounding the library now. People will be going on pilgrimages to study the knowledge contained there.
Now we just need to find a permanent way to protect the spell matrix.
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No, the illusion of choice is presenting a 'choice' to someone knowing they would take the route you want them to.
If you kill off Rarity AGAIN I swear I will kick a fluffy pony in the teeth
"Bolt ... Cadance? ... well she is happy and well ... kinda married to my brother ... KTHKSBYE!"
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Yeah... I ended up writing three of these chapters in a night. But as it turns out, another reader found a major flaw that greatly impacted the next chapter, so I have to do a re-write anyways. I'm hoping I can hash out the details without having to go back and change this most recent chapter as well. With any luck, everything will turn out okay.
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I don't even know what "Mary Sue" means. Some context, please?
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http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=mary+sue
2525813 http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/MarySue
I might be using the term incorrectly. What I meant is that Twilight feels over the top powerful, fixing everything in a rush without any effort at all. It all feels underwhelming.
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Oh. Well. She IS Twilight.
And, you know, I'm a terrible author >.> So, yeah... As mentioned, I wrote three of these chapters in a night, so there is likely a few issues I'll have to address in the next chapter. I'll see what I can do about fixing all the problems.
2525849
Hey, no worries, you're far from a bad writer, otherwise we wouldn't all still be reading after that many chapters!
2527390
That plot does not make any sense ?
2521821 But if he's alive, and still feels for Cadence...
Awkward.
well if twilight can keep a tiny seed from dying when it doomed to die anyway, i think she can save somepony who is one of her best friends
This chapter was absolutely phenomenal. Inspiring. Amazing. Beautiful. Astounding. Prodigious. Resplendent. Magnificent. Elegant. Shall I go on?
2561481
Only if you feel like making me blush more
2561497 But I'm running out of large words that are synonymous with those I have already used! D:
Magisterial, Radiant, Awesome, Stupendous, Eloquent, Wom-diddly-bop.
Gave up there at the end.
Sweet, sweet chapter. Twi has reached the library and, low and behold, she saves the entire place and its knowledge. For some reason, the only way I can picture the monsters out in the storm is similar to the snow monster from "Frozen" only as a sand one. Now what is stored in the library can be shared! Onward and upward in reading!
~SolidFire
Huh. Twilight essentially turned the library's defenses from active to passive. Not a bad solution, but it's execution feels awfully rushed. True, sometimes the trip is more important than the destination, but the trip was pretty uneventful regardless, except for that home stretch, and reaching the goal and fixing everything in a handful of paragraphs feels a bit underwhelming
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Omg I felt the exact same way, the author had all this buildup for this mysterious library, that nobody could get into, surrounded by deadly monsters in the middle of nowhere, and he ends it on "It was knowledge all along guys, and I figured it out literally right after I gave up." This chapter could have been soooooooooo much better if he would have just took his time. It was a good chapter, great even, but too rushed to be my favorite so far.
Bolt turned to her, frowning slightly. “But I made a grave mistake.”
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