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Um.... yeah, that just happened.
That ending.
Yep. The feels are here.
you hit hard.
buck manly tears, I’m crying like a baby here
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*sigh*
You've no idea how I feel about these chapters. Before you throw some mislead exposition on my head about my motivations and feelings, take an introspective look and ask yourself "Do I really want to trash an author who has just finished the most emotional and meaningful thing he's ever worked on?"
In short: "Do I want to be an insufferable cock today?"
My feels....
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO TWILIGHTS DEAD DAM YOU poor luna no alicorn twi why.
Not in tears like some of the others, but still very, very moved. A fantastic end to a wonderful tale. Bravo.
Side note: Fairly happy to see that Archer didn't go evil in the end.
Well, i cried inside, that's enough right?.......... Eh guess not..... 'cries'
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Umm... You mentioned that you have "finished the most emotional and meaningful" work you have done, but the story is still labeled "Incomplete". Were you referring to the chapters, or is the story actually finished?
Either way, I am not trying to be insufferable, I'm just asking. With that said, I have enjoyed reading this and thank you for the experience.
I haven't cried this hard since the ending of Terminator 2...
I just keep thinking to myself that the story isn't over yet, there's still hope
This is one of those times where I'm supposed to be crying, yet I'm grinning like a madman.
Also, FIVE BITS SAYS TWILIGHT WILL LIVE AGAIN /
Thank you for writing this story. It was a fun ride.
Despite what I wrote in the comments to the previous chapter, it was still a beautiful story. I loved it.
Although the fact that it is still marked as "incompleted" gives me hope. At least give us an epilogue explaining what went wrong with the prophecy.
I like it.
But i really don't want to.
I wished for happy, i could've used some happy.
So.. this is the end huh?
Edit: Well fuck, Mod Spoiler, but god fuckin damn. I might love you.
I can't....it...oh god...why was the prophecy wrong...why did Twilight go.
This is by far the more emotional story that has ever been uploaded to FimFiction. Thank you>>2676742 for creating this masterpiece.
Welp, you done did it. Invocation of manly tears complete.
. . . Ahh, fuck who am I kidding. They ain't manly, it's just flat-out sorrow.
Oh, also, that last line was one of the WORST parts for me. I love Luna, and that hurt.
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Leaving the status as incomplete goes to prove that as well. Doesn't make the feels hurt any less though.
No disrespect, but this ending and the incomplete tag. Are you going sequel or is this done on a cliffhanger as bad as the ending of The Sopranos?
This ending feels.... Very rushed. One minute, we're facing what looks like the prelude to a big climax, and suddenly "Bam, a hundred and fifty years pass and now I'm dead." in four chapters. Serious tonal whiplash. There doesn't feel like there was any point to the sanguine chapter now.
It feels kind of forced, too - enough so that whatever 'feels' it was supposed to invoke really just fell completely flat. LG - Due respect, you're a good writer, but it really, really feels here like you did not want to write the end to this thing this way. Your usual descriptive panache is buried under the weight of it.
I mean, yeah, sad-tag-is-sad but still. *Shrug* Eh, whatever. I still enjoyed the story as a whole - this wont be the first story I've read where I wasn't big on the ending. Unique take on the Twilight formula, worth reading. Glad the end meant a lot to you, even if it didn't resonate with me. First rule of writing should always be 'write what you want to write and screw everyone else.'
Wish you luck in your future endeavors
There are no words to describe the sadness I'm feeling.
My feels have not cried out this strong in years.
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I honestly have no idea what to think of these chapters. they are completely beautiful, but at the same time... wow. I don't think I've felt this many feels since My Little Dashie. Well done.
Well that was a crappy and disappointing cope out ending... I expected better. Unless you pulling a what a twist ending. I'm really disappointed for such a high quality fic this ending was pitiful.
Fucking ending, I hate them so much. You're invested in that world, that tale, that whole lore and history of the universe a single book or story or novel can create and the, with just a turn of a page, it is over. This honestly was one of the best book I have ever read. THIS is why I became a brony, the show is brilliant but it is the fans that create such artful masterpieces as this that outshines the show. And like I said I fucking hate endings but a journey without an end means nothing. Loyal, my good friend, I truly look forward to your next piece of art.
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*sigh*
Read the damn comments, check the blog posts, get a little educated before you decide to be an insufferable cunt.
*BAWLS*
The feels!
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I actually kinda suspected something was up when I went to read the latest chapters and it wasn't marked as "Complete". I was actually gonna mention something toll Wlah's comment
I HATE CLIFFHANGERS
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Not really ruining it, looking if it was really finished was the first thing I did.
But thanks for confirming, makes it able to appreciate these two chapters even more :-)
Wait, did you just delete some comment on Ch. 36?
This was quite the shift in tone and pace from the rest of the chapters . I would like to read something like this from you again... The bitter sweet feel was there since the first paragraphs, and even though it sped up the end was not bad.
Found a few spelling errors, nothing much... now how bout zombie Twilight smexy times?
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Eew.
People shouldn't complain, this was a beautiful ending. Not every ending has to be happy, and this fit the story perfectly. Don't let anyone tell you different.
guys? maybe it's just an error on the part of Loyal here... but as soon as i saw the chapter title, i looked at the status and saw "incomplete".
please, Loyal, correct me if i'm wrong, but i don't think we've seen the end quite yet. and if i'm right... well you guys, stop freaking out and check what's going on xD
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THANK you!
You know what, I was going to write yet another long, scathing comment here. Last time, you obviously rushed the ending, and left us all feeling... frustrated and disappointed to say the least. The addition of the Royal conflict arc, although Rarity was shown rather out of character, was a nice addition. Some of the Luna and Twilight was further built upon, and overall, it was a good addition to the story.
This ending, with Twilight's death at the end, is extremely dissatisfying. You might have an idea how to how much so. Sure, Wlah (if that's the spelling) has apparently 'ruined' it, although with it being left incomplete, it shows that you have some sort of plan in motion to wrap it up. I'm hoping it's something to not end this on a tragic note, as well, this ending is a tragic romance.
As far as the how you brought it to this point, it felt neglected still. I know time skips are a tricky thing, however, so I can't slam too hard there. I just don't know...
On one hand, I want to rip your head off for this ending. On the other hand, everything leading to the ending was good. Fuck.
Adios.
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Sorry the temptation was too great!
Ah one thing... I feel that the princesses' lament at the end could do without that vocal reiteration of the last line of the propechy.... It was supposed to be a secret and to me it sounds weird... But what do I know, just look at my grammar!
Still feels incomplete to me. the ending here just doesn't quite feel right at all, not to mention the sudden cut off practically cries out for more to be written.
Well what to say hmm wel first of all.... THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU OH SO SO SO SO MUCH first for writing this amazing fanfic I loved it oh so much you've just been an amazing author with this even the small mini climax from the past 4 chapters was good! And even though I hate endings this was a good one albeit I'm sad but story's have to end and this is no different but again thank you for this amazing story and an ending that is equivalent to my little dashie in feels
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I don't normally comment on stories, mainly because I feel like it amounts to either "MOAR!!!" or just an echo of love in the masses, but since I can tell you've been getting some hate I figure I'd put in my 2 cents.
I love this story. I will admit, the ending hurt, and it was very sad, but this is your story and you get to end it like you want. Cause that's what fanfiction is for, since we all know that TwiLuna will never happen in canon (Dammit). Keep writing, and I hope you find a muse to deliver something of this scope again (maybe we can haz happy ending? )
Well done!
Maybe the "Beside the Sun and Moon" bit means her star beside the literal Sun and Moon.
Or maybe she'll come back, we'll see.
Incomplete or not, this still feels rushed. The writing shouldn't jerk readers around like this. Maybe if there was a little buildup to this in previous chapters but I felt as if we were half way through an important part of Twilight's life and skipped it. Please don't call people cunts for expressing their opinions! They are cunts if they are a cunt about it!
It was an amazing ride and I'd be lying if I said I wasn't sad that it's over. Your talent for storytelling is incredible Loyal, don't ever let anyone tell you different. These last chapters had me in tears from start to finish, takes damn good writing to evoke emotion like that.
As for the chapter content I can safely say that while I'm saddened I am also content. A part of me had expected her to ascend and live on with Luna, that route seemed entirely plausible, yet I'm okay that you chose the alternative. Thank you again for sharing this masterpiece with us. The ride was long, a bit bumpy and almost ended prematurely but I enjoyed every single god-damned second.
Now if you'll excuse me, I need more tissues.
It's a good story and I can't wait to see the next chapters
"Do I want to be an insufferable cock today?"
Do you want honest critique that will help you grow as a writer, or do you want a hugbox full of meaningless platitudes? If you want to continue to grow and develop as an author, you're going to have to swallow your pride, put away your feels, and allow others to help you identify mistakes that you could be learning from.
Very emotional update . The fact that it is incomplete still should have been enough of a tell that it is not over (and would have made for more of a cliff hanger by wondering if it was by mistake or not)
This is the best story i have read by far, and have been trying to find something close to its caliber since i discovered it. Kudos to you Loyal2-1, I look forward to your future endeavors. This story has made you my favorite writer around
this was beautiful, i was honestly choking up reading the last two chapters, i almost lost it when they shared their final embrace, be proud, you are one of the five that has stolen tears from me, and one out of three who got me choking up, i hope you are happy
sorry to see not everyone got to enjoy the ending, i for sure did and so i say, thank you for the amazing ride, i loved every laugh and tear that you put on me
P.S. you are awesome
now to watch the reveal of the epilogue(s)
...I can't help but dislike how you just "Let's skip the entirety of Twilight's life right now, and then continue when it's minutes before her death." It feels lacking and a little shallow to me. We saw little to nothing of the rest of the Mane6 which I think is a bit sad too. I would've liked to see them more.
As for the "spoiler" made by our lovely mod; the story is still tagged as incomplete and there is an important clue in how the prophecy is written and what Luna and Celestia "believes", this made me realise that the story isn't over just yet, there is more to come.
The clue I'm talking about is the following: The Prophecy says that Twilight will become the Princess of Magic and live alongside the Sun and the Moon. Luna and Celestia both seems to believe that she "wasn't supposed to die", but nowhere does the prophecy say that Twilight won't die; it doesn't exclude the possibility of her returning to life, which is what I suspect will happen. Either that, or you blow up half of Equestria.
When i finished the story i had a thought ...
Why are archmages sent to the stars? Was the tradition started way back in the day so that it could be done to Twilight in the present?
hmmm
step 1) become archmage
step 2) become even more of a hero to the nation
step 3) die
step 4) become one with the stars
step 5) ???
step 6) alicorn of stars and magic (maby friendship)
Is it done? Because the story is still marked as 'incomplete.'
Such a sad ending... Even Celestia and Luna couldn't have known that the prophecy wouldn't come true.
This was a fantastic story overall. I look forward to your future works!