Cadance and Shining's world comes to a screeching halt when they are visited by a specter from their past.
My entry for the Dialogue Only Contest.
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Cadance and Shining's world comes to a screeching halt when they are visited by a specter from their past.
My entry for the Dialogue Only Contest.
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Not quite what I expected but did like it
This was good. I don't think I could do a dialogue only story because I like to describe things.
There are layers to this story that I didn't catch on the first read...I like that. I especially like the fact you didn't have a blazing neon sign giving away clues to the players, which added to the intrigue and made the story deeper. I am quite certain I'll discover more gems you've hidden with subsequent readings, but allow me to post this one, final thought:
Well done.
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It does take a little bit of reprogramming. It's almost like writing a reader's theater or a radio drama.
Well, technically Shining is Prince Consort, while Cadance is the rightful Ruler of the Crystal Empire, which means that no matter how many children he had, before or after his marriage, or who he had them with, none of them would have priority for the crown of the Crystal Empire over Flurry Heart.
https://www.deviantart.com/doublewbrothers/art/Baby-567827496
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Are you telling me that they named that mofo SHINING ARMOR and he's technically not a knight OR a prince?
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That's cute...
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Thank you. It's nice to know the story hits the way I wanted it to.
Nice sweet short story my friend. I enjoyed the back and forth between the charaters, their arguments and points were all sound and vaild to different degrees. Overall, i give this one a solid 7 out of 10.
probably the best approach to this plot idea ive seen. doesnt linger too long, has objectives and shoots to meet them, contains not only plot but ethos, pathos, and proper handling of characterization through both. triple upside you slid out of the pigeonhole for a minute too, even if you are still doing cady/shining stories.
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Gotta seize those rare moments where I'm left to my own devices.