This story is a sequel to Euphoria Hooves
After cleaning up the house, Rainbow Dash spots a duffle bag belonging to Soarin. One side of the bag showcased the Wonderbolts Logo, and the other side had the zipper on it. It was Soarin’s training bag!
Rainbow Dash wondered what contents the bag held, but never actually opened it. Since she was alone today, she thought she would be able to check some of his stuff out. Unfortunately, Soarin is known to show up at the wrong times, and Dash hasn’t gotten the message yet. One thing leads to another, and she finds herself inside of Soarin’s Wonderbolt uniform. Only problem is, Soarin’s been watching her the entire time.
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Out of all these 3 parts this one is my favourite. I didn't quite get what you were aiming for with the first two. It's like they are supposed to be wholesome with how supportive Soarin' is, but it doesn't work for me when it comes to abusable substances.
This one was in the same vibe, but actually pulling the slice-of-life off.
With both Twilight being an alicorn and Rainbow not a Wonderbolt I am wondering what happened in the timeline of this AU. Rainbow Dash seems happy while still admiring the Wonderbolts and presumably still planning on joining them.
There is nothing to scoff at in terms of grammar and punctuation - something I cannot say about myself. Say, what is your writing background?
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Thanks for the comment!
First, I would like to say that the first two stories were made just to add a sort of building relationship between Soarin and Rainbow Dash. As the stories continue, you can notice that they continue to grow closer.
Next, “Cider Run” and “It’s Not What It Looks Like!” both stand to promote the corrections of Rainbow’s bad habits/behaviors. When it comes to their relationship, Soarin has been trying to reduce the amount of destructive decisions Dash makes to avoid problems in the future. For “Euphoria Hooves,” I was going with Dash’s regret for ever even taking the edible, as she was looking to try them out. She was curious about them, and wanted to see how they would make her feel. Wasn’t exactly going for Soarin supporting the abuse, but rather how he was supporting her through her mistake.
As for the timeline, it falls somewhere between Twilight receiving her wings and before Rainbow Dash becomes a Wonderbolt. Not sure about exactly when that is, but perhaps that’s another story idea! (thanks)
Also, thanks for the compliment, but it’s pretty ironic considering the circumstances. I’m fluent in English, but I’ve never actually written a story or fan-fiction stuff. Essays are usually my strong suit, but I decided to try my luck at story writing. I merely started doing this for fun and to get better at writing, which is also something I’ve come to enjoy over the past few years.
I appreciate all of your constructive criticism and will be working to smoothen out the ridges with my story writing. I hope you enjoy the stories that I’ve written and stick around for the ones that are coming!
You're welcome
For Soarin', I got the feeling that he is more of an enabler in the stories, while the supportive part comes "off screen".
As for the timeline: canonically Rainbow Dash is in reserves before Twilight gets her wings, but I wouldn't worry about that too much. Canon is just a suggestion and shifting these episodes around doesn't change much - pretty much what fanfiction is for.
You're doing great, keep having fun writing.
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Yeah, pretty much. Some of the support is shown in the story but you can get creative with how you imagine what happens “off-screen.”
Also, I thought that Rainbow Dash was in the reserves around the end of season 4. Yes, she was technically a “Wonderbolt” in training before Twilight got her wings, but she wasn’t a real Wonderbolt that was equipped to fly in shows. She became a reservist after taking the test (around the end of season 4) and passing it made her a reservist. Twilight got her wings in the last episode of season 3 (if I’m correct).
Thanks for your opinions and critiques, I look forward to hearing from you again on some of my next chapters/stories!
So this is before season 6 came around
That's a classic
Okay another adorable shipping here so it looks like rainbow was cleaning out the closet until she found soarin bag but she didn't want to into without his permission but of course her curiosity got the best of her and check it out and basically it's one of his old stuff including his uniform and she really wanted to try it out and she was really having a Time Of Our Lives until soarin showed up and she felt embarrassed and she tried to apologize but he said it was okay he even think it's pretty cute he's a very forgiving dude which was nice so they decide to go out for flying and even decided to relax underneath the skies again another adorable story keep up the good work
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Thanks for your comment! I’m glad you enjoyed it.