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scrungusbungus


yeah I'm still writing, problem is I made like 5 new stories and don't wanna post them too early

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Great start, this looks really promising.
We have too few Nightmare Rarity stories anyways.
:twilightsmile:

Rarity Time. Not at all what I was expecting for a premise regarding her... which is exactly what I was expecting coming from you. You've got a knack for taking the simple "Anon romances a pone" genre to new and interesting places, Scrungus. I'll be waiting for new chapters for this one with great anticipation.

Bruh this summary lmao

The story has a good start. Sweetie Belle was cute as usual with her blunt statements. I haven't read a lot of Nightmare Rarity stories so I'm looking forward to how this goes.

НУ зачем новую историю? Вы закончите те что начали!

When Luna got corrupted into Nightmare Moon. She DOESN'T look like that!!?? :applejackconfused:

Why did the "Nightmares" do that to poor Rarity?

I like to imagine Rarity already has the teeth, and nobody notices

that is the longest summary I have seen yet xD

If nothing else, the cover image has me interested.

The spitballing leading to the cover art will continue to make me chuckle for a very long time.
So thanks for that.

I like all your stories so this already has my interest.

Well, that escalated quickly. :rainbowlaugh:
I'm happy we got some new chapter for this story, and they're great chapters too.

Yay, lots of new Scrungus stuff :raritywink:

Feels a little repetitive, coming from the Cadence/Shining/Anon story with some very similar story beats being hit around the same time, but you definitely know how to keep it interesting.

damnit scrungus, hittin us with the hot man-on-mare action like that. you're most of my tracking tab at this point and i weep, wail, gnash my teeth at each and every one not being complete... yet.

TL;DR: good work, keep it up, i'll necromance you out of that wooden onesie if you die before they're done.

I'm not sure I remember Spike leaving, just Rarity looking over at anon in his suit, and then Spike seems to just stop existing

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"W-well you're very sweet to offer your help, Spike, but perhaps another day! Tata!" Rarity quickly cuts him off, slamming the doors shut and startling Spike.

She slides down the back of the door, sighing heavily -- a quick peek out the window confirms a disheartened Spike slowly trudging back to the library.

Mostly a writing challenge to see if I could.

I understand your hesitation about writing sex scenes. They pose challenges to even the most seasoned writers. How do you write a scene without being cliché and still move the story along? At the same time, how do you fit all of it into your story in a natural way that doesn't feel forced? It's not easy.

But I'm going to be upfront about my opinion: you have nothing to worry about.

The scene was beautiful, steamy, hard, soft, loving, sensual, and lustful... somehow all at the same time.

You conveyed how much her heat drove her wild, how much restraint he used while handling her and himself. The care he put into the act.
The feelings they both experienced, not just the emotions, but also using their sense of touch, sight, smell, and sound.

The scene as a whole was excellent. But there is some very bad news: you now have no excuse not to include scenes in your other M rated titles. :raritywink:

The title reminded me of this

Wonder who the pair that walked off were

Mr.Bungus you're starting to make me upset with how many bangers you keep throwing out here.

ROFLMAO Rarity discovered several things about herself just now.

Achievement get! It's not a lie!

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