Momma's Colt

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Mix-up

Mix-up #1 · Sep 3rd, 2023 · 2 · 1 ·

This was a fun read, nice to see more of your writing from you again. Keep it up man.

NanoMouse

NanoMouse #2 · Sep 3rd, 2023 · 2 · 1 ·

Getting close to her son without realizing her was still her baby.

Bit of a typo there.

Also not sure why everything is center-aligned? It's not a bad thing, but it is weird. You also probably don't need nearly every single sentence to be on its own line.

Strip Tease

Strip Tease #3 · Sep 3rd, 2023 · 3 · 2 ·

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Fixed. I generally type in the center so it reads more like a script. Every sentence is like that because when I started posting stories on here the moderators said paragraphs were too close together so I type my stories this way now. I do find however it is easier to keep your place or find it again with the sentences spaced apart.

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