I just got into My Little Pony, and I hope I can come up with some good stories for this site. My favroite chaacters are Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Spike, Discord, Luna, and Derpy Hooves.
After Sludge was found out. Spike, feeling so horrible for the mean thing he said to Twilight, decided to go and apologize to her. but will she accept his apology? Or will she kick him out?
The story Spike's Family Journey by frenettek314 served as an inspiration for this short one-shot.
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Such a heartfelt story with my fave purple dragon, thanks for sharing!
You & me both Glimmy!
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No problem :)
I can't read this, I just can't, there is a mind boggling amount of spelling/grammar mistakes
First of all, it's Sludge not Aludge.
Do you mean "that's all?"
It's she, not seh
Were you typing on a phone or something.
These are only some of the mistakes, there's many more, The story might have been good but the spelling mistakes just irritate the living heck out of me.
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Sorry dude, I'll go back and fix them. I was using docs and sometimes the typos tend to miss me by a square mile. I'll go back and fix them. I apologize
It's ok, im glad to see that writers do actually check their comments and fix their mistakes.
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right, again I deeply apologize, it's always the small typos that get away...Google Docs seems to miss those
Nice story.
The typos and the grammar is off, but I enjoyed the plot and how Spike interacted with Twilight and the rest.
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Sorry aobtu the typos and spelling grammar, I thought I got them all
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Maybe double check? If you want I can point out the errors.
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That would be helpful, please
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Red means error.
Green means that something should be added.
(There is no period at the end of "sigh").
Putting the "[ hr ]" between Spike's thoughts and "30 minutes later..." looks more fitting but this doesn't need to be fixed if you don't think it fits.
I don't know what word you were trying to say but I don't think "shut" fits very well.
This is all the errors I could find.
I highly suggest using Grammarly for your future works since Google Docs didn't seem to pick up these very basic errors. Either that or you should really check every paragraph to be sure there are no mistakes such as this. That's just my opinion.
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I shall go back and fix these as soon as I can.
Also I do have Grammarly, it doesn't help much, and I don't have the money for the premium version
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Fixed
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Ah ok
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Nice 👍
Thanks for reading my suggestions
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Your welcome, thanks for he help as well :)
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You're welcome. Happy to help
I read the story completely this time and it was good, I enjoyed the character interactions
This is nice and something that should hvae been in the episode.
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Thank you.
sorry for the late reply
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I know right? I mean as I siad, I know Twilight and Spike are much closer but the other girls should have known as well, even Starlight.
I love that pinkie is still pinkie lol great story give spike all the love and ya there’s a persistent rumor that either Lauren or the staff hated spike but i really can’t believe they didn’t lean into to the maternal bond that twilight and her special son pony could’ve had it really looked like he was gonna call her mom or mommy in this episode