As a young stallion cutting lumber deep in the Everfree Forest, Burnt Oak runs across a fawn looking for his parents and the two develop an unexpected friendship.
Gold medal winner for the Slice of Life portion of the 2023 Thousand Words Contest.
As a young stallion cutting lumber deep in the Everfree Forest, Burnt Oak runs across a fawn looking for his parents and the two develop an unexpected friendship.
Gold medal winner for the Slice of Life portion of the 2023 Thousand Words Contest.
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I like how half the story is in between the lines. A sad yet interesting story.
Excellent job at capturing the story of an entire life in 1K words.
oh, great to see a Burnt Oak story! there are not nearly enough of later characters such as he
ooh, love that the Everfree deer occupy a mythical space in the culture of the surrounding ponies! their version of the Forest Folk
oof! though i always wondered what the deal was with him seeming so old while the same age as Applejack’s parents, when all her friends’ parents are middle-aged at most
aww, it’s not right for a pony to have so few to care about him! :(
such a sad reflection of what happens to so many of us with time, as connections made in childhood and youth wear away with the passing of those others
oh, that is a lovely tribute! a fitting end to the story that started from the king’s youth.
really loved the enchanting atmosphere of this tale. it feels very much like one that ponies would pass down amongst themselves. and the seasons passing along with the seasons of Burnt Oak’s life is a great touch. this was a true masterpiece, and one of my favorites of the contest so far. thank you so much for it!
I do love the turning wheel of seasons coinciding with Burnt Oak aging. Always a great parallel to invoke.
At least, that was the belief until ponies found out where the brothers were dumping their power plants’ thaumoactive waste, but that’s a story for another day.
Lovely work throughout… though I do wish you’d done one last sweep for typos. Still, a wonderful, heart-wrenching tale about how a single good deed can resonate for a lifetime and beyond. Thank you for it and congrats on the gold.
Hello! Here's your courtesy note for my review of this. A really unusual combo of character tags! An atmospheric fairy tale, one which rewards reading between the lines. A few too many technical errors (those listening to readings won't worry about that) which is a shame, but it's still interesting.