Each snowflake is different from the other. All of them are together despite their differences and are never separated, they are interdependent.
One morning, Sunny goes to her father's former bedroom and sees a photo of her father smiling lovingly at a mare next to him. Sunny wonders if the mare in the picture was her mother. Who was her mother? Why doesn't she know anything about her?
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I would say this was a pretty interesting story and there could be so many theories about who is Sunny's mother either she was a unicorn or an earth pony with some powers or something like that either way it was very interesting that Twilight knows who she is but unfortunately never got the chance to explain but there is one thing we all know I guess we'll find out what this all means and hopefully they have to stop Opaline and her evil ways this was a pretty good story for your first time so keep up the good work
Its possible that Twilight is Sunny's ancestor
Congrats on your story getting approved! I’m proud of you!
I wonder that too. If Sunny is Twilight’s decedent then her mom could be a child that Twi and presumably Flash had and realized that her daughter had the hope for Equestria’s future when Opaline fell to the dark side.
This is a good first story. It feels like the start of something longer and sets up a lot of questions for the plot to answer as you go along. One grammar/style thing that kinda bothered me a bit is you pretty consistently mix verb tenses in a way that feels a little weird. As an example:
You start in past tense, then you're in present progressive, then past, and then present progressive again.
I would probably keep that all in past tense if I were writing it. Using the same example:
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Thank you
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Thanks. I will try to fix them in the next stories
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Yes
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You’re welcome.
Glad I could help.
Aside from some issues with tense that someone else already pointed, this is not bad for your first story. One thing that I will add, however, is that this feels less like a one shot and more like the intro to a much longer story. Which isn't a bad thing, mind you, but I am curious about it.
That was a nice little story, it's very nice. I especially like the conversation between sunny and twilight. I would like to see a continuation of the story. Good job
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At first, I wasn't going to write a sequel to this story, but I think it would be good to write a sequel.
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Yes. Thank you
nice story :)
short but good, i do hope that you will write a sequel to it :)
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Thank you
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Where'd you get that Avatar picture?
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Um.. Do you mean story art?
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No?
your avatar picture looks nice
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Thank you.
I brought it from here :
https://trixiebooru.org/images/3061356?q=misty
Why did Twilight just appear out of nowhere
Is she dead?
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Well... I think you will understand in the rest of the story. wait for now
I dig the story so far. I can sense a lot of potential with how this story would go if it gets a sequel. This will be able to start up a bunch of theories on Sunny's past! But overall, I love it!
Also, is it okay if I do a voiceover of this story and upload it?
The YT Channel that I plan on is this: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCHB08pPOY-fB8n99FGmxZ9Q
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Thank you. i'm glad to hear that.
Congratulations on your first story! This was definitely interesting, and I'll be watching for more.
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Thank you
Awesome!
Recorded reading this for a Audiobook version to come soon
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I'm glad you liked it
I wrote a story about the new chapter. But because my language is not English, I translated with a translator. Can someone edit it for me?
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My language is romanian
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Very cool