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HeartfireFirebrand


A leaner of SFM who writes ocassionally

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I havent read this yet. I will later. I hope astra kicks nightmares butt!

So, where's the Harry Potter tag?

Celestia knocked on the door, a grey mare with a white and purple mare opened the door. The mare bowed as she recognised Celestia “It’s honour for you to grave our home Princess.”

recognized
honor
grace

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Your were correct about Grave being grace but for those other two I write the British and Australian way. Australians and British spell it honour not honor and spell recognised instead of recognized. Like metre and meter.

So the protagonist is powerful, and knows how to perfectly control her power, she can also become a dementor, which is one of the worst creatures in the magical world, I wonder if she is immune to the patronus? Well, let's see how this plays out.

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There are few changes to the wizarding world due to her intervention but nothing major.

So basically Neville's parents are fine and he is living with them and not with his grandmother, which means that we will see a Neville a little or very different from the original series.

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Yes, it was something I was thinking about.

The unicorn boasted “I am Nightmare Moon, Queen of the Night and your future Ruler!”

The unicorn?

Astra frowned “I’m an Animagus, it allows one to transform into another form. In this case I can transform into a Dementor due to the dark magic experiments my father did to me when I was a baby.

That not how that works.

Right now the main character feels like a classic Mary Sue character from the Harry Potter fanfics.:facehoof: Don't really like it, unless it was meant for the laughs.

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In a way it does. Mythical creature animagus' are extremely rare. But not uncommon. Just rare. And with her biology changed by dark magic, it in a way makes sense

Elder wands aren't that rare. Their hard to come by yes, but not rare, just uncommon

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First Astra saw her as a winged unicorn, wizard don't have Alicorns so unicorn would be the term in her eyes. Second we don't much about Dementors or how they came to be as well as we don't know everything about the limits of using dark magic on a wizard or witch for prolonged periods would do to them.

This story MUST CONTINUE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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I am planning a Harry Potter story soon on my current account.

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I look forward to reading it.
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I am sorry to here that.

Shame at the lose of this account. This is a great story.

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