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Nice addition! I can't wait to see the next chapter!
Here we go! Now that we’ve got a pre-reader, we can start Notes From the Pre-readers. This is for chapters 1-2, see next chapters AN for his links and credits
If anyone feels like it dose make some cover art (sadly I can’t pay as a heads up. Sorry) let me know
This was just sad for me >.>
And so far this guy doesn’t seem too commenting this time and there weren't too many other major grammar boo boo’s, so see you next time
Notes from the pre-readers chapter three
Nothing particularly stand out from Larry, just some grammar bits (one day with grammerly if I can figure out how it works for mobile and without data -/-) still nice to keep and learn from :3
Took awhile for me to spot the difference. Can you? 🤔
I went with just removing the comma
Not sure why these still get me >.>
Why’d you change her name from melody to harmony?
Notes from the pre-readers;
Seriously? He still hasn’t gotten back to me on what I’ve been spelling ^^’ >.>
So, original the two leads were named Harmony & PJ (cause, AJ (my SFW name) P... even for this being shameless self-insert, I had always planed to change it. Although I ended up changing Harmony to Melody after that scene where, now West, refers to her friends as the Elements. You know, of harmony? Although as I wrote this I recall Octavia’s last name is Melody, but at this point I’m just going to stick with Melody. I like it. Although please point out if you see the names Harmony or Pj please
I think now that he was just pointing this fact out. But another fun fact, he was also the one who commissioned the cover art for that story before this series existed
And that will do it for this round. Hope you enjoy, and the more pre-readers I have on a project, the better
Notes from the pre-readers
And that will be a wrap for this weeks notes!
Notes from the pre-readers
First off, this didn’t come from my pre-reader this week. Although to back track just a bit; A lot of people tell me I should get grammerly. Been meaning too, but have reasons beyond being lazy! One of which is what google drive tried to suggest I do with this sentence;
I feel less rushed...
Oh! And I posted this in one of my discord group, and it got enough good responses id like to preserve so I guess there is a bit more to add;
True story ^^’ maybe some other time on that fic I’m editing :3
The chat then changed subjects, and any other chat didn’t have anything quite as constructive to say or was pushed too far back into its history for me to find
Anyways, we now return to our more regularly scheduled notes from, our only, pre-reader so far.
Again, if you’re interested and want early sneak peaks, feel free to ask!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/466203/a-nightmare-to-remember have to skip over those notes myself, but want this chapter out first, so if you’re curious to see, check out this stores comments and I’ll let you know what I find next notes here.
I honestly prefer the flash of light and new mare appearing instead of the melding physically together bits.
It's kinda gross tbh
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Each their own 👍
Although I’ve been taught the ‘flash of light’ is one of the most laziest ways to have a transformation sequence. Also, to be fair this instance, it’s is supposed to be a sad tragic scene, so I suppose it coming off as a little unnerving, while not my intention, was fitting ^^’
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Well the first merge in the story was good.
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And now it is at its end 😭
So what happens now?
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I work on this :3
As for the story, that’s where it ends. Thought it said that 🤔
As for you mean next next; life
Assuming you mean what happens next in this stories life/if I’ll make a sequel;
The latter, no. But for the former, what do you think happened?
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I’m not talking to you.
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Oh! This is my SFW account. Sorry about that, but with this story done, moving back into these stories ^^’
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Right...
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*switches accounts!*
He/i is being legit there ^^’
That was an enjoyable chapter! Finally, the secret is revealed!
Very well put! I like how you handled what happens to the fused girl’s consciousness after they defuse, that’s very well put!
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Just for clarity the fusion name is Melody Orchard and the stallion is named West Jersey. Am I correct?