One Night in the Lecherous Pet Shop

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PlieRow666

PlieRow666 #1 · Apr 29th, 2020 · 3 · ·

Yes make a series out of this!

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #2 · May 27th, 2020 · · ·

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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Very kinky and intense.
-whose name net dared to be spoken -- A particularly fucked up sentence.
-Raw exposition opening.
-“Ugh. Ugh. Ugh. Ugh,” -- this is horrifying.
-Now she was being assaulted -- passive voice.
-Innovative idea with all the animal transformations.

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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 70/100
Allure: 20/100
Enticement: 80/100
Immersion: 15/100
Prose Quality: 10/100
Total Score: 195/500
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