Applejack accidentally broke your leg in a bucking accident, and she’s absolutely devastated. You have forgiven the pony, but she is not forgiving herself. And there appear to be signs that she is sinking into something worse.
(If you don’t like blood, gore, depression, and death, well, I’m just like you! This story does not contain vivid descriptions of the injury, nor does it contain any deep, dark thoughts or actions, like self-harm or suicide. None of that. If you’ve ever wanted to hear an injury story that stays on the lighter side, you’re in the right place!)
August 19, 2020: 500 views! Thank you all so much!
December 12, 2021: 1,000 views! First time ever for me! Thank you!
Cover art by cholthe-progamer
Chapters (8)
Great start! You have me tracking the story.
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Thank you for reading!
Spotted this. Beware the elusive typo. Unless there are other humans not yet mentioned
I think seeing them would really help you." [him]
Yes! Go see them! You know they're a friend now; they will help!" [ him, he's, he ]
Good start tracking and up vote
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I did that on purpose so that you all can insert your own gender into the story, with it being second person. I thought if I used gender-specific pronouns, it would be awkward for someone who doesn't identify with those pronouns to read it, when the story is supposed to feature them.
But otherwise, thanks for the read! Especially since I'm just starting out and am thus small, any notice of my writing is greatly appreciated!
This story isn't showing a very good like-to-dislike ratio so far. Can I get some feedback in regards to that? I'd love to know!
Coming from someone who ain’t no damn brownie, this story is pretty good so far. Even if I’m only one chapter in.
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Thank you so much for reading!
you keep switching from singular to plural it's not a huge thing but it is really jarring when the reader runs into it. It tends to drop me right out of the story when I hit it.
human friend 1last time ah saw them2 1 [singular] [2 plural]
They'll be out of the hospital only one human [ He'll be out ]
the Human1 after They2 are discharged, [1 singular] [2 plural]
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"They" is used as singular all the time. For example, "Someone's knocking on my door and I don't know who they are." Or, "Looks like somebody left their phone here."
Again, I wanted it to be gender-neutral. But if you would prefer me to use male pronouns, I'll take it into consideration!
Base on the summary of the story, it should not be rated e.
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How so?
Well we're talking about this:
(If you don’t like blood, gore, depression, and death, well, I’m just like you! This story does not contain vivid descriptions of the injury, nor does it contain any deep, dark thoughts or actions, like self-harm or suicide. None of that. If you’ve ever wanted to hear an injury story that stays on the lighter side, you’re in the right place!)
And e does not contain anything on top... wait, oh, this is so misleading. Man, I'm am conflicted/confused on what else to say on discovering this.
I probably should edit that, I think I phrased it a bit poorly, but like you said, this story does not contain those things I mentioned, so E seemed like the proper rating to me. Or were you trying to say something different?
I'll clarify this a bit, because I think I phrased it badly. I'm not saying that I overall dislike the use of depression, self-harm, and suicide in stories. I think they are extremely important topics that absolutely should be written about; it's just not my personal preference to read stories featuring them. I will read such stories, but very rarely. I have to be in the right mood to do so, and that mood doesn't come around often.
What I was trying to say was that I wanted to dedicate this story to people who wanted to read about a mental problem, such as guilt, but weren't comfortable reading something that delves so far down.
Which also extends to the blood and gore part. Scrolling through this site, I was completely unable to find an injury story that did not have gore and blood in it. So I took it upon myself to write one, because I personally do not like reading about gore and blood, and I wanted to dedicate this story to anyone who feels the same. But I'm not against it or anything; use it in your stories if you want.
So yeah. Sorry if I misled anyone.
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Why not use the "Anon" name then? That way people can still identify with the character and the story would read better.
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Well, I never felt the need to use a name for the reader, because the way I saw it, pronouns could get it all done. I never had a point in the story where I felt that only a name would work. And even if I did use the "Anon" name, that wouldn't fix the gendered pronouns problem, as I can't just use the name over and over again.
For example: "You know Anon is a friend now; Anon will help." Yeah, that looks awkward.
Due to all that, I figured that keeping the pronouns gender-neutral was the best way to go.
Hey, Player 4. First, you were following me, and now I’m reading one of your stories without even knowing it. What a coincidence. Thank you for being a follower. Also, about the story… that accelerated quickly and is kind of priceless.
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You're welcome! I found "Super Pinkie Galaxy" while browsing through Mario crossovers, and then I noticed you have another one. You already have amazing story ideas and I think you can go far!
That is quite a coincidence!
You're right; the story did accelerate quickly! Injuries are like that; you have no idea what's coming until it happens, and when it does, a whole new thing is in full swing right away. Especially in the case of a major injury like this one.
So I do feel it's a bit out of character for Applejack to be going through all this. That said, you did a fantastic job with this story. I loved how you explored the trauma process, giving little pieces of advice along the way for anyone who might be feeling similarly. I also liked you showing how friendship can not only survive, but thrive in spite of events like these.
Seeing Applejack come to terms with her pain was a plotline I didn't know I wanted to see, but now that I have, all I can say is excellent job to you, Player 4. Thanks for writing this.~
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Your comment means so much
Thank you so much!
Yeah, looking back, it might have been a little out of character. I'd say it's a bit of a challenge to write a canon character going through an experience that we never see them go through in the show.
I also have to say, this story's staying power has impressed me. It's over a year old now, and people are still finding it and liking it more often than many of my newer stories! Thanks to you and everyone who has played a part in that!
Applejack... bucked my leg.
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Lucky it wasn't Big Mac!
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True! I don't think we've seen Big Mac ever do a buck, so I don't think he really does it, but if he could... yeah, that would be extra painful.
Aww! This was such a sweet story and such a good read!
*And Into my favorites this story goes*
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Thank you! For both the comment and the favorite!
Not to mention, she didn't even have a weapon, so just assault.