"Luna Eclipsed" Alternate Ending
Poor Luna
"Luna Eclipsed" Alternate Ending
"They hath never liked us, and they never shall," Princess Luna said sadly to Twilight.
Twilight felt a strong resolve build up in her at these words. There was no way she would let anypony miss out on the wonderful Magic of Friendship! Already, a plan was forming in the smart unicorn's mind. It was about time everypony, especially Pinkie Pie. . .
Twilight ground her teeth. Pinkie Pie. . .the cause of all of this grief!
It was about time that they all saw the harm they were doing poor Luna!
The ponies in Ponyville in low spirits. Nearly everything was destroying during the panic, and children were weeping that Nightmare Night had been canceled. However, one pony who didn't seem upset was Pinkie Pie. The pony in chicken's clothing darted back and forth, pecking up fallen pieces of candy off of the ground, that is, until she was tackled by Applejack.
"Ah can't believe ya!" Applejack shouted in Pinkie Pie's face, "Can't ya see all the damage you've caused! All the ponies ya've hurt!"
Before the very surprised Pinkie Pie could respond, there was a flash of light on the stage, revealing none other than Princess Luna herself.
"PINKAMENA DIANE PIE!! COME FORTH!!" she shouted in her Royal Canterlot Voice.
Pinkie shrieked, and attempted to run off. However, her efforts were futile. Applejack had bitten her pink tail and was hanging on tight. Applejack then pulled hard and turned, sending Pinkie Pie stumbling in the direction of the stage.
Applejack stepped behind the pink pony and said in a cold, hard voice, "Ya get what ya deserve!"
Applejack then gave Pinkie a strong push, sending her to the base of the stage. Before she could get her bearing, Twilight's magic levitated her right in front of the moon Princess.
Everypony in town gasped and stared with wide eyes at the stage, wondering what was going to happen. Pinkie Pie just looked up, eyes wide with terror while she was frozen in fear.
Luna just looked down at the pony before her in sighed. She then looked at the crowd around her. She took one last glance at Twilight, who gave a nod. Luna took a breath, and spoke to the crowd in a normal voice that was still loud enough for them all to hear.
"Look at us, er, I mean me," she said, "Look how big I am. I have wings and a horn. I'm so tall. My fur is so dark and mysterious. My mane and tail has stars within them, and they blow in a magical breeze. I am so different than all of you. I thought that I could get everypony to look past those differences, and get to know me, and treat me as a friend. I wished to be loved by my subjects. But now I know how foolish it all was. What a waste of time. You all don't forgive me for what I hath done as Nightmare Moon. No matter what I do, I shall always be a monster in your eyes."
Luna looked down apologetically at Pinkie Pie. The Princess sighed and said, "Yes, you were right, Pinkamena Diane Pie. I'm a monster. I terrifying, horrible, huge, unlovable . . . monster. . ."
Luna's legs slowly buckled as she lowered herself into a sitting position. The Princess of the Moon bowed her head and closed her eyes, looking very dejected and filled with an immense pain and sadness. The sight was too much for some ponies. Many of them had tears running down their cheeks. Many of them had too look away. Others whispered to one another to express their sympathy for the Princess or disgust with their own actions. And yet others just hung their heads in shame and sadness.
The children's reaction was touching. Nearly every foal and filly wanted to run up and give the Princess a "it's okay" hug. The adults did their best to keep the kids from dunning off. However, one managed to slip through.
Luna opened her eyes a bit as she something soft and warm next to her. She could see the little foal she saved from the tub of green water, Pipsqueak wasn't it? The little foal in the pirate costume was nuzzling her side softly. The child then looked up at her and whispered, "If. .. if it means anything. . .I want you to know. . .that you're my most favorite Princess ever."
Luna was beyond touched by this sentiment. However, she had promised Twilight that she'd go along with this plan, although in her opinion it had surely gone on far enough, but promise was a promise. Therefore, Luna simply looked away and once again bowed her head with her eyes closed, the very picture of dejection.
Pinkie Pie could only stare at the Princess in front of her in shock for a while, but eventually she found her voice. She gulped and said shakily, "I- I didn't mean to be mean. I just thought, well, it's fun to be scared right? So, I thought I'd help you be real scary, so we could all have fun! But, I didn't let you have any fun at all. I didn't think everypony else would take the scar part so seriously. I mean, how are you gonna gobble us up, we're all nearly as big as you! But, well, I guess I took it too far. I guess I was really big meanie pants. I- I'm really really really really really sorry Luna."
There was moment of complete silence after that. This was broken by the creak of the wooden boards that made up the stage as Luna lifted her head to look at Pinkie Pie. Her once curly and poofy hair now hung straight and dull in color. Indeed, Pinkie did look sincerely sorry.
Luna stared a the pink pony for a moment, and then said, "But I never wanted my little ponies to fear me, never." Luna slowly got to her hoofs, her voice slowly gaining volume as she continued, "But nopony really understood, how could they? That all I ever wanted was a chance to fell their love. Why does nothing ever turn out like it should?"
Luna slammed her hoof down onto the stage to emphasize her next words. "Well, what the heck! I went and did my best! And, my gosh! I really tasted something swell! And for a moment, why, I made those pumpkins fly! And I got high-score in Spider-Toss as well! I did!"
Luna looked out to the audience, who were all watching in awe and excitement as the sad princess began to gain her confidence and zest back right before their eyes. Luna's eyes sparkled as she continued her soliloquy, "And for the first time since I don't remember when, I felt just like my old royal self again! And I, Luna, the Princess of the Moon-."
Luna froze, her eyes growing wide. "That's right," she whispered. She then suddenly jumped into the air and hovered their with beats from her royal wings. "I am the Princess of the Moon! Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha!!!!" Luna shouted, not in her Royal Canterlot Voice, but a loud voice for sure.
The crowd went wild with cheering as Luna shouted out to the heavens, "And I hereby bring Nightmare Night back now! 'Cause I've got some new ideas that will really make you WOW! And, my gosh! I'm really gonna give it all my might!"
Luna suddenly froze again and lightly landed back on the stage, "Uh oh, I hope there's still time to set things right. . .hmmm."
Luna gained a sunny smile as her horn began to glow. The magic surged all over Ponyville, as right before their eyes, everything destroyed in the riot was instantly repaired and set back up. The cheering that followed was tremendous. Luna could stop smiling. Pip was jumping up and down happily. Pinkie Pie's hair was back to normal and she had a big relieved smile on her face. Twilight gave Luna a hearty wink.
Luna threw her head back and shouted, "OH MOST WONDERFUL OF- oops. . . I mean. . .oh most wonderful of nights!"
(The episode just ends with the letter and ending scene as it did in the actual episode. . .)
THE END
You probably already know this, but Luna's speech was actually the song "Poor Jack" from "The Nightmare Before Christmas" with a few changes in lyrics.
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(reads the description)
I... I... what?
(reads the story)
...did you write the description to a different story by accident?
Not what I was expecting at all. Liked it but very misleading.
1122999
Did he change the description or something?
Also, you called your own story ''truly touching' and I felt nothing -.-''
1123218 ...huh, he did. ...okay.
1123298
Kinda weird question, what was the old description? xD
You need to have someone read over your story and look for grammar errors, there were a few that jumped out.
1123310 Geeze, I don't remember much (bad memory). Apparently, some other pony was setting out to ruin Nightmare Night, so Pinkie Pie and Twilight became detectives again to solve the "mmmystery" (yes, that pun was used). ...notice how it had NOTHING to do with "Luna Eclipsed".
1123325
...wut
1123338 Honest to God, even though my memory is crud, THAT'S what the original description essentially said.
Um...okay, that was...interesting.
Really, what else can I say? Half of the fic was Luna singing "Poor Jack," while the other half was Applejack breaking character so you could vent your frustration with Pinkie in this episode. I didn't like her there either, but AJ wouldn't turn on her as viciously as she did. At most, she would give her a cold glare, a short lecture, and then tell her to apologize.
But other than that, it was fine.
1122999>>1123158>>1123218>>1123826
Oh boy. . .well I really blew it with this one, man!
First, I jinxed it with writing the wrong description, and then, well, I kinda made a "half" Pinkie-Bashing fic.
So, I'll tell ya what. First, why not smile and say: "Hey! Matthais123 just gave us an ARG (Alternate Reality Game) with this story! The previous description he changed was actually a clue to a special story he's planning on publishing for Halloween/Nightmare Night 2012! He's smart!"
And second, I am leaving it up to you, yes YOU!, to vote on whether or not I should delete this story from this site! Seriously, I was NOT happy with this story, and will gladly delete it if you so wish.
This is Matthais123 signing off!
1123826 I agree, it shouldhave been Twilight but otherwise this seems like a better ending to 'Luna Eclipsed' and let's hope in Season 3 if she gets an episode devoted to her and her sister they don't screw it up which if 'A Canterlot Wedding' was anything to go by they won't.
1125048
Damn why did I not realize. Well I will be watching you! 
1125048 A) ...heh, I like that idea.
B) I don't think this should be deleted.
dude did you even watch the episode? Pinkie said its fun to be scared she didnt do it to be mean she even said so herself she knew luna wasnt gonna eat anyone it was just a joke sure it was cruel but still there is no reason to bash her for being well her its your opinion dude but just saying
1125350
So, should I delete this story?
1125928
Its up to you.
Aargh! Quit with the author bashing! Okay, I admit, Matthais 123 said that this story was one he was not pleased with, but still! Love and tolerance people! Have we forgotten the fundamental principles of bronyism?
Sorry if this comment is a little rantish, but I've just had an absolutely terrible day.
I'm feeling better now.
This is Australia...
I Like it.
Well, I like the story. This is actually what I wish had happened too.
Though, the song threw me off at first, lol.
i wish somebody(pony) make pinkie apple pie alternate ending where pinkie pie are really applejack cousin
Pretty nice to read.
Yeah.. something bugged me on how things went in Luna Eclipse.
I guess due to the whole scare thing or something.
I guess one of the issues is how Pinkie Pie was pretty insensitive there, like her idea was "too soon" due to Luna is going through some serious issues.
Pinkie Pie should have freaking told Luna about her idea before pulling all of this. She should have explained to Luna first.
Ironic that miscommunication(or lack of) is a factor that caused Luna to suffer in this episode, with how Pinkie Pie neglected to explain to Luna about the idea before she did it.
One of the huge factors that led NMM to happen was due to Luna bottling everything up and not telling Celestia her problems while Celestia didn't pay attention/notice Luna's suffering in time.
Hell, Spike suffered through this too in the Owlisious episode. The whole mess in that episode most likely could have been freaking avoided if Twilight explained to Spike why she got the damn owl in the first place, the whole mess happened from Spike being afraid he was being replaced(and "inferior" to the owl). This is pretty eerly similar to Luna feeling inferior to Celestia and being in her shadow and the NMM mess happened.
1125350
The main issue is how Pinkie Pie neglected to explain to Luna BEFORE she did that.
It was pretty insensitive of her due to the issues Luna has there. The idea was "too soon" I say.
She should have at least told Luna about it before doing so.
Something didn't sit right with me in the episode there honestly.
The whole "its fun being scared" part I think is part of the issue there.
I still loved Luna Eclipse(due to how precious Princess Luna is) but even it has some flaws like episodes of any show usually do.
Imagine hating a character so much for making your precious waifu cry that you write two pinkie bashfics about it. Matthais the mouse in your icon would be disappointed in you for hating a character so much like this. Isn’t he supposed to be this all loving forgiving hero same with your god? You all preach to be all loving and forgiving yet you won’t love and forgive pinkie. You are a very sad individual you have to be if you can’t learn to love pinkie.
10516045
Everyone needs to be in on the joke after seeing the shit angry grandpa pulled it’s better people are in on it you don’t want to traumatize the person being pranked.
10546844
Especially in the case with what Luna was going through big time.
10546925
Exactly! The least they can do is talk about it. I hate it when characters don’t just talk instead they do dumb things.
10516045
I agree. Nobody likes being thought of as a monster and Luna had only recently come back from being an actual monster and here everyone including pinkie running away from her like she is going to eat them. If pinkie had talked with her before about nightmare night and how she could join in it would have been better.
1125350
Maybe she didn't mean to be mean but she still was hurting Luna and she could have easily avoided it by talking with her first.
10516039
Well spike never even got a thank you for your hard work and she overreacted to the damage book considering she should have expected this considering she lives in a library with a fire breathing dragon. She been asking for this to happen forever.
11052353
Twilight sure needs to be called out on that.