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Eternal Requiem

Now, and at the hour of our love

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10/10 would cry again

Twilight has issues

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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Certainly very intense.
-she said, "you don't have to -- incorrect dialog capitalization.
-It's odd that she would talk about Rarity just beginning to break and be making plans for the future, when she actually plans to kill Rarity very soon.
-Twilight seems very single-minded about it -- it might be more interesting for her to have at least a little internal conflict about what she's doing?
-Sets its scenes vividly and does a great job of making it seem real.

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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 87/100
Allure: 80/100
Enticement: 77/100
Immersion: 90/100
Prose Quality: 85/100
Total Score: 419/500
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man, I love the level of darkness in your stories, especially because of femdom, I support femdom to death, but not only that, it's how perverse it is when the dominant reaffirms her place and that of her property "you are mine, now and forever and you can never change that ", that kind of thing makes me burn in flames, you have a new follower!!!

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