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Welcome to the Gas Station, Las Pegasus's premiere office of Dental And Oral Health! Doctor Laughing Gas will see you now--and he has a lot on his mind...!

Inspired by a particularly unpleasant visit to the dentist's office.
Proofread by Krack-Fic Kai!

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Comments ( 10 )

Makes perfect sense that this would be a horror fic...

Editor's nitpick here- when you have one person still speaking when there's a new paragraph, don't use a closing quotation mark at the end of the paragraph. You do start the next one with a quote, though.

I'm pretty sure this is the only story I've ever read that has literally no narrative (out of quotes), but given my own past experiences, I could totally see it in my head. Especially the frequency of the question. :rainbowlaugh:

Dentists are evil beyond redemption. Not even with Rainbow Friendship Lazers from the Mane 6, and the Rainbooms, will ever fix that.

But this was funny. And a waste of the horror tag. I didn't see any.

Dr. Gas may have been sampling his namesake a bit too much, and not just because of the dubious logic of his hypothesis regarding how dentists reproduce. (The memetic infection, not the host organism.) Still, wonderful example of a story told largely through implication and toying with the reader's imagination. Excellent work.

... But have you been flossing?

At least his name isn't Dr. Giggles.

This is the way to write a story using only dialogue. I never lost track of who was speaking, and the narrative leapt off the page.

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And a waste of a horror tag.

It's more of a joke-horror tag--though dental trauma, especially the sort hinted at in the story, can be a legit issue for some folks.

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Thanks, as always, for the correction! I can never remember the rule for that...

...this is the only story I've ever read that has literally no narrative...

And thanks for the, um... compliment? :rainbowwild:

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Thank you so much! I always appreciate your comments in particular :pinkiehappy:

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Well, it's especially easy when there's only one speaker :raritywink:

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I meant in the sense of there being nothing that wasn't in quotation marks, hence the parenthetical. :twilightsheepish:

So... did the unicorn used an hammer on me or not?:derpyderp2:

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No, no, not at all! He used the pliers.

Seriously: this was written after an especially gory dental cleaning I had, so it's written with that procedure in mind. However, Dr. Gas also mentions that "you" had a dental emergency of some sort. So... Maybe "you" did need a tooth extracted?

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