Or "Summersong" if that's hard to remember!
The Great and Powerful Trixie would happily tell you that not only is she one of the most elegant and competent unicorns in Equestria, but also one of the most gracious, forgiving, even-tempered, and tolerant ponies in the world.
And on the birthday of that insufferable Mud Briar, the Great and Powerful Trixie was about to prove once and for all that she is not any of these things.
No, she was actually rather a terrible person in general. (And not a very good murderer, either.)
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I feel like I should tell Trixie not to do it.
But screw Mudbriar. Get rid of him.
And there's lots of green in the empire...
No Rarity, you aren't more hypocritical than Trixie.
The theater doesn't come with a marquee to tell you what they're showing? Or posters?
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Well, that and Sunburst follows GalactaStick. Trixie might be a bit quick to judge...
...Oh my god. This was AMAZING.
There's so much to unpack here I don't want to start, but...WOW.
Is Trixie's cowsona based on any particular character from Voyager or made up?
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I honestly would not be surprised if Voyager had a character like that - the three "controversies" Trixie lists off are all based on actual Voyager content iirc - but so far as I know, no! Lactiria is based on the general idea, and a joke more common in like the '80s and '90s, that every sci-fi thing has a weird alien lady with weird boobs. In a human context this usually meant she had more than two, and the closest I could equate that to for a pony was to have a cow udder. This doubles as a joke that cartoons usually let cow udders show without censoring but would never depict mare teats (ironically, Arizona in Them's Fighting Herds does not feature one.)
I felt that it was a rather Star Trek-y thing to have it be a fake pleasure planet or have psychic love aliens. I'm sure they've used that general idea (sans candid giant tits) in more than one series.
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Sadly, you're probably right.
This is a really elaborate haunted house! Why are the flower trio there, though? They're scared of everything!
Trixie's very good at this. And so's the house, if even she's impressed!
Chrysalis, IS that you?
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Mostly, I just needed a group of three, and I remembered them from the olden days! I spent more time looking up their names then they spent being relevant to the story though, lol
I'm not surprised Maud was unharmed. Girl's UNBREAKABLE.
I'd ask why Trixie thought this was a good idea, but that would imply Trixie thinks.
All that and he didn't even die?! Boo! Downvote!
Seriously though, great story
bad
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Hello! Thank you for your feedback!
This story suffers from being rushed to meet its deadline (Halloween of 2019) and I've never gone back to revise it. Like most of my work, I find the beginning is good, the ending is good, but everything in the middle is eeeh; and since that is of course the bulk of the content that is a problem.
The central flaw of the story is the inconsistency of Trixie's motive. The first line of Ch. 3 (A Sticky Situation) indicates that she is consciously trying to kill him but Ch. 7 (The Bright-Faced Moonflower) indicates that she is not. While her thoughts are generally quite vicious, they are little worse than those that real people routinely think of others who annoy them, and her actual behavior (sans the MURDER House of 🧟DOOM💀 incident) is not consistent with bloodthirst, but rather with an increasingly deranged desire to impose general suffering onto him or chase him away that soon becomes an actual danger.
Ch. 1 (The Show) clearly frames the central conflict of the story - that Trixie cannot stand Mud Briar but is obliged to do so as parts of the same friend group - as well as the central paradox of Trixie - that she likes to present herself as immaculate, elegant, and prosaic, but is in fact crude, immature, and incredibly selfish. My choice to provide Trixie with the use of the word fuck to facilitate the latter may violate some readers' standards of immersion. However, I find that the concept of a magic trick failing from the perspective of the magician, but succeeding from that of the audience, due to shenanigans on Pinkie's account that are unknown to either, is an excellent enrichment and completely in-character for all parties involved.
Ch. 2 (Sawmill, based on Saw) is meandering and sloppy, and relies on the implausible notion that Trixie's entire group failed to notice any Tree of Harmony III promotions that ought to have been prominently displayed all over the theater. Since the story remains quite cartoonish despite its adult leanings, had this simply been lampshaded it would be much more acceptable. The chapter's best contribution is to set up a brick joke involving Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash.
Ch. 3 (A Stickie Situation, based on Star Trek) is too explicit for my liking as the reader is not better for it to fret over Sunburst's enormous penis; but Trixie's sexually-charged past and her modern response thereto highlight her hypocritical and sleazy nature. These outrageous events also amplify Maud's character - she remains outwardly calm and accepting of what her father and sisters would see as obscenity (though, in a later chapter, instantly shuts down any sexual comments related to herself.) She is familiar with the danger of fandoms and instantly sweeps Mud Briar away; she does not need to understand Lactiria's language to immediately comprehend the situation. And, most endearingly, she is jealous of Mud Briar's attraction to Lactiria / Trixie but, once called out, immediately accepts her own hypocrisy (which is far more sympathetic than Trixie's) and forgives him.
Ch. 4 to Ch. 6 (Checking In / Checking Around / Checking Out, based on Clue / Cluedo) are easily the weakest part of the story. As may be inferred by the one event taking place over three chapters, it's too bloated and convoluted for an otherwise rather straightforward story. Yet despite this, the arc ends by insisting that cool things happened that are not there in the story. The concept of Trixie "regaining the spark" she feels she lost when she moved from in front of the stage to behind it, while endearing, is diminished by the fact that she explicitly has to think behind-the-stage in order to perform her third attack on Mudbriar. In addition, while all other attacks on Mudbriar can be diminished as reckless or negligent, this is the only time Trixie blatantly attempts murder - further confusing her actual motive, as mentioned earlier. The additional characters offer little to nothing to warrant the amount of time spent introducing them.
Ch. 7 (The Bright-Faced Moonflower), in which we conclude the Shy and Dash brick joke which doubles as a Cupcakes reference, is the only time in the story we see Trixie have a 1-to-1 conversation with Mud Briar - this gives us some sympathy for her desire to be rid of him, even as she continues to lead him into the forest of death. We are treated to the ridiculous hyperlogic with which Mud Briar finally realizes Trixie has abandoned him, and we finally see Trixie get completely trashed by Maud in a rare display of emotion.
The epilogue, if it were not so confusing, could have been ingenious - it utilizes book-ending, Maud using Mud Briar's asinine technically bullshit against him, and a double entendre. The first chapter had established that Trixie would "sooner slap Princess Luna across the face and see what happened" than anger Maud, and the reader was reminded of this at the end of Ch. 7 in which Trixie angers Maud and concludes aloud that she "owes" Luna a slap in the face. Therefore, Trixie respectfully bows to Luna and then immediately slaps her and goes back to what she's doing like it's nothing. Trixie shortly awakens, but when she passes out again, her final line - "Mmm, sure did, Princess, and Trixie would do it again, too..." - is a plausible response both to Starlight and to Luna, who we can presume demanded an explanation.
Despite the entire reason for this story existing being that Mud Briar is insufferable and widely hated - to the point the show itself had an episode dedicated to bullying him - his portrayal in this story is not one-dimensionally loathsome, and his relationship with Maud is even shown as genuinely affectionate and at times cute.
All in all it is a fairly good story with inconsistency in key aspects such as Trixie's motive, some meandering arcs such as the entire MURDER House of 🧟DOOM💀 sequence, and some enriching details that are too rough or too subtle for most readers to notice.
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ha, the main reason for my dislike. He is objectively a great character. Only fools don't try to imitate him