Fool Me Once

Ever wondered what those Geodes really were, and how they did what they did? So did Sunset. Unfortunately, she didn't learn her lesson the first time she poked a strange magical artifact, and now she's going to have to deal with the consequences. Combined with the strange and dangerous forces awakened by her meddling, this mess won't be easily solved by just friendship beaming it into oblivion.

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Chapter One · 26th Oct 2019 · 2,467 words
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Chapter Two · 31st Oct 2019 · 2,485 words
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Chapter Three · 2nd Nov 2019 · 2,061 words
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Chapter Four · 6th Nov 2019 · 2,737 words
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Chapter Five · 13th Nov 2019 · 1,972 words
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Chapter Six · 14th Dec 2019 · 2,831 words
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Chapter Seven · 2nd Jan 2020 · 2,106 words
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Blue Horizon

Blue Horizon #1 · Oct 28th, 2019 · · · Chapter One ·

Interesting premise, decent writing. You have several rather lengthy paragraphs that could be broken up. And various other issues here or there, but... that was an interesting start and a nice premise.

I'll stick around for some more.

Ri2

Ri2 #2 · Oct 31st, 2019 · 2 · · Chapter One ·

Dammit, Sunny, what have you done now?

Ri2

Ri2 #3 · Oct 31st, 2019 · · · Chapter Two ·

Oh good, I was worried she'd become a blind seer. Instead she's a regular seer.

I'm confused, if it's summer why's there still people in the school?

ericwinter

ericwinter #4 · Oct 31st, 2019 · · · Chapter Two ·

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It's only a few days before summer ends, so the staff is mostly there to start sorting out paperwork and whatever last minute preparations are needed for the coming year, while a few students here and there are either dealing with special circumstances, managing club things, or using school facilities for one reason or another. Band camp, for example, usually occurs over the last few weeks of summer and typically takes place on school grounds.

Ri2

Ri2 #5 · Oct 31st, 2019 · · · Chapter Two ·

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Oh, I see

Kevin shough

Kevin shough #6 · Nov 5th, 2019 · · · Chapter Three ·

I love this more piz

ILikeFanfiction1234

ILikeFanfiction1234 #7 · Nov 6th, 2019 · · · Chapter Four ·

sounds like an interesting fanfiction, can't wait to see whats going to happen

pandzia

pandzia #8 · Nov 13th, 2019 · · · Chapter Five ·

Give it more I love it :)

solusjbj

solusjbj #9 · Nov 15th, 2019 · · · Chapter Four ·

Classic Pinkie Pie explaining the situation based on nothing and being right. Also why wouldn't Sunset believe on becoming a goddess, she became Daydream that one time all she needed was a halo to complete the look. As for the sting at the end at first I thought 'Tirek?' but now I'm thinking vampires.

solusjbj

solusjbj #10 · Nov 15th, 2019 · · · Chapter Five ·

Now THIS is the chapter that explains the main concepts of the story, which is interesting because I don't think I've read Order and Chaos being religions before. Speaking of it would be funny if Cult of Chaos was changed to Order of Chaos just to stir confusion among the world lol.

ericwinter

ericwinter #11 · Nov 15th, 2019 · · · Chapter Four ·

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Mainly because there's a difference between being a goddess, and being temporarily empowered to the human equivalent of an alicorn. Not least of which is the permanence of the situation, and also a bit of a cultural miscommunication, as ends up being explained in the most recent chapter. Most people on Earth would--and do in our reality--consider beings like Celestia worthy of the title goddess, but that doesn't make her actually a goddess. Sunset, meanwhile, doesn't even believe herself to be as powerful as Celestia--let alone realize anywhere near the full extent of what she's done--so claiming divinity would be a little bit ridiculous in her mind. Not to mention Sunset has tried it before, and was proven thoroughly wrong.
And yes, that was a vampire. On the other hand, who says It's not Tirek? It might just be... or it might not. Guess we'll just have to see ;P.

ericwinter

ericwinter #12 · Nov 15th, 2019 · · · Chapter Five ·

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Yeah, sorry it took so long, but it's not exactly a subject that you can just drop into casual conversations. There was actually a moment before writing this chapter where i realized i had no idea how to start the topic of religions, funnily enough. But then i realized i had Discord at hand and could just use him to poke things in that direction.
As for Chaos and Order, It's a little bit iffy. Chaos is actually a fairly common concept for "evil" religions in fiction, such as the Warhammer universes or how Discord is portrayed as an evil god in the pony dimension, and real life pantheons will typically have some god or another aligned with it as the token evil guy, such as Loki, Set, and Apophis. Order as a religion, on the other hand, is much less common--although there is an occasional "God of Order" with it as their domain--and I will be treating both very differently from usual. Neither are inherently good or bad for one thing.

Kevin shough

Kevin shough #13 · Nov 16th, 2019 · 1 · · Chapter Five ·

i like the lore

CritianCaceorte

CritianCaceorte #14 · May 15th, 2020 · · · Chapter Seven ·

Huh. You know, I'm sort of getting Dresden vibes from Discord, and I'm not sure as to why.

Secundum

Secundum #15 · Jun 14th, 2020 · · · Chapter Five ·

The 8 pointed star? Get the flamer brother. The HEAVY Flamer.

Nickel Hound

Nickel Hound #16 · Dec 27th, 2020 · · · Chapter Two ·

"The long and worn leather trench-coat"

Harry... Harry Dresden?

"Adorned with a pure white anarchy symbol across its back"

"What the...?

"Or the opaque black shades and a pure white fedora."

Fedora? White? Yup not Dresden.

Pete100

Pete100 #17 · May 27th, 2021 · · · Chapter One ·

So sunset basically screwed everyone over?

Pete100

Pete100 #18 · May 27th, 2021 · · · Chapter Two ·

Well, at least sunset got her wish.

Pete100

Pete100 #19 · May 27th, 2021 · · · Chapter Three ·

“You’re supposed to be dead.” Celestia accused from behind her desk after the initial shock had worn off, glaring at the white-and-black-haired man. Discord, utterly unruffled by the claim, simply waved his hand in dismissal.

Well that’s a strange way to start a conversation.

“Of course they did,” She muttered. “None of us were very good at staying down when something managed to put us on the ground, were we?” For a brief, barely-lived moment the chromatic-haired woman’s eyes drifted shut, as if lost in memory, before snapping open to focus once again on Discord. “Never mind, that doesn’t matter. What are you here for, Discord? You’ve never been the type to visit old friends without a reason.” Discord raised an eyebrow in amusement, but said nothing to gainsay her. Instead the man simply shrugged, hands settling in his pockets as he moved to slouch against the doorjamb.

We?

“Oh, nothing much Celestia,” he said, smirking slightly. “Just thought I’d roll through town, bag a monster or two, stop a couple apocalypses, the usual. Did you know there was an entire bevy of barely-sealed dimensional rifts on your front lawn? Not to mention the pseudo-Order energies everywhere. Quite irresponsible of you--”

How does he know that?

“What, yes,” Discord confirmed, nodding his head slightly before shaking it. “How and why, on the other hand, escape me. What’s worse is that whatever she did has managed to draw quite a few powerful eyes, most of them very unfriendly. So, Celestia Empyris, I’d suggest you tell me what in all the hells has been going on in your school, and if you do I might not tear it down for being a monument to such utter hubris and foolishness.” A bet of silence passed, then another as the two held each other’s gazes, lavender eyes meeting with ruby red ones. Then, finally, celestia sighed, one hand coming up to pinch her nose.

Oh he missed a lot.

“So,” Discord said after the story was finally done, sipping at the mug of coffee in his hand. They had retired to Celestia’s own personal office, which had quite the comfy chairs to stretch out in. He did so, staring over the rim of his cup at the chromatic-haired principal as she met his gaze steadily. “Not only did you not outright kill the girl after she brainwashed most of your students and put several holes through your precious school, but now you allow her to run rampant with not only unknown and powerful magic, but a cabal of friends who share in these powers, and have recently picked up even more abilities to boot. You’re losing your touch, Celestia.”

He’s got a good point.

“We’re out of the game, Discord.” Celestia replied to his chastisement cooly, shaking her head with a sharp motion. “Luna and I retired years ago, we’re not about to start executing people without damn good reason.”
“And an attempt at world domination isn’t good reason?” Discord asked incredulously with one raised eyebrow. Celestia just shook her head again.

Me and discord got the same brain.

“She was a desperate girl looking for attention, for Order’s sake. Until that Element or whatever corrupted her, there was no real bloodlust to Sunset Shimmer, and after it was gone she became truly repentant. The school would be destroyed threefold as many times if we killed her then.” Discord frowned at that, but decided not to argue, even as he held back a clucking at her divine invocation. He knew very well it was no accident, but a message and sign of her annoyance both. Instead, the man decided to change tracks.

That not an excuse.

“She stole a divine aspect.” Discord said suddenly, taking a small measure of amusement in the way Celestia spat out her own coffee, which she just happened to be drinking at the time.

Technically, gloria stole it.

“I’ve been busy with work,” Celestia snapped, finally managing to wipe up her mess. Her face was stormy with aggravation, and she didn’t hesitate to turn the full force of that on Discord. “And I wasn’t aware the Faces were real, tangible things beyond just being a series of stars. How would Sunset Shimmer, who isn’t even from this world, get her hands on one, and why ?”

What work?

“Well I will certainly be sticking around for awhile, at least until the poor girl can wake up and get a handle on her new powers,” Discord offered, inclining his head to Celestia. “And there are a few favors I can call in in the meantime. But aside from fortifying the town and keeping a very close eye on Shimmer, our only other option would be to lock her in a heavily-enchanted metal box and drop it into the Pacific Ocean.” Celestia grimaced but accepted the point. Discord knew she was experienced enough to realize you could never really solve problems like that, no matter how hard you might try. All that was left was to prepare for the worst, and hope for the best. With any luck, people would get the message after enough attacks failed.

New powers?

Pete100

Pete100 #20 · May 27th, 2021 · · · Chapter Four ·

“Well it’s totally because when she broke her Geode she didn’t just trigger a temporary overload of power, but actually shattered the barrier keeping a shard of divine energy separate from herself while keeping the conduit open, letting it slip past and permanently bond with both her body and soul. Now she’s a living goddess who possesses a whole suite of new powers to learn and play with over the next few weeks.” Here the girl paused, probably shrugging, before finishing sheepishly. “At least, that’s my hunch.”

Interesting

“Bon appetit.” The fangs descended, and then there were no more screams.only a glassy-eyed stare as the perfectly ordinary woman died without sound or struggle. The perfect meal.

Well, that got dark.

Pete100

Pete100 #21 · May 27th, 2021 · · · Chapter Five ·

So much religion.

Pete100

Pete100 #22 · May 27th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter Six ·

Well, it was nice to have a moment between rarity and sunset, until it was ruined.

Pete100

Pete100 #23 · May 27th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter Seven ·

The basement was dark, but a flick of discord’s hand solved that as he summoned three orbs of light, each shifting colors every few seconds to throw a kaleidoscope across the walls. The first thing discord noted as he scanned it carefully was the body. She was stretched out on the cold stone floor and, after a quick examination, still breathing. That didn’t stop him from letting out a quick curse however, especially after he recognized her as the Belle girl, and worse, the amulet around her neck with its practically radiant magic. That was the Artist’s gift, without a doubt. For a brief, agonizing moment, Discord saw not the white skin and amethyst hair, but another girl, with green and silver, covered in blood…

Wait what?

Spellflame