I'll be ending the story here I think. I might make a sequel but I think I'm going to get a co-author to help me first because I have no idea what to write. I will take suggestions though. Feel free to comment or PM. Thank for your time and goodbye!

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Reading a story until the end always feels heavy. At least for me, it feels that way. I don’t want to criticize you but the end seems a bit sudden.
Heh, a sudden end. It is always like that when something is over.

I wish you luck with the sequel. I would recommend making use of the osmosian nature and absorb abilities outside of his dimension. He is capable of using pretty much any type of energy available to him by absorption

His objective could be the very best God Of Destruction alongside of screwball, her being the best at creation. Those are long time goals because there is no end to it. Think of it as an RPG, they tell you your final quest at the start of the game but what matters is all the time you have to spend leveling up, doing missions, doing other quest be it helping others or not doing anything.

Also, focus a bit on the depth. A one-dimensional character is pretty obvious to notice and very hard to keep.

You became soo dependant on others by chapter 5 or 7.

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Yeah. I noticed part way through that Seth really lacked some good depth. I still superbly enjoyed writing him but it… got away from me? I guess? I do have a possible idea for what could happen next with a place, goal and end reward but I don't have a transition from where Seth is now to what I'm thinking of. I'll see if I can work around the problem or think up something else. Until then, stay tuned (:

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saw it the first time I read this like the second or third time reading.

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But you're the first one to comment on it.

Thank you for the nice read