Deposing The Dragon Lord

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In spite of Spike's valiant efforts, he and Princess Ember fail to stop Garble from getting to the Bloodstone Scepter. Having heard Garble saying that he'll take whatever he wants from Equestria and burn the rest, Twilight decides that she and her friends must remove the bad dragon from power. . . .

. . . But things are rarely that straight forward.

(Written after Sweet and Smokey.)

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fanreader999999

fanreader999999 #1 · May 30th, 2019 · 4 · ·

Princess Celestia landed with a thud in front of Twilight. She towered over the younger Alicorn and said with stern voice and a steely gaze, "Did you attempt to overthrow the government of a foreign nation to install a ruler of your choosing?"

"Don't you know thats how Luna and I came to power?"

The Blue EM2

The Blue EM2 #2 · May 30th, 2019 · 3 · 3 ·

Finallly. It's about time somebody pointed out the problems of the Mane 6 gallivanting into a place and initiating regime change on their whims.

Orrm

Orrm #3 · May 30th, 2019 · 3 · ·

Princess Celestia landed with a thud in front of Twilight. She towered over the younger Alicorn and said with stern voice and a steely gaze, "Did you attempt to overthrow the government of a foreign nation to install a ruler of your choosing?"

Someone's gonna be takin' a ten foot pole up the ass and it ain't me.

Applefai

Applefai #4 · May 30th, 2019 · · ·

It's a good story, but there are a few grammatical errors

Garble spat out pieces of gemstone and tightened his grip on the Bloodstone Scepter, sitting up straight as stared with wide eyes at the sight before him. Something huge and colorful had smashed right through the roof of the cavern and landed right in the center of the chamber. When the dust finally settled, Garble couldn't believe what he was seeing.

As stared should have a he before stared or be and stared

As the six ponies glowed even brighter with each of their individual colors, Garble could help but lean backwards a bit. He blinked his eyes, then he sneered and said, "Well, the little pony princess has some spunk. I gotta admit, that wasn't a bad threat. But here's a better one."

Could should be couldn't

Smolder stared at her older brother in disbelief. "Seriously, bro?" she asked, "I mean, it's one thing to hide your sensitive side. Heck, I keep my secrets likes to myself too, that's fine. But to totally change who you are around everyone else but me? That's just messed up."

Secrets likes should be secret likes

"Um, excuse me, Garble?" Fluttershy spoke up gently, here wide eyes focused on the Dragon Lord, "But, am I to understand that you hate being bullied yourself, but you have no problem bullying Spike?"

Here eyes focused should be her eyes focused

Applefai

Applefai #5 · May 30th, 2019 · 1 · ·

". . . . Okay, that's enough," Garble with a sly grin.

Forgot on, sorry. It needs a said after Garble

Applefai

Applefai #6 · May 30th, 2019 · 2 · ·

Garble shook his head and said, "No. I just said that to look tough. It's not like a Dragon Lord has to do whatever they say they're gonna do before they become one. No one can laugh at me or tell me what to do now." Garble shrugged and said, "Anyway, I don't really care about Equestria or the ponies there, but I'd never start a war over something stupid. It'd just be a waste of time and energy, and I've got better things to do, and bigger ideas." Garble then grinned and said, "I'm thinking. . . a lava surfing tournament league. . .maybe a dragon builder's union to help make the Dragon Lands look cooler. . .some statues. . .maybe some castles. . ."

Just like politicians in the real world lol

TheAncientPolitzanian

TheAncientPolitzanian #7 · May 30th, 2019 · 2 · ·

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Technically, you could say they kinda did with that with the dragons. Even so, Rarity and Twilight mostly stood on the sidelines while Spike and Ember did the heavy lifting.

As for the changelings, on the other hand... Chrysalis shot first. Twice. Thus, enter Thorax.

The Blue EM2