Fuck yeah for dream magic!!

That poor guard.

Lol yeah

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Hey thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I'd love to hear what made it stand out to you.

Heh, that was almost cute. Thanks.

I enjoyed this 😀

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So it needed to be in the dreamscape..

I did get that the dreamscape was used as a device to open up the characters. Them opening up leads to them talking about the good times, which leads to them having sex. The dreamscape was used mostly to get to the sex. And yes, that is a valid use for the dreamscape. But at the expense of probably sounding like an ass, it's also something I've seen before multiple times in other fics(though not all of them execute it as well as you did).

I just feel like there could have been more there. More interesting visuals; a broader journey through Celestia's memories; reality warping stuff; Luna stringing Celestia along for longer to coax more candid information from her; and I'm sure a dozen other ideas.

Or, potentially, they could have woken up after the feelings came out and got together in the real world. Nothing was forcing them to stay in the dreamscape and screw. And in fact, it kind of makes sense they'd want to actually, physically be with each other.

And I wouldn't say that when they first came together it was especially poignant

Going back and re-reading it, I actually agree with you there. You can probably ignore what I had to say regarding that. As shameful as this might sound, I was probably confusing your story with another, similar one.
I've read a lot of princest stories in the past week...

What I will say is that for all the nice writing in this, I'll admit it still doesn't fully scratch the incest itch for me, and that may have more to do with how I value incest fics. I wrote about this yesterday in a blog on my profile, if you want to see why I think that.

As for the writing mechanics, I'll find a few examples and PM them to you.

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Yeah, I didn't really go for the reality warping kind of aspect of dreams, that's true
Just wanted it to stay in the setting of the memory because I thought it flowed better
There was at least one thing specific to it being in a dream, but I'll fully admit that, in retrospect, I could have made it clearer
And that is that Celestia is in her current-day body while Luna is in the body of her younger self from the memory
Which is why their size difference is so much more pronounced

I skimmed your blog post and I see what you mean
I was curious about that because of what you said on my other story
For me, I don't place as much significance in the taboo being a core part of the story
I tend to write their sexual relationship as very normalised to them, like they're in their own world together
And just using their family status to inform their personal relationship
And that family dynamic is more so what attracts me to incest

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I was curious about that because of what you said on my other story

To clarify, I don't mean to imply I felt your other story was a better incest story (from my point of view). I just thought it was generally hotter on its own merits so I liked it just that little bit more.

the poor guy, he was to young