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>Forrest
Now that's that's an interesting clop crossover idea.
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Thanks for catching that, a bit of a slip on my part.
This is your official review for the Furry Foray Festival Contest!
I've tried to be as objective as possible, but of course there are limits. I've tried to avoid being biased or arbitrary as much as I can, and hopefully I've succeeded at least somewhat. The full, final results will be announced on May 4th, and winners will be contacted shortly afterward to ask how they would like to accept their prizes. When readings these comments, please keep in mind that I know I'm often overly critical -- to the point where I can always find nitpicks even with the greatest works of literature. So don't take anything personally!
Notes:
- Neat concept, pairing Loona with Timberwolves.
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ass wholeasshole-
I can actually use magic!” She screamed'She' should be lowercase.-
That is uncalled for young lady!!!Needs a comma.-
I can hang out with whoever I fucking want and your cunt ass bitch can’t do shit!Also needs a comma.- Plentiful grammar problems -- the first five (short) paragraphs each have at least one mistake, for example.
- Pretty decent use of a gangbang.
- Not terribly believable that Loona would give in that quickly or that things would go so smoothly.
Scores:
Provocativeness: 40
Progression: 75
Payoff: 60
Pacing: 75
Personality: 35
Prose: 30
Total: 315
For more information on what these scores mean, see the scoring rubric.