After Gallus admits the prank on Heart's Warming Eve. Ocellus wants to know why all of her friends thought that it was her. So Twilight has her speak with a friend that has gone though the very same thing
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Ignoring the grammatical mistakes, this is very interesting... Do go on
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Grammar has never been my best subject
Interesting, like to see how you handle the Miss Anon a Miss story here.
Get a Beta reader.
Dude, get an editor. Bad grammar just makes a story hard to read.
Where do I get one of those?
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Just ask.
admits to the: admits the
hearts worming eve: Hearth's Warming Eve (because worming would be more related to those animals, the worms)
want: wants
taught that: erase the word that and change taught for thought.
has: I would put makes.
gown though: gone through
To those that like this story I just didn't like the way CH2 was done redoing it .
Hi!
Okay, your plot is interesting, legitimately something I think needs to be explored more, but it's just too hard to get through for me. I keep having to stop to figure out what you meant by things, and all the emotion and Intrigue of it falls flat when I either notice a huge spelling mistake or have to stop to reread something.
You really need to work on these spelling, grammatical, and structural errors. As I just said, you need to go through and read this aloud so you can catch those mistakes before you post it, and if that doesn't work, go get a proofreader. There are multiple groups entirely dedicated to helping authors find proofreaders.
Also, you're never going to get better if you delete people's feedback.
9340569
I like this story. I'll gladly beta read/ edit this story for you. Just send me your chapters, I'll fix them up, then I'll send them back for you to publish.
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There in looking of an editor.
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I don't get it. Did he delete your previous comment? Because I made a comment where I fixed the mistakes he had on the story's description and he hasn't deleted it. Not even any of the other comments.
Which episode did that happen?
Never has been an episode just an idea that I been playing with
Anon-a-Miss is form a holiday comic
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All so my grammar might be off a bit. Kind of hit publish by mistake. Before my editor could let me what need to be fixed.
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"Alternate Universe" tag, my friend.
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It's there right above Ocellus's
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I know that, you should reply to Starlight Nova.
So... is Ocellus, or one of the other students, going to tell Twilight they were blaming each other and not everyone just Ocellus?
Wait, so in this universe, they didn't have any clues? Like the pictures being on Sunset's phone and Sunset saying she never gave it to anyone?
Also, didn't they give Sunset a chance before the CMC admitted they did it?
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No
The only evidence where the photo was taken on sunset cell alone. And they thought it was her because AJ nick name was posted the very next day after Sunset herded it.
Again No
They just started to think that it MAY NOT be her.
Is this complete or not?
No
just waiting on my editor to send me the changes
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Oh okay.
Who's your editor? You need to beat them over their head with something. I mean, look.
Where's closing quotation mark?
The very next line. Is Silverstream talking to herself, or someone else?
WidenED in shock? "AS SHE chokED ON toothpaste" Seems better.
Anyway, do I need to go on?
Am I the only one wondering why the others didn't ask ocellus what she look like on the other side? I mean she could change into it right?
Too complex to show What she looked like and she Swore to everything over there a secret even if she did give a few details .
its fine
Not bad but I would like to hear their excuses. Was it because of the changling reputation from before new leadership came in that they thought it was her.
HEY!
YOU CANT JUST NAME DROP FAMOUS OCS LIKE THAT!
Not trying to be mean or anything but You got a lot of mistakes here