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That was some mighty good apple-bucking!
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It was certainly an enjoyable experience to share.
I once again really loved another chapter of this story.
I like how the issue with AJ went differently than the canon. This AJ put her pride to the side much easier and took the help from her friends and things went much smoother because of it. What she learned was that using her special talent isn't a bad thing. That is she isn't abusing it it is okay to count on it for help and that help isn't a sign she is failing but can be a fun experience of its own.
The Spike and Bloom interaction was great as well. I liked seeing how close those two are. It is funny that they refer to themselves as fuck buddies more or less since in this world that is pretty much just a good friend lol. I think it would be interesting to see maybe Bloom talking to Twist or something about how Spike compare to other colts her age. It is clear that Bloom favors him with how she was talking about him during their interaction. I do wonder what colts she has been involved with in her past. She asked Spike about his past so I wonder what is her? I just think her talking to one of her oldest friends about this new guy in her life would be funny to her hear telling about him and how she compare him to others. Also a very big thing it would bring Twist into the story. I always found her super adorkable and she WAS Bloom's first friend. But she was taken out of the show because of issues with the voice actress if I remember right. But this could be a chance for Spike to meet a filly that is like a mix of Twilight and Pinkie. And lets be far having Bloom introduce her friend to Spike and have her help her shy friend experience for the first time the joys of sex would be a fun thing to see lol. Another interesting thing is how Bloom didn't want to give Spike up, like I think he is the best partner she has had and she is attached to him now. Spike is also attached to her, now of course he is attached the the rest of the girls as well but the other girls don't seem to treasure him like the younger girls do, at least at the moment.
I do think Bloom got to see how Spike is WAYYYY above anyone close to her age when it comes to sex. I mean when you look at it, Spike and Bloom were fooling around the WHOLE time the rest of the girls were going at it and didn't stop till they all did. That means Spike's stamina is just as long if not longer. And unlike most young lovers he knew about rhythm, rotation, and overall things that experience and skilled lovers do, and not counting his other advantages like his tail and the biggest..... CLAWS!!!!! lol. He blows any colt and most stallions out of the water, his biggest handicap is JUST his size but due to his race that is something that could be fixed down the road lol.
I do really REALLY love that we got to see hints at Spike and his dragon instincts. I mean he wanted to dominate Bloom. He wanted to make her his mate but he fought it off. Out of favor of not wanting to hurt her. I think honestly THIS was was Molestia was doing with Spike this whole time. She know Dragon's can just destroy mares and not in a good way, they feel more than ponies and their lust is probably insane. And the average pony just can't stand that. So how does she counter it with Spike. She teaches her son to care, to want to please a mare, to put her desires first. And with luck it will give him something to help leash that instinct a bit, to keep him from hurting mares by him being kind deep down and that telling him that hurting a mare/filly is wrong. But it is still there and I think seeing him try to find a balance between the two will be a big thing for him. He, no matter how he acts, isn't a a pony but a dragon and this is a part of him just as much as that kindness is.
I could see as well Shy coming to Spike often to get pleased by a smaller creature. I am sure she has had sex with most of the colts in town. But like I stated before Spike is above the rest when it comes to intimacy so she gets the best of both worlds, with a experience and good lover and a body that works right for her kinks lol.
One thing I think is interesting if how Dash knows she doesn't have great control of her member, best chance most of the girls don't have that yet well not counting Rarity since she seem like she spent alot of time getting use to it. . Which I find funny that Spike has shown he can outlast most of them in pure endurance and skill at the moment.
I do think Twi and AJ have the most chemistry of all the girls. Well Dash and Shy seem to fit, while Rarity I think might get along most with Spike but that will be address by me soon lol.
With all the talks of sleepover by Bloom and Spike I honestly think that would make a great chapter. We could see Spike interact with not just the CMC but the rest of Bloom friends. I think seeing him meet Twist, Bubblegum Brush, Archer, and Ruby Punch as the fillies in town. I think seeing Spike show up any colts that might be there, if there would be I think Bloom might have had the idea of only Spike being there. But even still, just having him next to one of the colts and the fillies just seeing a direct comparison of how much different and more experience Spike is would be too funny as they would all want a turn at what they see Bloom and Sweetie get. I also think Spike might be older than the CMC, I mean when I compare how they act Spike has shown on average to be way more mature than they are. Not to mention he doesn't go to school, works as a teacher in the canon, and handles adult level work on the daily. I always saw him as more of a teenager than a child at least in my head canon lol.
One of the biggest things was that Rarity taking notice of Spike. I think that is a great thing. I can so see Rarity being too much for the average male. She would pride herself on that for sure. But the same way she pride herself on that Spike was trained by Molestia herself. His skills are beyond that of a average male by Rarity's own notice and by what we have seen in this chapter with how he outlasted most of the girls. I think she would enjoy spending time with Spike, and as he uses his skills he learned from Molestia he would be someone she would enjoy very often. He would do the thing none of the other stallions have done for her, last and learn her traits and what she likes. He has been taught to please a mare above all else and he would show her that. And not to mention Sweetie would LOVE to have him around more often as he would best chance go to town on her any time he isn't with Rarity. This could also lead Rarity to seeing something in Spike she see in herself, he is a dom for sure. When she watch him with Sweetie she would see it clear as day. She has trained Sweetie by now to be a sub and she would notice how she submits so much to Spike and he doesn't miss a beat in dominating the small filly still she is goo. She would nuture it as well as enjoy that trait herself since no male has dominated her truly. And I think seeing Spike with the two sisters would be epic.
One thing I think would be great is when we get to the diamond dogs. I think if Sweetie goes with Spike and Rarity and both her and her sister are taken by them. Spike would want to save them both since he would care deeply about both of them. I can see when he get down there to save Rarity she already dominated and made the dogs submit to her since they couldn't handle her lol. But after he made sure she was safe he rushes off to save Sweetie and we see a D.Dog about to force himself on her. I think this would be a good chance to show some more of his dragon traits, this dog, this beta male is trying to force himself on one of HIS MATES. Spike wouldn't like that and attack the dog, showing why you don't fuck with a dragon even a baby. He could get a bit ruffed up but win in the end. I think most of all Sweetie seeing Spike fight and protect her and WIN would make her swoon for her, and Rarity would be touched that he not only lead the charge to save her and her sister that he fought so hard to protect her sister as well.
I know this was a LONG comment lol, it is just I enjoy your story and once a chapter comes out I get so many ideas on where this could go every chance. Thanks for any time you take to read this.
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I'm glad to see my story stimulates creativity, along with the other stuff. It was fun playing around with reworking the episode's plot. Despite superficial similarities, this is a different world with different characters who make different decisions than their canon counterparts.
The idea of a sleepover for the kids has potential, but I'm not devoting any thought to that until the CMC are properly formed. I need to see how these new characters play off one another in this setting before I actually do anything with them.
Glad you like Twi and AJ. I had gotten the impression from the original that these two had the closest bond and so have been rolling with it since.
Spike having super endurance wasn't actually intended, but now that it's been published, I suppose I might as well roll with that as well.
As for the chemistry between the other characters, I suppose I'll refer back to my previous comment about just waiting to see what happens. I'm what one person described as a discovery writer, the sort who doesn't really know what's going to come next in the story until my fingers take me there. Discovery writers are apparently really good at character consistency, which I suspect is part of what you're enjoying, especially with Spike.
What I can say regarding the future is that I don't want to bloat the story with too many characters. The sleepover you described feels like it would require thrusting all these other characters to the forefront and keeping them there as permanent secondary characters. Not sure I'm able to do that, especially with the interactions that are already planned. For instance, in Dragonshy, I have 8 characters heading up the mountain instead of six. Enjoy figuring that out.
Point being, thanks for the kind words, and I look forward to pleasing my audience more in the future.
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I believe you are right that I do enjoy your style of writing and wouldn't want to change that. The way you write where the character's interactions feel genuine and natural work so well that is why I enjoy your work so much.
Lol I get that and I think you are right, A small sleepover with just the CMC and Spike would be fitting and keep it far more contained. It would give more chance for character development than just mindless adding in character.
Yea you have done great with the chemistry of the characters and I can't wait to see where they go from her.
Lol yea the whole Spike endurance thing is just me being a super Spike fan and paying extra close attention to Spike's scenes when they show up.
I can't wait to see what you will do with Dragonshy and your plans on out from here. I do wonder what will happen since you will be having two more people going. I hope one is Spike. I mean this is MAJOR even in just basic plot reasons. Spike up till now has NEVER met another dragon before. How will he react to meeting one? He for sure will try to talk to the dragon and get some answers on what it means to be a dragon. This could be another interesting diversion from the canon since if unlike the canon this dragon talks back, or seeing another dragon takes notice of them. Man now I am SUPER eager to see what will be next lol.
When it comes to size are the smallest to largest:
spike, rainbow dash, pinkie, twilight, rarity, fluttershy, big mac, applejack, and molestia.
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Hmm. You know, I should probably get around to actually making such a comparison. Spike and Molestia are probably right where you have them. Sam with Dash. I'm inclined to think that Fluttershy would be the biggest of the futas, but I'm not sure how she'd compare to Big Mac. Oh well. I'll get to it when I get to it.
You know, I find this story and it's predecessor interesting. It just bugs me how Rarity is basically a rapist and everyone seems okay with this. Even is a sex crazed world like this, I feel like Rarity would be in prison by now.
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In the spirit of the original Molestia on Tumblr, rape is something more casually accepted in this world. Everyone is so horny all the time that consent is generally assumed as a given. Just try not to project real world issues into this kind of story.
9415421 I really like the way you think.
9415451 A CMCXSpike sleepover idea would be lovely. For "Stare Master" you could have Fluttershy have a foursome with the Cutie Mark Crusaders. It seems fitting since Fluttershy has such a thing for youngsters, and I'm sure she would absolutely love having her way with the CMC. Speaking.of the CMC, for their introductory episode ("Call of the Cutie") you could have them engaging a threesome as a celebratory way of their new friendship and as a means of getting to know each other better. Maybe try something with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon as well, if you want. But as you said, this all heavily depends on how well they get on when you actually get around to them. I'm sure whatever you do will be fine.
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Adding Spike to Stare Master does seem like the obvious choice, true. I still need to let these ideas ferment a little more before putting them to paper. Thank you for your interest.
9453580 You're welcome, but I meant more like a foursome between Fluttershy and the CMC in "Stare Master " but if you want to add Spike, that's cool too.
So Spike has been training for his whole life to take the dick of Molestia but doesn't like stallion cocks, how did he ever gain that goal in the first place?
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I'm mostly working with stuff established in the original. As I see it, the princess is considered the epitome of sexual attraction, no matter your personal preferences. It could be said to be a mental disconnect distinguishing futas from male dick. In fact, this might actually be worth exploring further.
I feel like this is about to change.
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More like their definitions of some words are, well, substantially different from ours.