A sneaky plan

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Ze1a7in

Ze1a7in #1 · Jan 20th, 2018 · 5 · ·

Why the anthro tag?

Also, MORE!!

Zheroxzone

Zheroxzone #2 · Jan 21st, 2018 · · 3 ·

Well this was... something, but not much else.

YoGriz

YoGriz #3 · Jan 21st, 2018 · 2 · 2 ·

Weird, random, and ultimately kinda pointless. I do think this would be fun as a multi-chapter clopfic though, if you're up for that.

River Road

River Road #4 · Jan 21st, 2018 · 18 · ·

Oh my, now this is a story to wake up to...

I concur, there definitely needs to be more of this... whether that would be through a sequel, another chapter or simply a whole new and unrelated story. I absolutely adore unaware hypno/mc, and seeing how this is the story you decided to debut with, I very much hope to see more of these from you.

As for the story itself, I don't agree with any comments that it's too short or "pointless". It has everything a story needs, and more than many clop one-shots have. Everything we need to know about the situation, the lead-up and possible conclusions is told through one scene and no vital information is left out. We don't get to see much of how the Dazzlings actually corrupted everyone because that is the point; none of the Humane Six actually notice the corruption, they think that the Dazzlings are only just starting their plan and that's reflected in how the story only gives us "some humming" before Rainbow got distracted. For all we know of their powers, that might even be all there was to it, really. A more subtle approach than their open singing about their plans from the movie, subtle enough at least that the Rainbooms didn't notice anything conclusive until it's too late.
The ending leaves us without a definitive conclusion to the situation, but many stories do that and especially for clop it's not necessarily a bad choice. We're left on a high note, getting to cap the story off with some nice juicy kink without all the guilt of a bad end; for all we know, the Rainbooms might band together and stop the Dazzlings dastardly plan. For all we know, they might even do that without ever realizing what that plan even was ("Hey girls, whatever happened to eating out each other at lunch, anyway?").

All in all, the story did everything it was meant to do as far as I'm concerned. 9/10, would and will read again, and I really hope we will get to see more like this soon.