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diablo4000 #1 · Jul 6th, 2017 · 1 · · Chapter One New Arrival ·

Grammar. Work on the Grammar.

Halo456

Halo456 #2 · Jul 6th, 2017 · · · Chapter One New Arrival ·

8278494
Yes I know I just edited it on Google Docs.

NicLove

NicLove #3 · Jul 8th, 2017 · · · Chapter two first day ·

Before I read this, what is the Gore and Dark tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

AkwardIncarnate

AkwardIncarnate #4 · Jul 22nd, 2017 · · · Chapter One New Arrival ·

comment i commented happy?

be happy

AkwardIncarnate

AkwardIncarnate #5 · Jul 22nd, 2017 · · · Chapter two first day ·

8283316
it gets real real bad

on the second chapter the school gets raided

by terrorist

AkwardIncarnate

AkwardIncarnate #6 · Jul 23rd, 2017 · · · Chapter Three Second Day To Last ·

uh

idk

Denchik

Denchik #7 · Jul 24th, 2017 · · · Chapter Three Second Day To Last ·

Interesting so far... cant wait to read the next chapters!
Try to get a beta reader though, i can see multiple grammar mistakes in your chapters.

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