Ever since the loss of her friends, Twilight made it tradition to visit their graves on her birthday.
As she dwelves in memories, she starts to feel really down in the dumps. A certain alicorn mentor joins to comfort her in her emotional status, as it happens every year.
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Yeah ok i´m terrible at figuring out titles and descriptions, but that´s basically all there is to this story.
I might have listened to a bit too much 4everfreebrony and suddenly felt the urge to write this. Never really wrote a story before, so feedback is appreciated.
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Really well done!
It's short, sweet, and to the point. I like that Twi didn't immediately break down into tears and tried to put on a brave face until she started to talk to them. It's a good short story
This story has given me an idea for a potential future story for me to write.
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Nice to hear. Will be watching your profile to see it once done
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Thanks alot, glad to hear you liked it.
Yeah, her inner struggle was supposed to be the main part of this, so i
nice to hear that it came off well ( it also helped me reach that 1000 words minimum
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Thank you !
As far as first stories go, it's definitely not the worst, but it still needs an editor. Not just for the grammar and punctuation mistakes, but also someone who will help you structure your story.
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Yeah i can see that, i thought that there would be many mistakes in terms of grammar and such, tried my best to avoid it but i still have lots to learn in regards to when it comes to writing an entire story in english.
As far as an editor goes, i just wrote this on a whim so i didn´t really think about getting one, if i want to post another story i will definitly consider getting one.
Or i might just actually plan ahead that time and take the time to get it right, though both together would probably be the best
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Plus I have several other stories I am working on in the meantime. But I will definitely PM you when it comes out so you won't miss it in the sea of all my other junk. 
Cool, thanks. It might take a good while though, like several months just because I am a bit lazy and procrastinate a lot.
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Oh now procrastination is something I know all about
No worries, it's done when it's done, gonna look forward to receiving that PM
I love all stories about immortal Twilight being sad about her friends' deaths, and this is no exception. However, I just have one thing to point out: shouldn't Spike still be alive?
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Dammit, you noticed.
Yeah, spike should still be alive, i screwed up there.
Let's say he died due to unnatural circumstances?
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Okaaaay (I call excuses!). But, wouldn't Twilight have protected Spike with her life?
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Well, yeah, it is an excuse.
I said i screwed up there didn't i? Spike beeing dead is a mistake i made and something i have no explanation for.
This was just a joke, take notice of the emoji
Gotta love how you were the first one to point that out though, congrats.
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Heh, I guess you could make the Spike being killed a thing. Actually, I have an idea for a fanfic because of this conversation! Thanks!
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Did i just encourage you to kill off spike?
Damn, i actually like the little fella...
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Nah, it's gonna be inspired, but not completely the same. In here, Twilight dies sacrificing her life for Spike, and he's the reminiscing one.
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Looking forward to reading it
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Sorry to say, but it'll take a while, as I'm busy with two other stories.
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Hey, no rush. It's done when it's done.
The plot's pretty good, but this needs some major editing.
Mainly missing capitalization of 'i', and removing the full-stops when you've already got one.
I'll see if I could come back to this and fix it up, but I wouldn't hold your breath...
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Yeah, I realize this needs major fixes. I would do it myself, but sadly this story is just really low on my priority list...
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Fair enough.
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Yeah. Currently editing for another user and after that another story of mine is gonna be edited first. Also working on new stories and of course doing stuff outside of fimfic. One day I'm gonna fix this story up, but until then, I am not ashamed to show the level I started at...
This is so sad...but what happened to spike? He’s a baby dragon in the series, and I always thought that dragons lived longer than ponies. Besides that, I loved it.
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Yep, the Spike thing is a plot hole in this x)
This was the first story I've ever written, and it was a spur of the moment decision. There was no planning or anything involved, I just typed what came to mind.
Spike!? Kinda surprised.
Dragons should life longer then that.
Ps. There are cute story s in which she uses stainglas windows to speak with her "sleepy" friends ...
Non the less. Immortality remains a curse.
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you're not the first one to discover the spike issue x)
completely went over my head back when I wrote this thing
And yes, it is
Wow...
This is the ONLY twi story that made me tear up