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I am getting very worried. I saw the Gore tag and almost abandoned this story. As it is, I'm worried about how bad the Gore will get. I don't normally read stories with a Gore tag, especially if there's no Sex tag. So I am proceeding with caution with my parachute in case I have to jump.
8207738 It's not going to be too bad. It's more to cover my behind in case my emotions cause the writing to get out of hand and for any blood from cutting and/or suicide attempts.. Please don't jump yet.
Hey what about the driver who rear ended them? Is that person arrested?
8209416 Never really thought about it but probably a hefty fine or three.
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not sure about that if he rear ended them and lead to what happen now, he be mroe then fined, be facing jail time for reckless driving and charges for nearly killing them.
8209455 No offense but I think you're reading just a little too far into this my friend.
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You wrote Susnet nearly being paralyzed from soem jerk who didn't pay attention with all the other stuff she gone thru and now has to go thru again..... Yeah you're right I'm reading too much into this.
8209531 Please be patient and all will be revealed in time. This isn't over by a long shot.
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Sorry about that, it jsut Sunset been put thru so much,a nd when things finally get better this happens, she relapsing and then gets nearly killed and Poor Twilight.
now she bound to a wheel chair, she already feels unworthy of everything she has and this only adds to her sorrow and eventual break down.
I at least like tos ee the driver paying for his reckliness soem measure of justice.
Her demon half is getting loose, it trying to break Sunset by breaking Twilight i bet.
8260522 Maybe, maybe not.
Who knows?
Uh... Oh.
8260850 Can't really comment because your pic says no spoilers.
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Thank you for listening.
Yeah, no. Shirt and bra come off. With a big fucking pair of scissors if necessary. One of the electrodes goes under the left cup. And don't you know, electricity with underwire is so out this season, darling. If anyone's more worried about someone seeing their nipples than keeping their heart pumping their priorities are a little skewed.
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Thanks for the info. I'll file that away in my memory if I ever need it again.
Regarding the story, the first part is a dream so there's not really a guarantee that a bra would exist.
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I NEED TO KNOW
8264009 Find out next time on SciTwi Shimmer-Book 7: Relapse. Just kidding. Sunset's fear of magic in the human realm has finally shown up.
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Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
8264171 Eeyup!
Well shit, get the sneaking suspicion that everything will go to shit after this...
Even so, it´s time for DemonSet to come back! :
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8281391 Hmmm... Equestrian Magic on the loose perhaps?
Uh oh.
I got no idea what the heck is going on anymore.
This better start making sense soon, or i'm outta here.
Sighs sorry but hate confusing stories that make no sense or aren't written in way to understand anything.
It's starting to become like that.
8299808 Recap: In chapter 1 Sunset was having nightmares of her demon self; SciTwi and Sunset were involved in an accident, paralyzing Sunset and breaking SciTwi's foot.
In chapter 2 Sunset's demon persona began to surface and tricks the girls into turning over their geodes so she (the demon) can return.
In chapter 3 SciTwi, Fluttershy and Rarity attempt to come up with a plan to return Sunset to normal; everyone returns to the statue at once where Demon Shimmer uses a dark magic energy ball on SciTwi, transforming her into...
Hope this helps.
8299733 Eeyup.
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Sunset was tricking them? The Sunset knew she was going to turn into demon? I honestly thought the accident caused her to develop a split-personality. I didn't even realize Sunset turned into a demon until Pinkie Pie said as much. I just thought the bitch was back, not the demon. See my previous comment.
8300273 Not so much Sunset but the demon. Sunset was having her demon dreams before the accident.
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True. But she wasn't acting bitchy until after the accident. That's why I thought the accident was the cause.
8300357 The accident was the final trigger.
This makes no sense
How and why Sunset's demon persona returned just because she dreamed of it?
8302723 The demon has always been there, chipping away at her. The cutting of her arms and suicidal thoughts in Books 1 through 3. Then as her worries (that weren't written about) grew, so did the demon persona inside her. The dreams were essentially premonitions of what was to come.
Hope that clears things up somewhat.
The plot intensifies:
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8306324 Two Demons, a closed portal and a mysterious figure hiding in the bushes. What more could you ask for?
Edit: I also forgot to mention two missing friends.
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I just worded it that way for the meme, the statement is still correct right?
8309432 Yep. Plot is intensifying. Demons, missing friends, shadowy figures...
Why is this on hiatus?
8332734 I was having creative issues and forgot to update the status back to "incomplete" before publishing.
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You're also having trouble making the story make any sense at all.
thsi was the most confusing chapter i read yet.
What happen to you, you used to be able to write a decent chapter not this confusing stuff that hard to follow.
Reading from the pov in this chapter gives me a HEADACHE...groans.
8332941 Sorry 'bout that. I was trying something a tad different and I guess I couldn't make it stick. I'll figure something out. Maybe make it a stand alone story. Keep an eye out for a blog about what I decide.
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Actually, I understood this chapter perfectly.
Twilight and Starlight went to help EqG Twilight. On their way to the mirror, EqG Applejack & Rainbow Dash revealed themselves in order to make sure the portal stays open. I am going to assume that the purple blur that hit Rainbow was Spike. Starlight gets free and make a run for the portal, tackling Rainbow through with her. Demon Shimmer uses her powers to take control of the rest of the HuMane Seven. Rarity gets taken control of and Starlight grabs Fluttershy and runs and hide. They get a message to Twilight, who replies with a plan of their own. Fluttershy and Starlight get caught and Demon Sunset tried to take control of them. She hits Fluttershy but the magic stealer from Friendship Games saves her (which I wonder where the hell they got it from?). Starlight escapes and tries to get to Midnight Sparkle, who already sent Demon Shimmer through one of her rifts. Rainbow wakes up and comes to her senses and saves Starlight from Pinkie. Starlight then uses the absorber to free Rarity of her possession. Rainbow is given the magic snatcher so she could free her friends while Starlight grabs a hold of Midnight Sparkle leg and is taken back to Equestria, where Princess Twilight saves her after she slips off Midnight Sparkles leg. They wonder what is taking Celestia and Luna so long when a golden light appears and then they here "
HoustonTwilight, we have a problem."If I wrong, and this isn't what went down, I'm just as lost as you.
8333629 Okay, so maybe the chapter wasn't a total loss then.
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I understood what was going on after reading over and over, just the first person view point made it hard to read.
and felt too fast paced and jumping from oen spot to another in a weird way from the POV.
Also POV I think should be for a short scene or paragraph not the entire chapter or story.
8333887 No offense to your opinion except for two (soon to be three) of my stories have all been 1st person POV.
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Hard to tell think it because ti a action scene. Not a drama or slice of life scene, it works better in those settings.
It's a action scene that it becomes....errr confusing and over welming.
So, Sunset would become paralyzed again from the waist down? That sucks! I am going to guess that the problem Celestia was going to tell them was that only the last/current Element Bearers could obtain the Elements from the Tree of Harmony. Are there any countermeasure made to ensure Sunset or SctTwil don't have to worry about their demons?
8339382 The answer to your first two questions is yes. The answer to the last one is, because this would've been more confusing than the last chapter, I never put much extra thought into it.
I'm kinda bummed out, but I understand. I did the same thing on one of my older accounts.
8339499 It was turning into a flop and as I said, it wouldn't have made sense in the series.
Sucks that this was canceled. But it was fun while it lasted. And who knows? Maybe some concepts can make it back into the story.