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pabrony


A broke(n) artist and writer.

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Like the concept. Sunlight is always a nice ship to read clop of.

Just a suggestion: I understand that writing clop is awesome and stuff, and you want to get it down the moment you start, but do try to not rush things. I don't mean that you shouldn't write rushed clop, but that you shouldn't rush your writing. Everything happened so quickly I didn't have time to properly enjoy =(

But, anyway, you have potential, so keep writing and you'll just get better over time! ^u^

What if they are in the school gym's showers?

7943253 Thank you for the advice and for the compliment about me having potetional. I'm new to clop writing so it's gonna take a few tries before I get into a good rhythm.

7943623 No problem.

Say, I've come to know that a little help from a friend makes wonders in one's writing. So, if you're interested, I'd be glad to help you out with it. You know, as proofreader, or just as a friendly adviser, whatever's good for you. If you like the idea, PM me :raritywink:

Why do I get the feeling that Twilight's "present" is probably fixing to be tested to the limit and probably on her?:raritywink:

7949639 Whatever would give you that impression? :twilightsmile:

Not just a revenge, a sexy revenge.

7949871 Sexy revenge can be fun. :pinkiehappy:

A bright red, nine inch dildo fell out into her lap, bounced off her leg and landed right in front of Fluttershy, who then fainted at the sight of it, which made us laugh even harder.

"When do you want me to throw your 'Congratulations On Getting Your First Dildo' party?"

This chapter is funny as hell!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

7950755 Thank you. There's a few funny spots in the next chapter too.

I would like a flashback of the 'Congrats On Losing Your Virginity' party she threw for Rainbow Dash.:rainbowkiss:

7956330 I'll see what I can come up with. :pinkiesmile:

Do it i want to see both partys lol:rainbowkiss:

Sci-Twi's going to cop a feel on Sunset motorcycling I just know it.

7956924 Maybe, maybe not. Who knows? :twilightblush:

Ever notice that SciSet are becoming a more perverted couple.

7973545 Blame it on the teenage hormones. :raritywink:

nice capther. next?

7977636 Next is a party at Pinkie's with Sunset as the guest of honor. :rainbowlaugh:

A bit fast paced here but the rest is purr~dy good.^^

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Objectivley, best kind of revenge. :3

7998598 It is kinda obvious that this is my first clop. Isn't it? :raritywink:

I gotta say, this is some good clop. For being a beginner you´ve got the events down and I can tell that you took the pace down a notch. All in all, good job!

They are not going to be able to keep their relationship a secret from Twilight's family for long... if her mother don't already know.

this had me laughing and blushing at the same time

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 I feel like you jumped the shark a bit, but it still works.

How so?

8356044 It's a romance series. :heart:

Well this is a surprising twist from the first half of the series but... I think I like it. Light at the end of the tunnel for Sunset. Unless this is a setup for things to go horribly wrong...

8488894 Books 4, 5 & 6 were actually written before 1, 2 & 3. (Kinda like Star Wars, but not intended that way.)

8511458 Thank you. If you enjoyed this one for the clop, check out Book 6. :pinkiehappy:

Put it in the "read later but likely never" library.
At this moment I'm more up to read about people depressed or trying to die instead of clop or happy things =].
The story is great so far, just last part was a bit forced, and I will make sure to see how it finishes.

8855553 If you're looking for a dark, depressing story, check out my story, Dark Sunset.

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The force is strong in this ship... Their Jedis, twilight can levitate and sunset is the best lie detector ever.

9217868 Just one of the reasons that I like it.

Damn that was really hot 😳

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If you think that was hot, check out the sequel.

Took me a second to realize where this was placed.

XD Oh Pinkie.

And so it begins...

oh my fucking god i can't breathe...help :rainbowlaugh:

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u aint the only one 🤣

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