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Francium Actinium

Writing and reading has been something I've always enjoyed. So, after reading the original Fallout Equestria by KKat, I felt compelled to write my own Fic!


People rarely consider their actions, even less consider the consequences. Teenagers especially. So caught up in their own world with their friends, feelings, and social media that they forget to consider the effects they might have on others. A lie here. A shove there. A persons worst moments laid bare.

Being a Teacher-In-Training, one young woman sees it every day at Crystal Prep among the Students in her charge. Some have it worse than others, but so long as they have friends to pull them up again, it is alright in the end.

When asked to be a substitute at Canterlot High, she is eager to show everyone what she can do, yet she barely makes it through the doors before something feels wrong.

--- While not overtly dark, this story is rated Teen for implications, emotionally difficult and potentially upsetting content! Please take care! ---

My thanks to Between Lines for being my Pre-Reader on this story!

Cover art kindly donated by Scampy!

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 30 )

Looking like Anon-a-miss happened, and it didn't go well. While I want this to be one of the few "Sunset went home" endings to that story, well the title doesn't give me much hope. Wallflower did drop at least the possibility of it, but I'm not going to hold my breath.

I have to say, this story has me intrigued.

However, I do have one question. How come we didn't SEE Sunset's first class as a sub? Also, HOW was she permitted to be a sub? Shouldn't Celestia have seen those similarities and told Cinch not to send her?

It just feels like we're missing the beginning of the story.

Think she died, maybe....maybe...

Everything is pointing too it, well nearly everything. Wallflower reaction gives me a very faint hope. But I could very easily be grasping for something that isn't there.

Well, this is depressing. Good, but depressing. I'm curious about how everything is going to be explained to Native Sunset, but what I am really looking forward to is the aftermath of that whole debacle. Who among the Mane Six are still talking to each other, just how bad are the fractures in the student body, and how exactly is Wallflower going to take this whole event. All of that leading up to the coup de gras; can the students at Canterlot High receive some modicum of closure through the up coming events?
It really hurt to see everyone (especially the CMC) so broken. All I can do is hope for a happy ending, but I will brace for melancholy and depression.

9896197 Hey, I'm glad you are following along.
In short, Celestia never meets her beforehand. She just goes on Cinchs word of this persons skills. As for why she can continue, sending her away would raise a lot of questions, and she is needed to be a substitute.
As for why I didn't write her lesson, i felt it would have been a lot of words to say very little.
Hopefully that answers your questions :twilightsmile:

Well, you got me hooked. I'm hoping this is a "Sunset left" and not a "Sunset died" AU, but I'm not very optimistic about it...:fluttercry:

It does answer it, but it still doesn't explain why.

Tell me, have you ever heard the phrase "show, don't tell?"

9897209 Yes I have. I didn't feel it was necessary to include as part of the story I'm telling.

And that's where I think you are in error.

Think of a story like a series of causes and effects. In order for the story to make sense, you need to show these causes and effects taking place.

Effect: Sunset is wallowing in her home. Okay, so, what was the cause?

Imagine if the story began with Sunset walking into that first class, feeling all excited about getting this opportunity and not wanting to let it slip her by, however, she is late. She rushed through the halls, stressing about how bad a first impression it would be to show up late on her first day, she runs down the halls, not noticing the strange looks she's getting from a few stragglers, until finally she reaches the classroom. Then, she begins to start the lesson, however, once she turns around to address the students, they all look like they've seen a ghost. Mouths agape. Sunset is quite puzzled at this and questions if there's something on her face. Then, Apple Bloom (or someone else) faints.

Smash cut to later, when Twilight comes running to comfort her.

This would allow us to become acquainted with this version of Sunset Shimmer since we do not have any idea of her background or who she is, something that is crucial if she is going to be a main character in this story.

However, alternatively, you could have switched the point of view. Imagine starting off with Apple Bloom arriving to class, already knowing there's a sub. She and another classmate could strike up a random conversation, let us get acclimated to the world this story inhabits, then the plot begins when Sunset comes in late. Apple Bloom suddenly goes into panic mode. Her heart skips a beat, and she thinks it can't be real. But it is, Sunset Shimmer is standing right there, and she faints.

Then, we can smash cut to Principal Celestia's scene with the Humane Six, and then cut to Sci-Twi rushing home to comfort Sunset.

Each of these alternate scenarios allows us to be introduced to this story's world and let readers get settled in before the plot is thrown at them. You know how Avengers: Endgame was such an amazing movie on its own, because the whole first act of the movie was dedicated to showing how the world was impacted by Thanos' actions five years after they happened and they stuck with it. They didn't just start with Ant-Man returning from the Quantum realm and proposing the time heist. Doing that would miss the audience the opportunity to get used to the Post-Snap world, just like how readers need to be introduced to THIS version of Sunset. We need to know her before we can care about what's happening to her.

I apologize if this might come off as blunt, but I say this as somebody who LOVES stories and the ideas that they can explore. I really want this story to live up to its full potential, and I just want to show you, respectfully, why I believe skipping that scene is a bad idea. I'm glad you want to share this story with the world, but I'm hoping that with my words, I can play just a small part in this story becoming something that people will remember and come back to for months, years, to come.

You have my interest and I really want to see where this goes. Great job

This has me excited, the only other story I can think of that is similar to this only had two chapters, and also involved a Sunset teaching at Canterlot after AaM and Sunset's death. But that is long dead, no pun intended.

I'm greatly looking forward to the next chapter!

Hooooooly heck you have my attention. This is a super interesting concept that somehow hasn't been done yet. While most AAM fics that involve suicide are shallow and awful, this is the opposite. You're treating that heavy subject with the respect and care it deserves.

The characterization is top-notch too. The only thing I'm not a fan of is the Flutterdash post-shipping stuff, if only cuz thusfar it seems pretty irrelevant. Not a deal breaker by any means, though. I'm super excited to see this continue.

And you included my girl Wally! I love her and I love how it's implied she made the memorial for Sunset. She's such a pure and perfect and precious angel and she needs to be cherished and protected okay? I only like stories where Wallflower is overflowing with joy and love, and I'd never write something about her unless it
was full of happy things. Only happy things. Only happy.

9900677 Thank you! I'm really glad you are hooked! I didn't know if the idea had been done before, I suspected it had though so I am surprised that there only seems to have been a few other attempts. :pinkiesad2:

The Flutter-Dash is there to begin showing the effects and rifts that were created by events, and there are reasons for this. As for Wall Flower, she seemed suited to that part and it fitted well with a place to have memorial. :twilightsmile:

another good chapter keep it up


Damn. This was very heavy.

So, is Twilight ACTUALLY going to destroy her research?

This was really good. Amazing chapter.

This is so sad...i was hoping hoping that....maybe I was wrong and Sunset went back home.

Sighs...so what happens next?

Honestly, i doubt that.

Sci-Twi is going to do something stupid, and this Sunset might just pay the price.

This was all the right kinds of painful.

The cadence of events was laid out perfectly to answer all the questions from Chapter 1 without seeming like exposition. The hints of gruesome detail like the blood on Sunset's journal add so much to an already heart-wrenching scene. If she had it when she was on the roof, did she write something in it before she fell? A suicide note to Twilight? This whole chapter is sad answers, yet still creates so many more sad questions.

And as always, great writing. The descriptions and dialogue are on-point.

Great chapter.
However I see the princesses action having the oppiset effect. Instead making things way worse.

Well, this is amazing. I can't wait for the next update!

Ah, I had wondered what was fueling the extra level of bitterness Princess Twilight was displaying, and it would appear we have seen it.

Also, Human Twilight really should have known better.

Being a Teacher-In-Training, one young woman sees it every day at Crystal Prep among the Students in her charge. Some have it worse than others, but so long as they have friends to pull them up again, it is alright in the end.

When asked to be a substitute at Canterlot High, she is eager to show everyone what she can do, yet she barely makes it through the doors before something feels wrong.

But, in that case, wouldn't it make more sense to have her teach at Crystal Prep?

This is Bull!~ Rainbow should be reported and the other attackers brought in to be ARRESTED!

Dude this makes me want to cry.

Well, [BEEP]. This is an interesting twist.

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