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Broman


A guy who loves to create stories and has a big imagination. Also wishes to become a famous Actor and Director.

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A human named Kelly can only watch as Fluttershy and her friends are forced into a rap battle.

As the Title suggests, its a rap battle of History between the Mane six.

Edited: So after some careful thought, and not wanting to get my story flagged or getting negative feedback, the rap sequence has been changed drastically to suit this and that there would be no further damage. I took the liberty in ensuring this was fixed, as to some of those in the comment section have stated, and I've personally took a hand in this and made this change. I apologize profusely for any inconvenience, but I wish to make it up so that I didn't do a bad story to give to you all.

So please, forgive me for any wrongdoing and please let me know what you all think of the story now.

~Broman
Rated teen for some language.

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Comments ( 17 )
JackRipper
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You are more dumber than our friend Rainbow Dash.

*even dumber

"More dumber" is grammatically redundant, not to mention ironic coming from her. :unsuresweetie:

8150093 I made the fix, thanks for telling me.

Haha! Wow, I really liked this story, and those raps were amazing! Good work! :pinkiehappy:

Is it strange that i was hoping for Spike to drop in and destroy everything with a rap? Like him just dropping in and pulling a Busta Rhymes wii shop theme rap. Yeah? Alright. Good story! Keep it up!

Even if you're doing a paraody you need to change the source material more. You took some lines verbatim even when they made no sense in context.

This wasn't bad it just needed more work.

8150114 Thank you. :twilightsmile:

8150245 Thanks for that, also I actually wasn't thinking of putting spike in at the time when this was being made. It was just made on the fly.

8150492 I understand, I should have put that it was a parody, but a fun parody no less.

Been dkne to death already, and as someone else pointed out plagiarism. You can't use verbatim lyrics from copyrighted material.

8150523 "cooked up for a number of months" or "on the fly", which is it

8150886 This was made over a few months but I only recently got back to it to finish it up. Also I did made the change that this is a parody rap and I apologize with any inconvenience you may have with this story.

WelI I cringed hard.

8152172 That means you don't have any excuse for it being this bad.
Parody doesn't save you, I'm afraid. As per site rules you cannot verbatim use copyrighted lyrics from any source.

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8150492
Alright, since I clearly see the rules now, and that I've made the mistake in doing this whole thing off the original song in the first place. I've spent the last few hours rearranging and making it better. (Nearly took me half the day when I first saw the feedback.) The original one has been removed, and now everything flows better.

I hope this will be better for you all.

8151026 Thanks again. Also, check the reedited version. Made some changes, but I think this is better then the original.

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You're welcome, again. :rainbowlaugh: I'll check the re-edited version tonight, and I'll take your word for it. :pinkiesmile:

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