Spike is still mad at Diamond Tiara after what she did to the CMC, so Diamond Tiara decides to do something to make it up.
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Excuse my tongue but what kind of a dipshit would steal a baby in broad fucking daylight
Anyway you have a nice start, felt a bit rushed but the idea of the story is interesting. This show is entering it's 7-8th year of being out and no one knows where Spike comes from so it isn't a stretch to think that his parents got the same treatment as Applejack's folk (we don't even know if they're dead but we are pretty damn certain)
Your sentence structure is a bit wonky too. Like here:
I mean it could work if they were separate sentences or you can combine them as such...
"The ponies cheered for Diamond Tiara is if he were a great hero."
And here the sentence is structured pretty well. I feel like there should be a period instead of a comma.
So I am not giving a thumbs up or down but I will add this to my shelves. You can say I have a thing for the little guy
Also...
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7954777 Someone in the show staff stated Big Mac, Aj and AB parents are dead.
A side from some grammar mistake this story is pretty good. I would love to see many more of your wrting.
RIP garble
Does spike get punished?