Haven't been on since about 2014. Nearly 10 years have passed, and I'm back here. What a time.
The Elements of Harmony will find a battle they cannot win over time. But what if that battle is between themselves? Will they be able to find what they need and work together correctly? Will even Twilight's leadership not be enough for what they need to do?
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Where to begin...
First off, if this is your first fic, wonderful job. However, Twi's reading of the ingredients seem to be a little... lacking. Also, I was expecting shock, disgust, repulsion, or some mix of them all when she said the final two. But no, they all just take it like it's just another ordinary item on a shopping list.
When you say "wing for a pegasus" and "horn for a unicorn" do you mean from them? Or for them? Is Twi planning to create a pegasus and unicorn? Is she planning to create past feelings from Dash and Rarity? The mind can only wonder.
My only criticism is rather unclear in detail, but otherwise it's a very good start.
P.S. First.
>>Moonless Sky
Thank you for your information, and yeah, I was slightly rushed at night to get that part done, and never really looked over it too much, never crossed my mind. I suppose, lesson learned.
But what I mean by "Wing for a pegasus" and "Horn for a Unicorn" it means taking those objects directly from another pony. And I was kinda disappointed myself with the last ingredients, but I figured something weird would be pretty neat, but yeah. First story. I suppose I could have used a heart, but I guess that would be a little much for any of them to do. In my mind at least.
And of course, the reading of the ingredients, a little wacky yeah. Thanks for the information however, and I do hope to improve!
- Sorin
Ah would like ta say that ah've been workin' hard on ma story fer y'all.
I mean... Too much Applejack talk... Anyways. I've been a little slower lately, figuring out what I could bring out next. I would also like to NOTE: The OC's will come in next chapter. I'm just waiting for my friend to finish what he's doing. "He's being picky."
For those of you that stayed PAST the fairly horrible first chapter: I am planning on there to be an update or a new chapter every 3 to 4 days.
Thank you. Sorin
I would like to give a big shout-out to my friend: Joshua!
He helped me write the last part of the chapter by writing down a bit himself. I simply fixed up what I found, and tossed it in there.
I hope it mixed as well as I thought it did, because I added tidbits in-between.
I give a
and a big thank you to everyone that read this story, and a big thank you to my friend for helping me make the last chapter!
Sorin
Im fine without the detailed part.Great story so far
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I'm fine without the detailed part as well. Thanks!
Good thing you haven't seen my off-story. Sorin
PRESENT TENSE!!! WHYYYYYY!!! Still I like the story
I don't know how to promote stories, but I figure a thumbs up and a favorite cant hurt
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Thank you so much! That means a lot to me.
Sorin
Dun dun dun.